Comment from Cookie333

Excellent

For some reason I got hung up on the urinal imagery- of course... Right? I pictured myself putting the lid down to keep the dogs from drinking the cold water. Quite a deep piece and best when read slowly and with an analytical mind
Thank you Mike
Karen

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 Comment Written 17-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013

I know! I keep wanting to take that out but, it is so exactly what I want to say that I feel like I am chickening out by removing it. Sounds like a grammar school problem. "Hey! Leave it in. What are you chicken?" Thank you, mikey

reply by Cookie333 on 17-Oct-2013

Leave it in- its excellent- it did the job of making me stop and think- definitely a 'wait! Did that say what I think! ?
Kind of moment
K

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

That is a wordy piece to bring someone to their knees so to speak.
"You dont get to hear your eulogy"...
Nicely done. Still a little deep

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 Comment Written 17-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013

Yep. this one does go on a bit. sometimes it just comes out and won't stop until it is done. I am pleased that you are able to find things in it that make trudging through it worthwhile. Thank you kindly for reading and reviewing. I promise some shorter pieces. ha! mikey