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Poetry and Stories from the Bible

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Comment from kiwijenny
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I love this story and how well you prepared it for us ...
Jonah was trying to run away from God...this is a good lesson for this age...I think there are many Jonah's running around....you can tell they have whale spit on them:o)
God bless

 Comment Written 21-May-2014


reply by the author on 22-May-2014
    That is funny, whale spit. I have a feeling if some got swallowed the Lord would just let them stay there. LOL I appreciate your fine comments and so glad you liked Jonah.
    :-) Carolyn
Comment from krys123
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Carolyn, a truly dignifying and inspirational along with stimulating piece of poetry with a good moral and with an excellent proverbial context. Your rhyming was exceptional in your couplets and neither of them were forced, labored or strained all over some of your rhythm even though it was good need a little bit more or better tempo or meter if that's what you are looking for. Your interpretation of Jonah and the well was most humanizing and artistic and description and imagery was exceptional. Thanks for sharing and posting and may you have a good one.
Alex

 Comment Written 21-May-2014


reply by the author on 22-May-2014
    Thanks Alex, I will take a look at 'tightening my tempo' a bit.
    :-), I appreciate your fine comments and suggestions and am delighted you liked Jonah. Love, Carolyn
reply by krys123 on 22-May-2014
    Your sincerely welcome Carolyn
Comment from donette1914
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God really humbled Jonah and that helped him come back to his sences and he started to trust God and obeyed him. very nice poem of Jonah well done

 Comment Written 21-May-2014


reply by the author on 22-May-2014
    Thanks donette1914,
    I appreciate your fine comments. That would be humbling indeed to pray from the belly of a whale. So glad you enjoyed Jonah.
    :-) Carolyn
Comment from Benny Beeharry
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Incidentally your writing brings the same message the poem I have just posted. How so very nice.

How many people repent in this world.
How many care.
There is so much destruction going on and so much killing.
Very good writing.
I have not had time to review lately because my wife is not very well ..she is asthmatic, and coughs a great deal.
I just posted the writing for the fans and will promote it tomorrow.

 Comment Written 21-May-2014


reply by the author on 22-May-2014
    Hi there Benny,
    I am sorry to hear your wife is ill. You both have been through a lot. Sometimes you just have to collapse for a while.
    BTW: I ordered your book tonight. So excited, can't wait to get it.
    Thank for reviewing Jonah, Glad you liked it., :-) Carolyn
Comment from Nosha17
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I liked your Bible story in a poem, it refreshed my memory. You made good use of language and rhyme to convey your spiritual message. It was a smooth and enjoyable read, super pic, too.

 Comment Written 21-May-2014


reply by the author on 22-May-2014
    Thanks Nosha17,
    I appreciate your fine comments and generous rating, I am glad you liked Jonah. :-) Carolyn
Comment from angelface2
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Hi Carolyn. I am back and happy to be reading poetry once again. Love this poem about Jonah and the whale. A lesson to learn from it. Lovely. So glad to be back! I did enjoy the visit with my daughters. I stayed with Jody, but saw Karen for about 3 hours one day. We had a good talk. For the most part, she was working when I was there. HUGS. Sally

 Comment Written 21-May-2014


reply by the author on 22-May-2014
    Missed you Sally, so glad you are back and that you had a wonderful time with your daughters. Thanks for reading and commenting on Jonah. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Tomes Johnston
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This is a very interesting take on the Bible story in poetic form. There is a moral in the tale for all of us. We must trust in God and believe that we can achieve the impossible. That's the way that I am trying to live my life.

 Comment Written 21-May-2014


reply by the author on 22-May-2014
    With God all things are possible, Matthew 19:26, I always appreciate your comments Tom. :-) Carolyn
reply by Tomes Johnston on 22-May-2014
    Thank you
Comment from 9999pool
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In life, many get to do unusual and difficult jobs too.
I know someone here who works in the Hospice - a dreary and hopeless place where some patients await their deaths.
In such a deplorable and live-less place, who can stand working in such conditions?
But God had a special mission for them. To help those in pain get over their grief. She had to smile for them despite her own problems.
My friend and i have over 25 stray cats and kittens in the house and is still counting. Are we destined by God to save this poor helpless creatures? If so Why did i get a skin allergy, possibly from the strays. Should I then abandon them and put all of them to sleep for my own sake. I could not and God will not either. If I turned my back now, what will God tell me later or maybe put me in another whale's mouth, smiles?
Just follow our hearts and God will be with us all the way. Now into the sixth month of my allergy, the skin rashes are clearing fast and healing well. Should I complain to God - nope, not once did i pray for His help.
Now we have just just mated our pussy Garfield cat after 4-5 unsuccessful attempts as house cats may not know the exact mating game, lol.
Don't worry, rashes cannot kill me and neither should i fret because God has a kind heart for me now. Within those six months of suffering He rewarded me many times over and that's the truth. And what did the Bible said? Smiles.
If anyone believe that God has something for them to do, just do it irrespective of the fear and consequences - go with your heart.
Sorry for this rant but my true story will reinforced what you have written here, smiles.
Great write with a wonderful message, :))
Cheerio, bro Ritchie.

 Comment Written 21-May-2014


reply by the author on 22-May-2014
    I enjoy your ranting, so just carry on. LOL
    Glad your rash is better, 25 cats is a bit much if you have allergies, but I guess you are right, ya can't just toss 'em
    out 'cause they make ya itch. LOL
    I am so glad you liked Jonah, Love you Ritchie, :-) Carolyn
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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These are beautiful rhyming couplets which tell the story so very well. Your rhymes are so natural in this, not forced at all. A lovely write. Hugs~Debbie

 Comment Written 21-May-2014


reply by the author on 21-May-2014
    Thanks Debbie, I love the old testament and the wonderful lessons it still brings to us. I appreciate your comments my friend, Love, Carolyn
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi,

What a lovely poetic way to tell the story of Jonah! Beautifully done.

Blessings to you and yours.

Cheers,
Keep Smilin'... Jax

 Comment Written 21-May-2014


reply by the author on 21-May-2014
    Thanks Jax, Glad you liked it. :-) Carolyn