Promise of the Mirage
a Nature Whitney26 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Nicely done. I have a hard time doing these different types but you nauled it. And the words you used to describr everything was so graphic (and I mean that in a complimentary way). It felt like I was really there
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Nicely done. I have a hard time doing these different types but you nauled it. And the words you used to describr everything was so graphic (and I mean that in a complimentary way). It felt like I was really there
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much Barb! I truly appreciate it. Yeah this was my first at this type. I'm so glad you liked it!
Comment from The Death
Hi Greg.
Your well chosen words paint a very dry but strong image.
The last line is very well thought out and gives a mystic look to the write.
Excellent use of personification here.
'dried tears of dust' is a very effective phrase.
It flows well too.
Good luck! :)
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Hi Greg.
Your well chosen words paint a very dry but strong image.
The last line is very well thought out and gives a mystic look to the write.
Excellent use of personification here.
'dried tears of dust' is a very effective phrase.
It flows well too.
Good luck! :)
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much man. I really appreciate that! You caught all the parts!
Comment from l.raven
HI Gregory, so good to see you...so many states are in so much trouble from the drought...just not enough water...a mirage is what is seen...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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HI Gregory, so good to see you...so many states are in so much trouble from the drought...just not enough water...a mirage is what is seen...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Thanks Libda! I'm SO happy to hear from you! Truly thank you :)
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You are so very well...so glad to see you...xxoo
Comment from Spitfire
Well done, my friend. You painted a picture where a mirage is definitely needed. This could also refers to one's state of mind--parched, dry, cracks, splintered. Hope still remains alive.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Well done, my friend. You painted a picture where a mirage is definitely needed. This could also refers to one's state of mind--parched, dry, cracks, splintered. Hope still remains alive.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Yes I definitely like your take! Thank you, love it. I'm so glad you read this! :)
Comment from Sam Mendonca
A very well written Whitney poem.
The wording certainly describes the conditions in many
states.
Good luck in the contest.
Excellent piece of writing.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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A very well written Whitney poem.
The wording certainly describes the conditions in many
states.
Good luck in the contest.
Excellent piece of writing.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Wow thank you Sam, that means so much to me, incredible. I love when I hear from you. I think I can finally get back to reading tonight! You're so wonderfully kind Sam, thank you.
Comment from country ranch writer
The river bed is much need of rain, but not much luck out on the plains. Drought follows and there is nothing left. Only a mirage of the heat that gets to you for the want of water.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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The river bed is much need of rain, but not much luck out on the plains. Drought follows and there is nothing left. Only a mirage of the heat that gets to you for the want of water.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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You're spot on! Well done, that's a compliment to me :) Thank you!
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welcome-good job well done
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, you have painted a whole canvas with these words, and the picture is beautiful, if bleak. I loved it! Best of luck in the contest. (I'ma hafta save this one! Wish I had a six for it...)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Wow, you have painted a whole canvas with these words, and the picture is beautiful, if bleak. I loved it! Best of luck in the contest. (I'ma hafta save this one! Wish I had a six for it...)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Oh thank you! That is so kind of you!! I thought it was a blind entry actually so I'm really glad you got to read it!
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You are very welcome. :)
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello Greg,
Happy New Year to you, friend.
I'm not entirely sure about the rules of this form - but I'm giving you a virtual six - all out, darn it! - for the sheer beauty of the imagery in this one.
Fabulously done. Hope all 's well with you. You're still on my list ... since I'm not Italian and don't carry a violin case, that's not a bad thing!
Have a super weekend. :)
Sonali
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Hello Greg,
Happy New Year to you, friend.
I'm not entirely sure about the rules of this form - but I'm giving you a virtual six - all out, darn it! - for the sheer beauty of the imagery in this one.
Fabulously done. Hope all 's well with you. You're still on my list ... since I'm not Italian and don't carry a violin case, that's not a bad thing!
Have a super weekend. :)
Sonali
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Haha you're so sweet, thank you so much. I'm getting better. :) I'm so grateful for the virtual six! That means a lot. I actually thought it was a blind entry haha so I'm really glad you got to read it! Thank you Sonali! Truly, thank you for thinking of me too,..
Comment from RYME4U
This is well written. It I like how you present both images of
the drought and the rainfall. The flow of words is even. Great choice of artwork. Great job!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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This is well written. It I like how you present both images of
the drought and the rainfall. The flow of words is even. Great choice of artwork. Great job!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked it.
Comment from DionysusDeVille
I bet seeing a mirage is probably the most awesome thing to perceive. That picture makes me want like a glass of water or something. Great job
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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I bet seeing a mirage is probably the most awesome thing to perceive. That picture makes me want like a glass of water or something. Great job
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Haha, thank you. That is a compliment indeed!