September in the Midwest
Quatrains 8/8/8/8, aabb rhyme23 total reviews
Comment from donnadiann
Good use of smooth rhyming and near-rhymes. Great imagery and encouraging cheerful tone announcing fall. Very nice descriptions of family togetherness. Lovely poem:)
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Good use of smooth rhyming and near-rhymes. Great imagery and encouraging cheerful tone announcing fall. Very nice descriptions of family togetherness. Lovely poem:)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much~Debbie
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Debbie, I enjoyed your September poem. It flowed with information like a well packed calendar. Falling leaves move into football games, homecoming, pumpkins and Halloween, then soon Holiday cheer. Good job, Carolyn
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Debbie, I enjoyed your September poem. It flowed with information like a well packed calendar. Falling leaves move into football games, homecoming, pumpkins and Halloween, then soon Holiday cheer. Good job, Carolyn
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thank you. Glad you enjoyed~Debbie
Comment from Isabella Thorne
I like the majority of the flow of this poem, however the first two stanzas last lines seems to break the flow. I love the rhyming pattern and the way you paint a picture with your words.
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I like the majority of the flow of this poem, however the first two stanzas last lines seems to break the flow. I love the rhyming pattern and the way you paint a picture with your words.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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I will look at that. Thank you~Debbie
Comment from l.raven
Hi Debbie, This poem sure sets the mood for September to roll in. I can hardly wait for the colors to start coming out. I loveeeee the wording in your poem and the picture and colors are just beautiful...Luff Linda xxoo
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Hi Debbie, This poem sure sets the mood for September to roll in. I can hardly wait for the colors to start coming out. I loveeeee the wording in your poem and the picture and colors are just beautiful...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much, Linda. I am so glad you enjoyed it!~Debbie
Comment from zanya
It's a wonderful atmospheric poem detailing the 'close down 'of summer and the arrival of Fall and ultimately Winter with chillier, darker days.
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It's a wonderful atmospheric poem detailing the 'close down 'of summer and the arrival of Fall and ultimately Winter with chillier, darker days.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much~Debbie
Comment from adewpearl
This is my absolute favorite fan art artwork
solid rhyming couplets
good detail of the changes September brings
good alliteration in phrases like snow to scoop and squirrels storing
a delightfully upbeat celebration of September and all we associate with it :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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This is my absolute favorite fan art artwork
solid rhyming couplets
good detail of the changes September brings
good alliteration in phrases like snow to scoop and squirrels storing
a delightfully upbeat celebration of September and all we associate with it :-) Brooke
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much, Brooke. I always look forward to your reviews. Have a blessed day~Debbie
Comment from krys123
Thank you very much Debbie for sharing this with myself, fans and other readers. Your Poem is exquisite and a picture complements your poem very much. You rhyming couplet are done nearly to perfection. There's one
perhaps you can work on; "Adults have some autumn chores too", this line seems a little flat. And the rhyme just seems a little labored. Your Poem was enjoyable to read. You have a good one in God bless.
AK
PS; I grew up in upstate New York and I remember growing up in the fall with all the colors and Halloween pumpkins.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much Debbie for sharing this with myself, fans and other readers. Your Poem is exquisite and a picture complements your poem very much. You rhyming couplet are done nearly to perfection. There's one
perhaps you can work on; "Adults have some autumn chores too", this line seems a little flat. And the rhyme just seems a little labored. Your Poem was enjoyable to read. You have a good one in God bless.
AK
PS; I grew up in upstate New York and I remember growing up in the fall with all the colors and Halloween pumpkins.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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I fixed that line and think it does sound better. Thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed this, my friend. I appreciate the stars, too~Debbie (Adults will have autumn chores too)
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You are so welcome Debbie
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
September is a really a very pretty month and is a little cooler which is often a welcome. We're still having 95 degree days even though it's September. This is well-written and your words paint many pictures in your readers minds, pretty or sweet pictures. God loves you and we do too.
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September is a really a very pretty month and is a little cooler which is often a welcome. We're still having 95 degree days even though it's September. This is well-written and your words paint many pictures in your readers minds, pretty or sweet pictures. God loves you and we do too.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Yeah, it was a hundred and one 2 days ago, but finally cooled off and rained. Bless you both and pray things are going well~Debbie
Comment from SteveY
Just another absolutely beautiful poem with an absolutely beautiful picture by one of Fanstory's very best poet out there. Keep them coming!
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Just another absolutely beautiful poem with an absolutely beautiful picture by one of Fanstory's very best poet out there. Keep them coming!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much, my friend. Your reviews always leave me feeling good. Three years ago. I didn't have a clue about how to write a poem. It has been a very fun journey learning what little I know~DEbbie
Comment from JW
This is a very positive uplifting poem. In reading it one cannot help but smile, even though the part regarding the weather doesn't hold true for where I live.
Today, it is suppose to hit 88 degrees here.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
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This is a very positive uplifting poem. In reading it one cannot help but smile, even though the part regarding the weather doesn't hold true for where I live.
Today, it is suppose to hit 88 degrees here.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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It was 101 here 2 days ago. In a couple of weeks it could snow. In Iowa, one just never knows. Take care, my friend~DEbbie