Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

gorgeous presentation of your poem, which is in good haiku form
great alliteration in snake slithers/scorching/sands/sidewinder
vivid descriptive detail with strong sensory appeal, not limited to the visual
Brooke

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014

Thanks, Brooke, for the wonderful, detailed review on this reptile haiku. Do appreciate all your comments ... ;)

Comment from Pyrrho

Excellent

I thought a side winder was a windup doll with the winder on its hip. These 17 word nearly poems should require only 17 words in a review.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2014

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

This is what I would class as a hidden missile in this competition, it's like the Mother in Law, you know she's coming, but there's nothing you can do about it! Great haiku my friend, good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014

Thanks. Glad you liked this reptile haiku. Appreciate your thoughts ... ;)

reply by Eric1 on 11-Aug-2014

you're very welcome my friend.

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

This bad boy is bugging in a hurry. Must be someone wanting a good meal. Great eating with lots of catsup. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014

Thanks. Don't know how they taste , probably better with ketchup. They do move very fast and are poisonous so it's best to let a professional catch it. Appreciate your comments ... ;)

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Good entry of the contest with a bonus of abundant and artistic alliteration and consonance of S, which is esssspecially befitting, as the sibilant s sounds SOUND like the snake hiss. Superb word economy, too, with a clever single-word satori. Fine presentation as well. Bravo and good luck!

Warmly, rd


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 Comment Written 10-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014

Thanks for the wonderful, detailed review, rd. Appreciate you pointing out all the poetic devices used in this haiku.
Glad you liked it! ... ;)

reply by rama devi on 11-Aug-2014

:-)))

Comment from mbagby23

Excellent

I like and don't like snakes. I had a pet snake for a little while. I was ok with it but I made to feed it mice and scared the snake or the mice might get out. Enjoyed the poem.

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 Comment Written 10-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this haiku, and could relate since you had a pet snake. Appreciate your comments ... ;o)