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Comment from zeldasmith
If you could start another paragraph with, IN THIS ASSOCIATION WITH.....; SOME MAY SAY....;THERE IS THE SOUL....;and IT IS THROUGH FAITH....it would be an easier read and more thought provoking. I liked it. It made me think about life. Good job.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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If you could start another paragraph with, IN THIS ASSOCIATION WITH.....; SOME MAY SAY....;THERE IS THE SOUL....;and IT IS THROUGH FAITH....it would be an easier read and more thought provoking. I liked it. It made me think about life. Good job.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the constructive advice.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I like the comparison of the soul - our being- to a pepple of sand in an hour glass. Good entry. good luck in the contest.
Teresa~
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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I like the comparison of the soul - our being- to a pepple of sand in an hour glass. Good entry. good luck in the contest.
Teresa~
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Congrats on the 1st place tie in the contest - I really like yours.
Comment from 4hisglory
Very interesting description of the soul. I guess is you think about the words that are most always spoken at a funeral, from dust thou came and to dust thou shall return, it could make sense.
Good picture for your essay.
Blessings, LaVonne
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Very interesting description of the soul. I guess is you think about the words that are most always spoken at a funeral, from dust thou came and to dust thou shall return, it could make sense.
Good picture for your essay.
Blessings, LaVonne
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from debskatz
Hi author,
Quite a creative approach to the definition of a soul. Your essay was well-written, easy to read and understand. Nice job! Thanks for sharing & good luck in the contest!
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Hi author,
Quite a creative approach to the definition of a soul. Your essay was well-written, easy to read and understand. Nice job! Thanks for sharing & good luck in the contest!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Very eloquently stated, and beautifully presented. Faith is the flame that fires the passions of the soul. Without faith in anything, we are left to wallow in the squalor of our own misery and self-doubt. We must have faith, faith in our family & friends, faith there we are worthy to achieve and attain greatness through hard work, strong moral character and dedication. And faith in God, our creator, our father and our salvation. Without these, we are nothing...
Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Very eloquently stated, and beautifully presented. Faith is the flame that fires the passions of the soul. Without faith in anything, we are left to wallow in the squalor of our own misery and self-doubt. We must have faith, faith in our family & friends, faith there we are worthy to achieve and attain greatness through hard work, strong moral character and dedication. And faith in God, our creator, our father and our salvation. Without these, we are nothing...
Well done.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind and encouraging review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Very interesting. Never saw this point of sole before.
As you say, it would be a tough scale to follow.
Your message was clear and rewarding. Well done. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Very interesting. Never saw this point of sole before.
As you say, it would be a tough scale to follow.
Your message was clear and rewarding. Well done. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
Intriguing opening image of the sand falling back up the hour glass
I very much like your use of imagery in conveying a thoughtful message about the nature and the destiny of the soul :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Intriguing opening image of the sand falling back up the hour glass
I very much like your use of imagery in conveying a thoughtful message about the nature and the destiny of the soul :-) Brooke
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Thank you Brooke for your kind review. Bill
Comment from Matthew M.
I feel lucky that my little grain might it out so that I can be here. This is a very interesting take on what is a soul. I would suggest turning this into two or maybe three paragraphs.
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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I feel lucky that my little grain might it out so that I can be here. This is a very interesting take on what is a soul. I would suggest turning this into two or maybe three paragraphs.
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Thanks
Comment from Gungalo
I don't think you have defined a soul here but you have made it abundantly clear what will happen to that grain of sand. Sigh.
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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I don't think you have defined a soul here but you have made it abundantly clear what will happen to that grain of sand. Sigh.
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Yeh, well, there it is.
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Smile.