Comment from Val Crisson

Excellent

How true is this senyru? I feel writers are writers in the womb. This has a great presentation and a great message. "that excite a new" - is a great line.

 Comment Written 11-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Thanks a lot Val for pointing out what you like in this poem. I am honored, God bless.

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

writers are chisels
chipping age-old expressions
that excite anew

A Very creative and clever senyru. Great artwork to enhance your words.
Well done and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 11-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Thanks a lot Jmf4119 for considering this a clever senryu and very creative too. T am honored, God bless.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Such a true little poem. It is written in perfect senryu form with correct syllable count. Good luck in the contest.
~Teresa~

 Comment Written 11-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Thanks a lot Teresa for the five stars review. I do appreciate it, God bless.

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Poet,

You sure did an outstanding job in writing this Senryu poem. I really enjoyed the read. I also liked reading your author notes to find out how you got the idea to write this. I like the part that tells about the seed of creativity. Neat!

MizKat

 Comment Written 11-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Thanks a lot Mizkat for considering this senryu neat, and that I did an outstanding job. I am deeply honored. God bless.

Comment from zanya

Excellent

Yes an interesting look at the ancient craft -humans will always have an overwhelming urge to express their thoughts and feelings - great pic- i love the word 'chisels' here - it really captures the process - long and arduous and precise

 Comment Written 11-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Thanks a lot zanya for the positive, five stars review. I do appreciate it, God bless.

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

our few words and vivid image allows the reader to see and feel that writers are the chisels that chip away at the old language to bring it to life in a new way

cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 11-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

hanks a lot smoothiecool for the positive, five stars review. God bless.

reply by Smoothiecool on 15-May-2014

most welcome..SC

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Great way in which to chisel an old truism fresh- " everything has been said before, there is nothing new; it's all in how you say it"...which is where we poets come in.

 Comment Written 11-May-2014

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reply by the author on 11-May-2014

Thanks a lot ravenblack for appreciating my work, I value all your comments. God bless.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

Very cleaver and creative formatting with this one. Your poem was well in keeping with the pix. Well done.

Cheers
Keep Smilin'.... Jax

 Comment Written 11-May-2014

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reply by the author on 11-May-2014

Hi too Jax thanks for considering this poem well done, God bless.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

What a wonderfully written, deeply interesting senryu, Mystery Poet. that's is precisely what writers do, however. They take a topic or subject, one that has probably been pondered over and even written about more times than we could count, and put a new, unique spin on it.

You said quite a bit in 17 syllables here.

Well done, and best of luck to you in the prompt.

 Comment Written 11-May-2014

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reply by the author on 11-May-2014

Thanks Dean for the warm, insightful remarks. I do appreciate your positive, five star review. Thanks a bunch, God bless.

Comment from GWHARGIS

Exceptional

This was one of the best I've seen. The whole concept f taking what is considered a tired thought and turning it into something that is fresh and exciting was perfect. Loved the picture. Very nicely done. Great thought pattern and flow.

 Comment Written 11-May-2014

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reply by the author on 11-May-2014

You punch my tear bags with your warm, positive comments GWHARGIS coupled with the six stars, words won't be enough to thank you. Thanks a bunch, God bless.