A Tear's Worth
free verse28 total reviews
Comment from ravenblack
One tear from a man schooled on the John Wayne mentality that real men don't cry may mean a lot and may also be all you can get. "No exclamations..."- frustrating. His inability to really show emotion stands in stark contrast to the building emotion of the poem. Like the short lines, the form it takes down the page, dropping like one tear.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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One tear from a man schooled on the John Wayne mentality that real men don't cry may mean a lot and may also be all you can get. "No exclamations..."- frustrating. His inability to really show emotion stands in stark contrast to the building emotion of the poem. Like the short lines, the form it takes down the page, dropping like one tear.
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments and for mentioning the form. I debated about doing it as a teardrop or just leaving it left justified with longer lines. Thank you for the insights about one tear meaning a lot. You are right about the tough guy one tear says so much. Thanks for stopping by and offering such encouraging comments. Debi
Comment from Benny Beeharry
A tear is all you need.
If it is a tear of joy, then you ought to be happy he is back.
If it is a tear of sadness ,then you ought to understand that he does not want to go, he wants you to tell him to stay?
Did you?
I love this cute writing. Plus its meaning ,it is simple ,straightforward and goes straight to the heart.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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A tear is all you need.
If it is a tear of joy, then you ought to be happy he is back.
If it is a tear of sadness ,then you ought to understand that he does not want to go, he wants you to tell him to stay?
Did you?
I love this cute writing. Plus its meaning ,it is simple ,straightforward and goes straight to the heart.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the encouraging review. It means a lot coming from someone who writes such masterful free verse. I like your romantic interpretation. It seems they were meant to be together.
Comment from LIJ Red
Nice spindle shape. Turned on a lathe? excellent.
Crocodiles, they say, weep as they prepare to devour someone. "my wife she died, oh then (repeat twice) and I laughed till I cried to think I was single again."
(old song)
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Nice spindle shape. Turned on a lathe? excellent.
Crocodiles, they say, weep as they prepare to devour someone. "my wife she died, oh then (repeat twice) and I laughed till I cried to think I was single again."
(old song)
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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A fun review that made me smile. Watch out for the crocodiles!
Comment from GracieAnn
w.j., this is a intensely creative free verse write that is powerful in both presentation and thought process. It is a bold statement of the question of sincerity in love. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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w.j., this is a intensely creative free verse write that is powerful in both presentation and thought process. It is a bold statement of the question of sincerity in love. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 28-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you so much for the encouraging review, GracieAnn. I hesitate posting free verse so it is good to hear you enjoyed it. Maybe I'll get brace and try another. God bless. Debi
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
You are absolutely right, a single tear can mean so many different things. Some good and some not so good. Great job with this friend
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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You are absolutely right, a single tear can mean so many different things. Some good and some not so good. Great job with this friend
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the encouraging comments and your insights. I appreciate it. Debi
Comment from JB Lynn
I feel for the narrator in this poem. It can be so difficult to gauge what that tear might mean. The emotion might be small or great. Perhaps the other person is trying to be strong and hold back the tears? Or maybe that's all they've got to give. Human emotions are so complex. The narrator's confusion is clearly felt. Great job! Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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I feel for the narrator in this poem. It can be so difficult to gauge what that tear might mean. The emotion might be small or great. Perhaps the other person is trying to be strong and hold back the tears? Or maybe that's all they've got to give. Human emotions are so complex. The narrator's confusion is clearly felt. Great job! Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Thank you for an encouraging review. I appreciate the insight you share as well. Debi
Comment from Spitfire
What a perfect format for this content. The lines expands and contracts consistent with thought. A tear can mean so many things--beautiful with the follow-up details. Powerful ending. Much to ponder here.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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What a perfect format for this content. The lines expands and contracts consistent with thought. A tear can mean so many things--beautiful with the follow-up details. Powerful ending. Much to ponder here.
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the encouraging comments about the writing, Spitfire, especially about the form. I was experimenting with something new so I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from c_lucas
"Goodbye" would have gotten the point across more clearly. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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"Goodbye" would have gotten the point across more clearly. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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So true. Goodbye wouud have been much more clear. Thank you for the encouraging review. I appreciate you stopping by.
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you're welcome, WJ. Charlie
Comment from harmony13
Excellent poem! The poem flowed and connected well. The author's words are strong, clear and thought provoking.
The reader pondered on this poem. The artwork is perfect and enhances the read.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Excellent poem! The poem flowed and connected well. The author's words are strong, clear and thought provoking.
The reader pondered on this poem. The artwork is perfect and enhances the read.
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I am pleased to know that you liked it well encounters to ponder for a moment. That is high praise. Thank you.
Comment from livelylinda
w.j.debi: sometimes simple is so great. . .and this poem is one of them. I particularly liked the last stanza about the one tear from the other, mixing with all of yours. Very nicely done. livelylinda
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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w.j.debi: sometimes simple is so great. . .and this poem is one of them. I particularly liked the last stanza about the one tear from the other, mixing with all of yours. Very nicely done. livelylinda
Comment Written 27-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you so much for the kind words, livelylinda. I don't feel free verse is my strong point so I hesitate posting it, but I need feedback to get better. I find your comments encouraging. I appreciate you pointing out what you liked and making me smile. Debi