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All Those Puzzling Pieces

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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from donaldww
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I like this set of quatrains; they work well with your Kyrielle repeating last line. And the rhymes are excellent.

Blazing in blue is perfect for heat, since that is the colour of the hottest flame on a torch.

Cheers,
DW


 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    thank you so much! :)S
Comment from Maureen's Pen
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Hi Sharyn, this is a beauty. Loved everything about it. The night time always speaks to me. And this did the same.
Thanks for sharing it and excellent work as always.
Maureen

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    I know it does - bless you Maureen, as ever ... :)S
Comment from J. Dark
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This is a stunning form and I love, love, love your repeating line, Sharyn. The title is stunning and you bring it into the poem beautifully. Fabulous and memorable work.

Kindest of regards

Julie :-)

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    thx so much Julie, as always! :)))S
Comment from Selina Stambi
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I love the repeated line - to seek the light and sing stars' song....

Question: do you ever leave your desk or sleep, my dear? And that B & B - does it run itself??

There's an underlying pretty sadness to this piece. Nice.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    I sleep in roller-skates (good for the B&B!) :))) and yes, there's an underlying sadness - I can see my husband's mother at 95, a bright, vivacious full-of-life-force woman is starting to fade ... as is my own mother (though she's only 82) - I hate to watch the process. I want it to be easy for both of them :)S
reply by Selina Stambi on 18-Mar-2013
    My mum's only 77 and just been diagnosed with early-stage dementia (she doesn't know). She's been my best friend and my heart breaks at the thought of the journey ahead.

    Must run down to WalMart to get me some roller skates!
Comment from wordsareus
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This is an absolutely beautiful poem. I am so glad to see such a wonderful response to this writing prompt. This should be a strong contender in the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    bless you my dear - I love the kyrielle! :)S
Comment from angelmagnet
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Thanks for your wistful words, I always appreciate your author notes. Have I told you that before? Your poetry reaches a place in my heart that rarely feels understood. Your poetry assures me that I am not alone. Thank you

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    that's why I try to do angel - and with a review such as this, I now I've succeeded. Thank you so much for those words!
    :)Sharyn
Comment from October21
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- Beautiful descriptions
- something peaceful about the tone of the poem
- repeating line is just wonderful. Never read anything as amazing as that line. And the alliteration is so clever.
- flow is perfect. You have used this tricky form flawlessly:D
- well done!:-)

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    Thx so much my dear - I do love the kyrielle - have you tried one yet?
reply by October21 on 18-Mar-2013
    Nope not yet- I'm SO useless with forms:-) hehe:-)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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This is very well written my friend a very good example of this complicated form you have made it look easy this reads very smoothly well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    Thanks so much Jill! :)S
Comment from Kiki12
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This is beautiful, the repeating line has such nice alliteration, it makes a very lyrical refrain. There is a serenity in the feeling that the woman is ready to let go of this life and go "home" with peaceful anticipation. Lovely kyrielle.
Kiki

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    Thank you so much kiki - I was actually thinking of my mother when I wrote it ... I know her time is running out and I'm seeing the end of her cycle, and, of course, part of my own ... :)Sharyn
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
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I enjoyed this the format as well as the words were executed to perfection .. the photo added to the ambiance of your work as well
tk

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    Thx so much tk! MAHALO! :)Sharyn