All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Sticky-notes"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Matthew M.
The way the poem started I though it might be a man-hating rant. However, something tragic happened. It wasn't quite clear to me what that tragedy was, but it seemed so sad to see the sticky notes fall from the wall and down to the floor. A loss is tough no matter what the cause.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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The way the poem started I though it might be a man-hating rant. However, something tragic happened. It wasn't quite clear to me what that tragedy was, but it seemed so sad to see the sticky notes fall from the wall and down to the floor. A loss is tough no matter what the cause.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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man-hating? not I, dear! Thank you so much for your review Matt, and for your lovely six on this one. I see you're starting to post again, so am looking forward to catching up on your new stories!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Bill Schott
Just from some of the previous work from which you talked about your empty nest, this poem truly captures that hollow sense of your situation. The sticky notes reference carries so much with it, touching on the idea of snippets of communication that are at once meaningful and then again taken for granted. Lots of internal rhyming brings this reader through the work with appreciation for not only the styling, but the inner sadness that informs the poem as well.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Just from some of the previous work from which you talked about your empty nest, this poem truly captures that hollow sense of your situation. The sticky notes reference carries so much with it, touching on the idea of snippets of communication that are at once meaningful and then again taken for granted. Lots of internal rhyming brings this reader through the work with appreciation for not only the styling, but the inner sadness that informs the poem as well.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Bill, thank you so much for your detailed and thoughtful reading, with attention to style and poetic devices. I so appreciate your lovely interpretation and, of course, your magic six!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Janet Foor
First of all...I love your poem and I love post-its. The inventor is my hero.
Your poem is truly unique and well written. There is a sadness as you describe the quietness around you.
Sometimes I want an empty house and quiet solitude to do just what I want when I want and then.... if I'm alone for very long, I have the feelings you describe.
Excellent! I enjoyed reading this.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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First of all...I love your poem and I love post-its. The inventor is my hero.
Your poem is truly unique and well written. There is a sadness as you describe the quietness around you.
Sometimes I want an empty house and quiet solitude to do just what I want when I want and then.... if I'm alone for very long, I have the feelings you describe.
Excellent! I enjoyed reading this.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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"Aloha" Janet - I do confess that I love post-its too. If something is REALLY urgent, I stick it ON MY COMPUTER SCREEN so it calls to me each time I sit down! And thank you, too, for your lovely reading of my piece, and, of course, for that wonderful six!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Jackarrie
I love your poem, it reads like a story, You muster up fabulous sentences to portray the silence and the extreme loneliness. The sticky notes not needed anymore, is how you feel. Brilliant work. Well done
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I love your poem, it reads like a story, You muster up fabulous sentences to portray the silence and the extreme loneliness. The sticky notes not needed anymore, is how you feel. Brilliant work. Well done
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from ReaThomas
I LOVE this. It's so honest and real, and sometimes how I feel about the whole concept of love. I am rating this 6 because of how much I relate to it. Your poem is like a little story, into which I was sucked completely. Lovely!
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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I LOVE this. It's so honest and real, and sometimes how I feel about the whole concept of love. I am rating this 6 because of how much I relate to it. Your poem is like a little story, into which I was sucked completely. Lovely!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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I'm so glad that you related to this one Rea - very happy to suck you in my dear! That, of course, requires a willing and open reader, so thank YOU for being that, and, of course, for that lovely six!
Blessings
Sharyn :)
Comment from humpwhistle
This poem has a lot words ... oops, sorry.
Yeah, I get it, Sharyn. And I like the sticky notes theme.
A very thoughtful and unique take on the contest prompt.
Not quite J. Geils' "Love Stinks", but it ain't "Love Me Tender", either.
Post-its of fallen emotions littering the floor.
Lots of word.
Best of luck, Sharyn.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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This poem has a lot words ... oops, sorry.
Yeah, I get it, Sharyn. And I like the sticky notes theme.
A very thoughtful and unique take on the contest prompt.
Not quite J. Geils' "Love Stinks", but it ain't "Love Me Tender", either.
Post-its of fallen emotions littering the floor.
Lots of word.
Best of luck, Sharyn.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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BEAST! Just you wait, 'enry 'iggins, just you wait! Some people should not be allowed near a key-board, hmm?
Thanks so much Lee - I really appreciate a six coming from you - you're my short-story hero!
Blessings,
Sharyn
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Sorry, Sharyn, but I got such a kick out of response to the guy who kept saying, 'man, there are a lot of words'. I just had to play with it.
But seriously, Sharyn. I like this poem a lot (words and all). Lee
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I know you did sweetheart - and teasing never worries me (I give as good as I get) - I just have precious little patience for idiots sometimes.
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Idiots? Where?
And while I've got you here, congrats on your zoo story win.
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oh you're so funny - and thank you! That was rather unexpected - but I've totally given up on trying to second-guess the FS Committee decisions!
:))S
Comment from Aussie
I liked your sticky notes contest entry and wish you well for the contest. Your poem reads like a story, one that needed to be told. Ships that pass in the night - hoping one will stop or not. Loving your children is a natural way of being a true mother - men sometimes can go whistle Dixie. We do need them I guess, but we certainly don't need their mess and lack of consideration. Well done poet.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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I liked your sticky notes contest entry and wish you well for the contest. Your poem reads like a story, one that needed to be told. Ships that pass in the night - hoping one will stop or not. Loving your children is a natural way of being a true mother - men sometimes can go whistle Dixie. We do need them I guess, but we certainly don't need their mess and lack of consideration. Well done poet.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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G'day Aussie! Thx so much my dear - always look forward to Aussie feedback!
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from HELEN123
Really lovely poem, makes me think of my friend who was widowed at 39 with two children. Brilliant description of what's left behind.
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Really lovely poem, makes me think of my friend who was widowed at 39 with two children. Brilliant description of what's left behind.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Bless you Helen - thank you so much! and your poor friend, too - that must have been so hard.
:)Sharyn
Comment from watergirl
Hi, I liked your poem. Ah, how lonely the "perfection".
The temptation to want for armour but in the end, yearning for life, messy and human life. And love. It spoke so clearly of that trick we design to play upon ourselves.
Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Hi, I liked your poem. Ah, how lonely the "perfection".
The temptation to want for armour but in the end, yearning for life, messy and human life. And love. It spoke so clearly of that trick we design to play upon ourselves.
Well done.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much wg! :) Sharyn
Comment from GWinterwin
A beautiful story my friend of blissful times of the past. Your words flow well and tell a sad but true story of loves past tense. Wishing you all the best sweet lady and God bless always.
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A beautiful story my friend of blissful times of the past. Your words flow well and tell a sad but true story of loves past tense. Wishing you all the best sweet lady and God bless always.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Bless you GW - so glad you enjoyed this one, and I so appreciate your lovely six!
:)Sharyn