Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 47 "Written In The Stars"The clue is in the title!
23 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 'tumbler' tells a sad but entertaining story. The approach is simple and the story in the poem takes center stage to the word change.
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This 'tumbler' tells a sad but entertaining story. The approach is simple and the story in the poem takes center stage to the word change.
Comment Written 31-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you Bill for your great feedback. Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from LoannaLois
What a poignant tumbling words poem...and I am hoping it is of someone else.... You came up with a theme that lent itself to the tumble...and did it beautifully.
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What a poignant tumbling words poem...and I am hoping it is of someone else.... You came up with a theme that lent itself to the tumble...and did it beautifully.
Comment Written 31-May-2014
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Thank you so much LoannaLois :) I appreciate your lovely feedback. Thankfully the poem isn't biographical :) Kindest regards as always, Debra x
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a beautiful expression of lost love and a very good example of the writing style being highlighted for the contest. It flows wonderfully and the message was not stilted or forced at all. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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This is a beautiful expression of lost love and a very good example of the writing style being highlighted for the contest. It flows wonderfully and the message was not stilted or forced at all. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 31-May-2014
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Thank you so much MysticAngel for your great review and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from Mark Valentine
This was a very challenging (and fun) contest.That you were able to meet the "tumbling words" requirment and also add rhyme and meter (while writing a coherent poem) is extra impressive. Good luck in the contest
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This was a very challenging (and fun) contest.That you were able to meet the "tumbling words" requirment and also add rhyme and meter (while writing a coherent poem) is extra impressive. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 31-May-2014
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LOL! Thanks Mark - I also found it very challenging - it hurt my brain! Thank you for your good luck wishes also :) Kindest regards as always, Debra
Comment from Leineco
Nicely done, seamless and un-intrusive use of the tumbling thing :-)
Which means - nice poem, I didn't even notice there was any hint of manipulation by form requirements. I thought it was just poetry!
Good luck in the contest :-)
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Nicely done, seamless and un-intrusive use of the tumbling thing :-)
Which means - nice poem, I didn't even notice there was any hint of manipulation by form requirements. I thought it was just poetry!
Good luck in the contest :-)
Comment Written 30-May-2014
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Hi lorraine :) Thanks for your great review and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Cheers for now! Debs x
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
you have managed the tumbling words well and not forced to block flow of verses
good couplet rhyme through verses
yes love sometimes last forever and some fails
cheers..Smoothiecool
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good luck in the contest
you have managed the tumbling words well and not forced to block flow of verses
good couplet rhyme through verses
yes love sometimes last forever and some fails
cheers..Smoothiecool
Comment Written 30-May-2014
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Hi Faye :) Thank you for your lovely review and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
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most welcome Debra
have a blessed day
cheers..SC >> Faye
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Oh, this is wonderful. You obviously had a clear understanding of the poem requirements and carried it out well. This is clever and a lovely poem to read, with good rhyming as well. Good luck.
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Oh, this is wonderful. You obviously had a clear understanding of the poem requirements and carried it out well. This is clever and a lovely poem to read, with good rhyming as well. Good luck.
Comment Written 30-May-2014
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Thank you so much Giddy for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from risktaker
Every relationship is a risk. There is no guarantee as to how long the love will last. Once a person decides they no longer want to be with you, the relationship is over whether you are ready or not. Relationships last when both people commit and decide at the same time that they want to be together. The love will stay in your hear but the person will no longer be physically present in your life.
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Every relationship is a risk. There is no guarantee as to how long the love will last. Once a person decides they no longer want to be with you, the relationship is over whether you are ready or not. Relationships last when both people commit and decide at the same time that they want to be together. The love will stay in your hear but the person will no longer be physically present in your life.
Comment Written 29-May-2014
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Thank you risk taker for your great feedback :) Kindest regards, Debra
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Comment from krys123
Debra, first of all good luck in this contest this is a good entry. I enjoyed his home which was really uplifting and promising so much inspiration and enlightening aspects to a relationship. I found your rhyming to be done very well in either of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained and your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem. Thank you for sharing and posting this for others and may you have a good one as always.
Alex
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Debra, first of all good luck in this contest this is a good entry. I enjoyed his home which was really uplifting and promising so much inspiration and enlightening aspects to a relationship. I found your rhyming to be done very well in either of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained and your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem. Thank you for sharing and posting this for others and may you have a good one as always.
Alex
Comment Written 29-May-2014
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Hi Alex :) Thank you for your good luck wishes and lovely feedback. I appreciate both! Kindest regards as always, Debra
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You are so sincerely welcome Debra
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the poem. Love is hard to kill, Even though the other party does not love you anymore. Sometimes love has to die slowly, even though it hurts quit a bit. Great work.
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I love the poem. Love is hard to kill, Even though the other party does not love you anymore. Sometimes love has to die slowly, even though it hurts quit a bit. Great work.
Comment Written 29-May-2014
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Thank you so much Ellie for your great feedback :) Kindest regards as always, Debra