All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "In Velvet Dark"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Kelly Shackelford
I think I need to go take a COLD shower now. lol. This is an excellent piece. I hope you seek to get it published as women are eating up this type of seductive prose.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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I think I need to go take a COLD shower now. lol. This is an excellent piece. I hope you seek to get it published as women are eating up this type of seductive prose.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Bless you, Kelly - thank you so much for your lovely six on this one!!! I'm actually putting together a portfolio, finally. I'm lazy though - I have too much fun writing and haven't really paid attention to submitting! GRRR! :)Sharyn
Comment from Poetic Friend
This is so romantic, and I see why it won the contest. I've love the imagery, the dance, and the anticipation.
The passion defintely oozed in "black and white."
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This is so romantic, and I see why it won the contest. I've love the imagery, the dance, and the anticipation.
The passion defintely oozed in "black and white."
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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thx so much Pf! :)Sharyn
Comment from juliaSjames
Hot picture to accompany your steamy write.
I read your author notes and indeed there is a lilting, swaying rhythm to the stanzas that draws the reader into the passion of your verse.
Excellent word choice and imagery. I liked "taut tuxedo"!
Congratulations on your win in the prompt.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Hot picture to accompany your steamy write.
I read your author notes and indeed there is a lilting, swaying rhythm to the stanzas that draws the reader into the passion of your verse.
Excellent word choice and imagery. I liked "taut tuxedo"!
Congratulations on your win in the prompt.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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thx so much Julia! :)Sharyn
Comment from yonashalom
Wow, this is very sensual, my friend. Wait, how did that go again... soft and moist in secret places? That would be like underarms and Secret deodorant, right? LOL!!!;) Goodness. Hot stuff. Love the ending. Congrats. :) ~Yona
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Wow, this is very sensual, my friend. Wait, how did that go again... soft and moist in secret places? That would be like underarms and Secret deodorant, right? LOL!!!;) Goodness. Hot stuff. Love the ending. Congrats. :) ~Yona
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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thx so much yona! :)S
Comment from gazzagodbod
Wow can see how this won the contest what a fabulous piece of writing superbly presented with a stunning picture thank you xxgazzagodbodxx
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Wow can see how this won the contest what a fabulous piece of writing superbly presented with a stunning picture thank you xxgazzagodbodxx
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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thx Gazza! :)S
Comment from Black_Oxygen
mold me, hold me
to your body
take me home now
This poetry is STEAMING HOT!! After reading it,
I needed a cigarette and a cold shower. The flow
is like a dance and you can feel the heat. You
hold the reader's attention until you are done
having your way with them. Thank You for the
fantasy and the thrills.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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mold me, hold me
to your body
take me home now
This poetry is STEAMING HOT!! After reading it,
I needed a cigarette and a cold shower. The flow
is like a dance and you can feel the heat. You
hold the reader's attention until you are done
having your way with them. Thank You for the
fantasy and the thrills.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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thx so much, Ron - hope you enjoyed your cold shower, dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from steevie
Wow! There was a lot of action going on when I realized that you hadn't even left the dance floor yet. LOL
Sharyn, you certainly have a flame fired up in your soul and its easy to see why you won this contest. Not a bad job for an old gal. They say that the body ages but never the mind. You have proven that here today, sweetie
smiles
hugs
steve
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Wow! There was a lot of action going on when I realized that you hadn't even left the dance floor yet. LOL
Sharyn, you certainly have a flame fired up in your soul and its easy to see why you won this contest. Not a bad job for an old gal. They say that the body ages but never the mind. You have proven that here today, sweetie
smiles
hugs
steve
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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not ready for my wheelchair just yet dearie! :)S
Comment from dmt1967
I was hooked on the very first line and it built up from there I felt I was on the dance floor being twirled well done on the contest win very well deserved thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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I was hooked on the very first line and it built up from there I felt I was on the dance floor being twirled well done on the contest win very well deserved thank you for sharing
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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thx so much dmt! :)S
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend reads very well in this format you painted the scene very well congrats on the win regards Jill
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Yes this is well written my friend reads very well in this format you painted the scene very well congrats on the win regards Jill
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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thx so much Jill!
Comment from Mai Mai
This is a nice piece. It has a very playful feel to it as it expresses a love that is heated with a style that flows. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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This is a nice piece. It has a very playful feel to it as it expresses a love that is heated with a style that flows. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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thx Mai Mai! :)