Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It took my breath away.
To think God the
greatest gardener could create wonderful land.
Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013

Thanks for your time and the nice rating. Have a lovely week, Ine

reply by misscookie on 17-Jul-2013

You're very welcome, have a blessed day. Until next time.

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

A lovely Haiku, with that summer kigo, in a creative 4-2-4 format (only 10 syllables) that is very economical in size, but huge in expression. Well done!

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013

Thanks for your time and the nice rating. Have a lovely week, Ine

Comment from donaldww

Excellent

You've done an excellent job on this haiku. You've used concrete imagery and have a perfect kigo word for summer: summer. :)

The only thing you need to work on is having a clear cut between two images. That is called the kire. Right now, it reads as though its one continuous statement.

This could be done in one of three ways:

1. Add a cutting punctuation mark.

summer meadow--
filled with
wildflowers

2. move the top line to the bottom, and add an article.

filled with
wildflowers . . .
a summer meadow

3. add a word to the second section that create a cut

green hills
freckled with wildflowers . . .
a summer meadow

You might find another way to show the cut.

Cheers,
DW

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013

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Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is a very good summer haiku Ine. It meets all the requirements and syllable counts of a haiku. Beautiful picture too.
~Teresa~

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013

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Comment from beccabootie123

Excellent

simple and perfect yet says a lot. nicely written and picture fields the total view. makes me feel good to read and look at it. good job and well written withing genre.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013

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Comment from wordsareus

Excellent

I always thought a haiku had to follow a 5-7-5 or 3-5-3 format but I guess I was wrong. Your poem is well written and presented.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013

Thanks for your time and the nice rating. Have a lovely week, Ine. No, according to Donald it has not but he has not reviewed it yet.

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Hi Ine, nice haiku, great visual presentation and strong words choices with descriptive imagery well penned.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen


"summer meadow
filled with
wildflowers " // Total 9

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013

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Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

I liked the simplicity of the haiku. The message was forthright and the image was peaceful and uplifting. Nice picture that went with it. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013

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Comment from SteveY

Excellent

Well you penned this one very well in addition to following the limited format perfectly. I'm always amazed when poets can say so much in such few lines.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013

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Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Ine,

This is a cute haiku with only 4 - 2 - 4 syllables. I've never read one before, but I think you did a great job on it. The picture goes with it well too.

Have a blessed day!

Kat

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 Comment Written 15-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013

Thanks for your time and the nice rating. Have a lovely week, Ine