Captive
a haiku contest entry16 total reviews
Comment from Gungalo
raven in bare tree
unable to flee or caw
moonstruck just like me
Awesome to be moonstruck eh? Even better. What a great write this is. Wonderful Haiku.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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raven in bare tree
unable to flee or caw
moonstruck just like me
Awesome to be moonstruck eh? Even better. What a great write this is. Wonderful Haiku.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for this fabulous review.
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LOL smile.
Comment from Ben Colder
The rules are kept. The wording is strong. The photo enhances the thought. I find nothing wrong with good Haiku . Blessings to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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The rules are kept. The wording is strong. The photo enhances the thought. I find nothing wrong with good Haiku . Blessings to you in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Ben, for your encouragement and best wishes.
Comment from Cajungirl
Your 5 7 5 poem has the correct line and syllable count per line. The picture is perfect. The raven like many is seduced by the beauty of the moon. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Your 5 7 5 poem has the correct line and syllable count per line. The picture is perfect. The raven like many is seduced by the beauty of the moon. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, Cajungirl, for your encouraging review and best wishes.
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You are welcome.
Comment from RYME4U
Well done. Very descriptive. The picture is a wonderful match
Moon glow is fascinating for both man and beast ...and bird. This is a good contest entry
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Well done. Very descriptive. The picture is a wonderful match
Moon glow is fascinating for both man and beast ...and bird. This is a good contest entry
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much for sharing this poem and your wonderful praise.
Comment from bard owl
That must be a heck of a moon to leave a raven soundless. They are known for their often, seemingly endless noisemaking. This is an excellent 5-7-5. I do have a question - is naked one syllable or two? Anyway, best of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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That must be a heck of a moon to leave a raven soundless. They are known for their often, seemingly endless noisemaking. This is an excellent 5-7-5. I do have a question - is naked one syllable or two? Anyway, best of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Wow! Did I blow that one. "Naked" is two syllables, of course. Please reread as I have made a correction. Thanks you for being sharp-eyed and being generous with your stars anyway.
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it is still an excellent 5-7-5 regardless of the syllable count!
Comment from LilHippie
A true Haiku! Very nicely done. When I review Haikus, I now it is next to impossible to create a story in three little lines, so I look for creativity and as close to a little story as possible. You accomplished this here. I am picturing his quandary. And the end, in true Haiku style, is lovely and has a twist. Nice!
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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A true Haiku! Very nicely done. When I review Haikus, I now it is next to impossible to create a story in three little lines, so I look for creativity and as close to a little story as possible. You accomplished this here. I am picturing his quandary. And the end, in true Haiku style, is lovely and has a twist. Nice!
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much. I really appreciate your appraisal of my form and content.
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You are very welcome.