Friendship
Friends come and go.37 total reviews
Comment from juliaSjames
Oh, I see. You go deep in this gritty short write, Bob.
Sad ending to an unlikely romance.
Death is the ultimate deserter. Or the ultimate friend. Depends on the viewpoint.
Fine incorporation of the required words.
Excellent entry and I wish you the very best in the prompt.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013
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Oh, I see. You go deep in this gritty short write, Bob.
Sad ending to an unlikely romance.
Death is the ultimate deserter. Or the ultimate friend. Depends on the viewpoint.
Fine incorporation of the required words.
Excellent entry and I wish you the very best in the prompt.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013
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Hi, Julia. The contest is over....I lost by one vote. LOL..Oh well, it was a good excercise in writing anyway. Thanks for your review and your tiem. X0 Bob
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Bummer, Bob! It's tough when that happens.
Comment from words
What a sad story.
No bonds of friendship here.
Like the irony of the title.
Great ending:
Oh no! "God help me! Why'd you have to do this, girl? Sorry, I gotta go."
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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What a sad story.
No bonds of friendship here.
Like the irony of the title.
Great ending:
Oh no! "God help me! Why'd you have to do this, girl? Sorry, I gotta go."
Hugs,d
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much, Diane. For taking the time and I am glad you liked it. Bob
Comment from bard owl
I'm not kidding. You said so much in so few words. Without saying the word death, you alluded to it with writer's genius and besides that, you entered required words seamlessly into the dialogue. Amazing! Best of luck in the contest. Blessings always, Linda
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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I'm not kidding. You said so much in so few words. Without saying the word death, you alluded to it with writer's genius and besides that, you entered required words seamlessly into the dialogue. Amazing! Best of luck in the contest. Blessings always, Linda
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much, Linda. I am so encouraged by your review. Bob
Comment from Gungalo
You got it guy. But in this scenario it appears both were a lost cause. If she was so down and out what was she doing with a cell phone......
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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You got it guy. But in this scenario it appears both were a lost cause. If she was so down and out what was she doing with a cell phone......
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Hi, Pam. Thanks for your kind words. she was probably trying to call for more drugs hookup. (shrug) Bob
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Smile.
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You'd be ssurprised what the homeless can find or otherwise obtain. LOL...Bob
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I'll bet.
Comment from poesyapprentice
An interesting entry which followed the prompt rules. Then ending left me wanting a bit, although it rang with truth. I liked the different use of rock and wish you luck!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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An interesting entry which followed the prompt rules. Then ending left me wanting a bit, although it rang with truth. I liked the different use of rock and wish you luck!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much for your time and your fine review. Bob (Mastery)
Comment from mommerry
Your story was well written and used the required words in a very imaginative way even though the whole thing made me shudder. But you have nailed it -- when we live only for ourselves, we are as rotten as the corpse.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Your story was well written and used the required words in a very imaginative way even though the whole thing made me shudder. But you have nailed it -- when we live only for ourselves, we are as rotten as the corpse.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Hi, Mom. Thanks so much for your time and fine review. I do soappreciate it... Bob (Mastery)
Comment from adewpearl
Vivid detail of setting and characters
You incorporate the required contest words well
Eyes barely open, he had - add comma
eat breakfast, but - add comma
A gruesome and stark tragic ending :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Vivid detail of setting and characters
You incorporate the required contest words well
Eyes barely open, he had - add comma
eat breakfast, but - add comma
A gruesome and stark tragic ending :-) Brooke
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Hi, Stranger! LOL...Sorry I have missed so much of your work...been away for a bit. Thanks for your time and the help. X0 Bob
Comment from Macsween
Great short story. So realistic and true highlighting the dangers of the druggie lifestyle. Sad but true. I liked it because it was so realistic. Good work.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Great short story. So realistic and true highlighting the dangers of the druggie lifestyle. Sad but true. I liked it because it was so realistic. Good work.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Hi, Mac. A belated welcome aboard Fanstory from an old-timer (2004) i sincerely appreciate your fine review. I will be watching for your work from now on also. Take care. Bob (Mastery)
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a very gritty and compelling story. One can imagine the kind of fair weather friend relationships exist in thi skind of environment. It has all the required words. It looks to be 155 words according to my word counter. Nice job.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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This is a very gritty and compelling story. One can imagine the kind of fair weather friend relationships exist in thi skind of environment. It has all the required words. It looks to be 155 words according to my word counter. Nice job.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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155? God I hope not. Icounted 150?? Anyway, thanks so much for your help, Bill. I appreciate this. Bob (Mastery)
Comment from Shirley B
Wow, although this is only 100 words, it sure says a whole lot. Drugs can sure lead you into hell. You use great imagery describing the hooker. The scene and story itself was dismal. Great job, Shirley
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Wow, although this is only 100 words, it sure says a whole lot. Drugs can sure lead you into hell. You use great imagery describing the hooker. The scene and story itself was dismal. Great job, Shirley
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much, Shirley. I appreciate all you do always. How have you been? Staying steady, I trust. Blessings. Bob