Senryu. Still
The Important Question24 total reviews
Comment from Charlene0513
The truth is always the gateway to a person's downfall if they sincerely have something to hide.
Darn if you do and darn it if you don't; the bug always catches up with you.
Charlene
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The truth is always the gateway to a person's downfall if they sincerely have something to hide.
Darn if you do and darn it if you don't; the bug always catches up with you.
Charlene
Comment Written 15-May-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
So simple so profound a question that everyone has asked at some time ...you just put it in a poem.....like a Japanese garden it is a single rose
God bless well done
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So simple so profound a question that everyone has asked at some time ...you just put it in a poem.....like a Japanese garden it is a single rose
God bless well done
Comment Written 15-May-2014
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu is working as a good question to ask before things get out of hand. This 5-7-5 format is well-done in its simplicity of human emotion.
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This senryu is working as a good question to ask before things get out of hand. This 5-7-5 format is well-done in its simplicity of human emotion.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
Comment from A Matter Of Words
The 5-7-5 form using human emotion as a theme has been met. Questioning a significant other's fidelity and the uncertainty it creates is very difficult to cope with. The message came through clearly. Good luck with your entry.
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The 5-7-5 form using human emotion as a theme has been met. Questioning a significant other's fidelity and the uncertainty it creates is very difficult to cope with. The message came through clearly. Good luck with your entry.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
Comment from Righteous Riter
Do you still love me
Or do you love another
I just need to know
Good complimentary photo. The syllable count is spot on. This piece is filled with questions asked by someone that been hurt. Clear, brief message that is to the point.
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Do you still love me
Or do you love another
I just need to know
Good complimentary photo. The syllable count is spot on. This piece is filled with questions asked by someone that been hurt. Clear, brief message that is to the point.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your line and syllable count spot on
your few words allow the reader to see and feel the message of do you still love me or another
cheers smoothiecool
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good luck in the contest
your line and syllable count spot on
your few words allow the reader to see and feel the message of do you still love me or another
cheers smoothiecool
Comment Written 15-May-2014
Comment from Jackarrie
Quite a simple poem, straight talking
Do you still love me
Or do you love another
I just need to know
all syllables are correct, good luck in the contest. Mary
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Quite a simple poem, straight talking
Do you still love me
Or do you love another
I just need to know
all syllables are correct, good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 15-May-2014
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I think this message is very straightforward. And it makes one think. I'm not sure how poetic it is but the message is clear and makes one think.
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I think this message is very straightforward. And it makes one think. I'm not sure how poetic it is but the message is clear and makes one think.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
Comment from judester
A difficult question to ask.... a hard answer to hear. A senryu of doubt and clarity. Good luck with this contest, Judester
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A difficult question to ask.... a hard answer to hear. A senryu of doubt and clarity. Good luck with this contest, Judester
Comment Written 15-May-2014
Comment from dmt1967
This is a question most people ask so it is easily unreliable very well written good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
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This is a question most people ask so it is easily unreliable very well written good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 15-May-2014