Sea Musings
a free verse poem about storm watching30 total reviews
Comment from ravenblack
Excellent flow and you knocked me out with the line " while air thickens like slow-stirred chowder". So visual and it places the piece around the cold Atlantic . Great cohesion of oceanic feel.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Excellent flow and you knocked me out with the line " while air thickens like slow-stirred chowder". So visual and it places the piece around the cold Atlantic . Great cohesion of oceanic feel.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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i am thrilled you like my imagery. Thank you, ravenblack for this great review. RodG
Comment from fastdigits
Your words poetically and artistically
paint this mural of the angry sea thrashing
onto the shore as the grayish clouds
squeeze the whiteness out of the sky,
and in this moment frown in time, reflections
of love from the past.
Well done
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Your words poetically and artistically
paint this mural of the angry sea thrashing
onto the shore as the grayish clouds
squeeze the whiteness out of the sky,
and in this moment frown in time, reflections
of love from the past.
Well done
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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I am delighted you enjoyed my story of a sea-gazer. Thank you. RodG
Comment from kiwijenny
I love this because I love the sea..................
Grayish clouds hug the horizon...
Squeezing whiteness from the sky............
I love the imagery...great art too
God bless
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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I love this because I love the sea..................
Grayish clouds hug the horizon...
Squeezing whiteness from the sky............
I love the imagery...great art too
God bless
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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I am delighted you could relate to my poem so well. Kiwijenny. Thank you for your kind praise. RodG
Comment from KG Writes
Dear Unknown Author, How sweet and touching is this. Lovely piece. Perfect illustration to compliment. Very nicely done. Very best of luck in the contest. KG Writes
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Dear Unknown Author, How sweet and touching is this. Lovely piece. Perfect illustration to compliment. Very nicely done. Very best of luck in the contest. KG Writes
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you, KG Writes, for your lovely tribute and review. I appreciate your best wishes, too.
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Mystery Writer, You are most welcome and the best wishes still stands. Enjoy your evening. KG Writes
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the watch storms at sea. I love watching the waves crash to the shores. I love hearing the angry clouds thundering across the sky. I love seeing lightening flash though the shy Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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I love the watch storms at sea. I love watching the waves crash to the shores. I love hearing the angry clouds thundering across the sky. I love seeing lightening flash though the shy Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you, nelliesellie, for your kind praise. I love to watch storms, too, as you can tell by the poem's topic. I appreciate your best wishes, too.
Comment from goompa
I like your poem for many reasons. The rhythm and flow, the mood it creates, and "squeezing whiteness from the sky" is just brilliant. A really great effort!
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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I like your poem for many reasons. The rhythm and flow, the mood it creates, and "squeezing whiteness from the sky" is just brilliant. A really great effort!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, goompa, for this encouraging review. I am delighted you enjoyed the poem so much.
Comment from Alena Smith
as I was reading this, I could picture myself as that man in that picture, breathing in all the beauty around him.
great choice of words for descriptions
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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as I was reading this, I could picture myself as that man in that picture, breathing in all the beauty around him.
great choice of words for descriptions
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you, Alena. You made my day! I am truly pleased when my readers can SEE what I am trying to portray AND relate to the subject (in this case the lonely figure at the sea wall).
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I completely understand. it's such a gratifying feeling to see that reader connected with you on that level.
also, I think that your name fits this poem perfectly :)
Comment from krowboom
Wonderful poem, captures a great mood and feeling. You outdid yourself on this one. It's lyrical, evokes a sense of peace and tranquility, and flows wonderfully. This is an example of great poetry. Keep it up.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Wonderful poem, captures a great mood and feeling. You outdid yourself on this one. It's lyrical, evokes a sense of peace and tranquility, and flows wonderfully. This is an example of great poetry. Keep it up.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you, krowboom. I am truly appreciative of your kind words and praise.
Comment from Dustman6180
Very nice free verse entry. I really enjoyed your words. "squeezing whiteness from the sky" and "briny breath of the sea" -- beautiful images. Great job. Good luck.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Very nice free verse entry. I really enjoyed your words. "squeezing whiteness from the sky" and "briny breath of the sea" -- beautiful images. Great job. Good luck.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you, Dustman, for your most encouraging review and best wishes. I am delighted you liked my imagery.
Comment from Petriesan
free verse is hard for me to evaluate. All I can go on is how it affects me internally, the pictures it paints.
yours did both. It made me stop and think and remember
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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free verse is hard for me to evaluate. All I can go on is how it affects me internally, the pictures it paints.
yours did both. It made me stop and think and remember
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Then I succeeded, Petriesan! My sole objective is to enable my reader to picture the scene in his mind's eye and relate to that singular moment in time. Thank you for sharing and your review.