Thoughts Make A Billionaire?
Really? A Non-Fiction in 222 words.92 total reviews
Comment from ennahanid
I enjoyed reading you today, your way with words is quite fascinating, made this reader think of a different time and place. By the way it has been many years since I heard 'by the by' I liked that touch little snobby appeal there. It was a pleasure reading you today - Dinah
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I enjoyed reading you today, your way with words is quite fascinating, made this reader think of a different time and place. By the way it has been many years since I heard 'by the by' I liked that touch little snobby appeal there. It was a pleasure reading you today - Dinah
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hi Alcreator, I enjoyed this piece, it tells it as it is. I liked your wording, I especially liked seeing the phrase...
'By the by' I haven't heard it said for ages, yet it is quite a common expression. We all think we can become that billionaire, yet few of us make it, I didn't! Non of us know what the future holds, and in some respects, that is just as well. Well written and a pleasure to read and review. xsx Sandra
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Hi Alcreator, I enjoyed this piece, it tells it as it is. I liked your wording, I especially liked seeing the phrase...
'By the by' I haven't heard it said for ages, yet it is quite a common expression. We all think we can become that billionaire, yet few of us make it, I didn't! Non of us know what the future holds, and in some respects, that is just as well. Well written and a pleasure to read and review. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I guess this reads as a sort of pep talk to any young person. It seems that the line:
your parent-in-law will gift their movable and immovable property to their only daughter who will transfer the same property in your favour and you'll be a billionaire....
could use a comma after 'favour'
In the last line:
and above all God, often many of us forget our limited ability, power or deservedness and that change is permanent...
I would put a period after God and then capitalize 'often'.
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I guess this reads as a sort of pep talk to any young person. It seems that the line:
your parent-in-law will gift their movable and immovable property to their only daughter who will transfer the same property in your favour and you'll be a billionaire....
could use a comma after 'favour'
In the last line:
and above all God, often many of us forget our limited ability, power or deservedness and that change is permanent...
I would put a period after God and then capitalize 'often'.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
Comment from Mark Alan Trimeloni
You are thinking or dreaming, my dear, by God speaking I read your face, you are expecting everything to happen as you think, I know, many of us do the same....
The way you write is confusing and makes no sense.
By the by, speak out the truth, dear; I think of your state of mind and the volume of your thoughts, we know the future is invisible-unforeseeable, indefinite and inevitably changeable, I mean, we cannot predict or forecast the future, only we may think, still we make mistake, just we calculate, we love to believe in our own mathematics, while we can't see the future....
This part doesn't become any clearer. I can't imagine what kind of readers you are trying to connect with.
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You are thinking or dreaming, my dear, by God speaking I read your face, you are expecting everything to happen as you think, I know, many of us do the same....
The way you write is confusing and makes no sense.
By the by, speak out the truth, dear; I think of your state of mind and the volume of your thoughts, we know the future is invisible-unforeseeable, indefinite and inevitably changeable, I mean, we cannot predict or forecast the future, only we may think, still we make mistake, just we calculate, we love to believe in our own mathematics, while we can't see the future....
This part doesn't become any clearer. I can't imagine what kind of readers you are trying to connect with.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
Comment from mermaids
In some cultures, the bride comes with a dowry so I can relate to your words. Many grooms may have these thoughts. Excellent use of words and flow of dialog.
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In some cultures, the bride comes with a dowry so I can relate to your words. Many grooms may have these thoughts. Excellent use of words and flow of dialog.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
Comment from Benjamin_H
I thoroughly enjoyed these four paragraph. i really think this story speaks to the reader. by this i mean it easily and effectively conveys the message of the story. And the mere fact that it is so brutality honest makes it all the more fun. well done.
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I thoroughly enjoyed these four paragraph. i really think this story speaks to the reader. by this i mean it easily and effectively conveys the message of the story. And the mere fact that it is so brutality honest makes it all the more fun. well done.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
Comment from Charade
I am curious when you open with 'you' I know you're talking to everyone reading it, but do you have a specific target audience in mind?
Interesting thoughts. We watched "The Secret" which is a weird type of documentary that's along the same lines as this. If you haven't seen it, you should, I'm sure it would inspire more thoughts. Great job!
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I am curious when you open with 'you' I know you're talking to everyone reading it, but do you have a specific target audience in mind?
Interesting thoughts. We watched "The Secret" which is a weird type of documentary that's along the same lines as this. If you haven't seen it, you should, I'm sure it would inspire more thoughts. Great job!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
Comment from nkavytha
Striking thoughts! I loved the last paragraph which makes us realize the power beyond us, that decides our destiny. The phrase, I liked most: "we know the future is invisible-unforeseeable, indefinite and inevitably changeable"! Good luck! Cheers!
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Striking thoughts! I loved the last paragraph which makes us realize the power beyond us, that decides our destiny. The phrase, I liked most: "we know the future is invisible-unforeseeable, indefinite and inevitably changeable"! Good luck! Cheers!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi Alcreator,
This is an interesting post. I am a true believer in positive
thinking. If you want something you can achieve it. Our limitations are only the ones we place as roadblocks in the way.
Bye
Rosalyne
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Hi Alcreator,
This is an interesting post. I am a true believer in positive
thinking. If you want something you can achieve it. Our limitations are only the ones we place as roadblocks in the way.
Bye
Rosalyne
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
Comment from amahra
I didn't understand the below sentence. And what is "By the by?"
You are thinking or dreaming, my dear, by God speaking I read your face, you are expecting everything to happen as you think, I know, many of us do the same....
only we may think, still we make mistake[s], just
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I didn't understand the below sentence. And what is "By the by?"
You are thinking or dreaming, my dear, by God speaking I read your face, you are expecting everything to happen as you think, I know, many of us do the same....
only we may think, still we make mistake[s], just
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013