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All Those Puzzling Pieces

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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from Matoshka
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The truth is here in your words. This brought great emotions to my heart of such pain for the ones in the world who go hungry, homeless and invisible. I see why you won. Congratulations and blessings

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
    Bless you Matoshka! :)Sharyn
reply by Matoshka on 07-Feb-2013
    You are so welcome Sharyn. Your words touched my heart as I'm sure they make other aware. A great message. Blessings
Comment from Terror2s
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I think we have all been guilty of staring past that which we are uncomfortable with. Often it can be a person with a disability, a panhandler or someone in another unfortunate situation that makes us uncomfortable. Often we justify it by thinking there is nothing we can do, but sometimes even a small gesture can be meaningful. T2

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
    You're totally correct, T2. :)S
Comment from damevictoria
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I live in a little town in Arkansas and we have one like the one you speak of but I have to admit that the town people try and take care of him making sure he has food clothes and a home to go to at night. But you know there are just to many of them out there and the world just can't cope with it anymore. Good poem makes you think.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
    Thx so much Dame V. - that's one lovely thing about living in small towns - the problem doesn't seem insurmountable at least, hmm? Blessings,
    Sharyn
Comment from Soledadpaz
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Gritty and poetic all at once. The world is not enough for some. And for others it's too much to deal with. Great illustration choice for this all too familiar litany of feelings, thoughts and actions.

Sol

Sorry I don't have a six for you.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
    Bless you, Sol! Thx so much for your sixer in spirit! :)))Sharyn
Comment from c_lucas
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The citizens in this world are far from being equal. Some beggars are con artists while others are the real McCoy. It is up to each of us to settle the difference. Good job.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
    always a hard one - thx Charlie! :)S
reply by c_lucas on 06-Feb-2013
    You're welcome, Sharlyn. Charlie
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
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Wow. I don't know what to say... this poem says so much. As someone who has sat on both sides of the sign it touches me deeply. Poetically it has good rhythm and flow, it reads well. Thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
    Gypsy, thank you very much for your thoughtful review. It always tickles me when I know my point has been received by someone through my writing. And extra big thank yous for your lovely SIX! So encouraging! mahalo mahalo mahalo!!

    :) Sharyn
Comment from cheyennewy
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Hi Sharyn,

I have done the same and am always ashamed of myself. There are too many poor souls out here that don't have anything and make me feel a little guilty then I remember how hard I worked to have what I have. I like the form you used to write this stunning poem and it is easy to see why it won the contest......blessings, chey

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
    I feel exactly the same way, chey!
    :) Sharyn
Comment from Curtis Hatch
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Sharyn,

The poem is well-written and is vivid with imagery for the mind's eye to see. "Is this world enough?" You ask. Most of the time I think it is too much. With the homeless, jobless, mindless, people roaming the streets needing help, it seems overwhelming at times. Too often, we just drive on by and fuss at the country for allowing its citizens to get in such a shape.

The story of the poem gives me much to contemplate, but I still think it is too much.

Until next time,
Curtis

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
    exactly my point Curtis! :)S
Comment from wordsfromsue
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Sometimes I feel led to help and somedays....right now I'm unable to pay bills on time, so I find myself numbing out more than I used to.... yet sometimes I see a need and I respond.
Your poem was very effective. It's so easy to numb out. We see people who obviously need help.... and then government has peculiar priorities..... life is fatiguing to deal with.

Very good writing.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
    yes, that's the mess we're always caught in, isn't it Sue? WHERE do we stop? thx so much for your thoughtful review! :)Sharyn
Comment from ~Dovey
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Well written and very honest emotions. I guess the question to ask yourself is, "Why not stop?" Hand him some wholesome food, something. Extend a helping hand to let him know that all the world isn't as cruel as it may seem. A simple first step to making the world a better place. It will make you feel better than you might think. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2013


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
    thx so much my dear - I think the question more likely will be, "HOW can we stop?" :)S