Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

At least, dear writer, he doesn't have to use the old cloth diaper with the real pins.

Good poem. I'm glad you told me diaper is three syllables. I thought he was changing a two syllable variety.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014

Diapering is so much easier than fifty years ago.

Comment from ProSongwriter

Excellent

Hi!

What a great mix of humor and sadness. The humor is obvious. The sadness is the mere fact that the new dad has a hangover. But such a task in such a state would be humorous to watch, as long as the baby didn't get stuck or otherwise hurt. Very nice characterization!!! Good luck to you in the contest,

Alan

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 Comment Written 15-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014

Thanks, Alan. At least they don't use safety pins anymore.

reply by ProSongwriter on 15-Aug-2014

You're welcome. And the disappearance of safety pins form diapers is a good thing! Again, good luck.

Comment from Patti R.

Excellent

This is a very humorous senryu! What amuses me the most is the look on the baby's face! Excellent choice of photo! High anxiety - not often found at the diaper change table, but oh yes, in this case...excellent.

Patti

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 Comment Written 15-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014

Glad you got the pun, Patti. What's more it's high on both sides.