Poems from a Pensive Poet
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "The Final Farewell"Verses from my heart
28 total reviews
Comment from steevie
This is such a sad and touching poem, Beth. Its poignant and tells of a soldiers failure to keep a promise due to being a combat fatality. This old world as we know it, as you said, is not meant to last, but God promises a brave new world for all those who serve him.
well told poetry
your words are placed in a logical fashion
steve
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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This is such a sad and touching poem, Beth. Its poignant and tells of a soldiers failure to keep a promise due to being a combat fatality. This old world as we know it, as you said, is not meant to last, but God promises a brave new world for all those who serve him.
well told poetry
your words are placed in a logical fashion
steve
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thank you Steve. I raally appreciate your review and comments. When you think of it in those terms, death doesn't seem so final.
Beth
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You're very welcome, Beth
smiles
steve
Comment from Jean Lutz
A heartbreaking story. Picture and words work in harmony as a tribute to our military. May this bring some comfort to others who have bit farewell.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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A heartbreaking story. Picture and words work in harmony as a tribute to our military. May this bring some comfort to others who have bit farewell.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Jean, I really appreciate your review and comments.
Beth
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Beth, this is a sad quatrain entry. It is never easy to carry on when your loved one is taken away. They say time heals, but it takes forever to put the old life aside and tackle a new one. It is such a pity that war must end young lives and destroy young dreams. Well written. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Hi Beth, this is a sad quatrain entry. It is never easy to carry on when your loved one is taken away. They say time heals, but it takes forever to put the old life aside and tackle a new one. It is such a pity that war must end young lives and destroy young dreams. Well written. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Jada. It is sad an I usually try to write upbeat poem and stories. However the reality is there and we can't make it go away but always looking on the bright side. I appreciate you reading and commenting.
Beth
Comment from in777wr#
A heart-felt poem. There is a consistent rhyming scheme. You told your message well. Your build-up leading to the last stanza is great. A good message.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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A heart-felt poem. There is a consistent rhyming scheme. You told your message well. Your build-up leading to the last stanza is great. A good message.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and encouraging comments. I really appreciate it.
Beth
Comment from MzNiki
Thank you for writing such a heart felt poem. I felt the pain & sorrow you accurately created. Loved the picture u painted.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you for writing such a heart felt poem. I felt the pain & sorrow you accurately created. Loved the picture u painted.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. I appreciate your comments.
Beth
Comment from barleygirl
Very beautiful & haunting poem that conveys the sadness, as well as a message of hopefulness. Being mostly from the point of view of the soldier that's died, this poem brings a bittersweet message from the grave that's believable & inspiring, but in between the lines, we can imagine how hard it would be to hear this message & to let go of her grief. Great job! Good luck!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Very beautiful & haunting poem that conveys the sadness, as well as a message of hopefulness. Being mostly from the point of view of the soldier that's died, this poem brings a bittersweet message from the grave that's believable & inspiring, but in between the lines, we can imagine how hard it would be to hear this message & to let go of her grief. Great job! Good luck!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for review and really insightful comments.
I'm glad you like it.
Beth
Comment from Jackarrie
A very sad poem written with a deep passion for the women who have lost their loved ones through war. It does not bear thinking about the heartache that a widow goes through on getting this horrific news. This is seen in the image, you did a wonderful job in writing a great quatrain poem that told the sad story in a most poetic way. Well done Mary
He can't be a part of the present
and she must not live in the past.
The final farewell isn't easy
but nothing on earth's meant to last.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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A very sad poem written with a deep passion for the women who have lost their loved ones through war. It does not bear thinking about the heartache that a widow goes through on getting this horrific news. This is seen in the image, you did a wonderful job in writing a great quatrain poem that told the sad story in a most poetic way. Well done Mary
He can't be a part of the present
and she must not live in the past.
The final farewell isn't easy
but nothing on earth's meant to last.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Mary. I really appreciate the review and kind words.
Beth
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a lovely story in a poem inspired by this lovely artwork. The rhythm and rhyme in these verses work great and it was a delight to read.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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This is a lovely story in a poem inspired by this lovely artwork. The rhythm and rhyme in these verses work great and it was a delight to read.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it.
Beth
Comment from tbacha58
This is the deepest tribute poem I have ever read. Your heart wrote this poem, so fluently it goes, the words will reach her and definitely its sad, but she can start a life. Terry
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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This is the deepest tribute poem I have ever read. Your heart wrote this poem, so fluently it goes, the words will reach her and definitely its sad, but she can start a life. Terry
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Terry. I really appreciate the review and heartfelt comments.
Beth
Comment from The Death
Hello
I liked this heart felt poem with a positive paranormal touch.
Nice rhyming and rhythm of the quatrain.
The last four lines are just heart stealers.you did an amazing job.
Regards
Shar-A
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Hello
I liked this heart felt poem with a positive paranormal touch.
Nice rhyming and rhythm of the quatrain.
The last four lines are just heart stealers.you did an amazing job.
Regards
Shar-A
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the uplifting comments. I'm so glad you liked this.
Beth