Tiny Terrors
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "One Final Kiss"A collection of short horror fiction
40 total reviews
Comment from joann r romei
This was very funny, it sure was the kiss of death for sure, The way it was written was a bit distracting, No errors noted in the short piece.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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This was very funny, it sure was the kiss of death for sure, The way it was written was a bit distracting, No errors noted in the short piece.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Yeah, well, it is for a 100 word dash story, so there is that (you must tell a complete story in 100 words or less).
Thanks
Comment from tfawcus
Why is it, I wonder, that teenagers tempt the fates with such utter disregard? Perhaps they need to prove their immortality! You put an amusing spin on a the self-destructiveness of the young.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Why is it, I wonder, that teenagers tempt the fates with such utter disregard? Perhaps they need to prove their immortality! You put an amusing spin on a the self-destructiveness of the young.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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You nailed it, just the meaning I was trying to get across. I knew you were a smart cookie! Now, was that so hard to figure out?
Geesh!
Comment from victor 66
I loved the macabre and shock value at the end of your story. It's strange, I can watch horror movies half the night, and I sleep like a baby. I'll read your 100 word story before bed tonight, to make sure I get a good night's sleep. Best wishes, Dean.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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I loved the macabre and shock value at the end of your story. It's strange, I can watch horror movies half the night, and I sleep like a baby. I'll read your 100 word story before bed tonight, to make sure I get a good night's sleep. Best wishes, Dean.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, victor. I am the same way. As for the contest, I lost by a vote.
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Sorry about the losing by one vote. When it gets that close, I just see it as a crap shoot. My last entry in a contest, I received five votes but lost by seven. you always seem to be a 'contender' most of the time and it is not uncommon for you to win. you're writing is very good. I still don't know what appeals to the reader, but I seem to do best when I write something to which I'm committed and feel confident. Notice how I turned this around from 'being about you' to being about me. Looking forward to your next entry. Will try to watch the booths a little closer. Best wishes, Dean.
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Okay, Victor.
Comment from Muffins
This just proves that some teenagers are thick as a wet towel. Really, she wanted to find out what kissing the Grimm Reaper was like? I want to know what books she's read. Thank goodness, her friend had more sense.
In 100 words your horror/fantasy take on the kiss of death is expertly written and exceeding violent with class. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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This just proves that some teenagers are thick as a wet towel. Really, she wanted to find out what kissing the Grimm Reaper was like? I want to know what books she's read. Thank goodness, her friend had more sense.
In 100 words your horror/fantasy take on the kiss of death is expertly written and exceeding violent with class. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Romeo & Juliette, Wuthering Heights, and Edgar Allen Poe's Greatest Hits, just to name a few she might have read. Many teens are curious about death and their own mortality. Ever heard of erotic asphyxiation? No. Google it, you may be surprised at what you read.
As for the contest, it's over. I lost by one vote.
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Yes, I heard of it. And I read all the books you mentioned but as a teen I was never curious about death. Instead, it scared me.
Comment from amada
An interesting tale in 100 words. I don't quite get it, confused on the names, Samantha< a guy? These modern names that go for male and females! Great twist at the end. Awesome artwork.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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An interesting tale in 100 words. I don't quite get it, confused on the names, Samantha< a guy? These modern names that go for male and females! Great twist at the end. Awesome artwork.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Samantha, here in the United States at least, is never a boy, amada. I've never met a guy named Samantha yet, so I'm not sure where the confusion came into play. I did hear a song about a girl named Sue once, though...
Comment from GWHARGIS
Only you could come up with this. It was romantic and wistful, full of angst and hope. Then you kill the girl. Love to read your stuff. People tell me I don't know how to write a happy ending...I'm going to let them read your stuff. LOL. This was a winner for sure.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Only you could come up with this. It was romantic and wistful, full of angst and hope. Then you kill the girl. Love to read your stuff. People tell me I don't know how to write a happy ending...I'm going to let them read your stuff. LOL. This was a winner for sure.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Well, no, it wasn't a winner, GWHARGIS. If more people who felt as you did about the story had bothered to vote, it probably would have. I lost by one vote, but I'm happy to know that you liked it, at least, and you "get it"! That's the main thing, you get it. It wasn't too difficult to understand, now, was it?
I didn't thing so either. The winner was far more confusing to me.
Comment from adewpearl
I'm laughing my head off at the play on words with business is dead, meaning slow business and the literal occurrence here where the customer is actually dead
Great premise that the Grim Reaper is manning a kissing booth LOL
Wonderful gallows humor :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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I'm laughing my head off at the play on words with business is dead, meaning slow business and the literal occurrence here where the customer is actually dead
Great premise that the Grim Reaper is manning a kissing booth LOL
Wonderful gallows humor :-) Brooke
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Brooke. At least you and I thought it was funny, and that's good enough for me. I love gallows humor, don't you?
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I have loved gallows humor all my life :-)
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I wish at least one more voter had. I don't believe I'll be participating in any more contests for a while. They're too expensive.
Comment from Nosha17
A well-written piece of flash fiction, but of course, being me, I don't like the ending. I only like happy endings, my son calls me cheesy! Good dialogue, element of surprise, well related. Enjoyable read (apart from the end line!)Great illustration and good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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A well-written piece of flash fiction, but of course, being me, I don't like the ending. I only like happy endings, my son calls me cheesy! Good dialogue, element of surprise, well related. Enjoyable read (apart from the end line!)Great illustration and good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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I lost, Faye, but thanks anyhow.
Comment from mfowler
Oooh! This is a case of kiss and no tell! Well, from the poor girl that is. The Grimm certainly didn't mind sharing. Your wonderful sense of the macabre and ability to set up a narrative of horror so easily, make this an amazing 100 words. Let me guess, you were inspired by that idiom: the kiss of death.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Oooh! This is a case of kiss and no tell! Well, from the poor girl that is. The Grimm certainly didn't mind sharing. Your wonderful sense of the macabre and ability to set up a narrative of horror so easily, make this an amazing 100 words. Let me guess, you were inspired by that idiom: the kiss of death.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Yep, you got it, Mark. I couldn't name it that, obviously, it would have been too apparent. I'm glad you got it, at least...thanks.
Comment from Bill Schott
This is an interesting twist on the the 'kiss of Death' idea. I counted 97 words, probably because I counted the hyphenated ones as one. Funny final line.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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This is an interesting twist on the the 'kiss of Death' idea. I counted 97 words, probably because I counted the hyphenated ones as one. Funny final line.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Bill. I just go with whatever FanStory's word counter says. My word counter said 97 words as well.