All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Just for Me"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from McMurry903
This is such a fun valentines poem, Sharyn! Perfect presentation as always! Very clever, this will surely be a strong contender in this contest.I wish you the best of luck,my friend! Brian
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This is such a fun valentines poem, Sharyn! Perfect presentation as always! Very clever, this will surely be a strong contender in this contest.I wish you the best of luck,my friend! Brian
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much Brian! :)S
Comment from Walu Feral
Yummy! What a great poem from the master of visionary. I really smiled whilst I read this one, I love it. Good luck in the contest. Cheers Fez.
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Yummy! What a great poem from the master of visionary. I really smiled whilst I read this one, I love it. Good luck in the contest. Cheers Fez.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
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hey there Fez - thanks dear! :)S
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This well-written poem is full of appealing descriptions
and seductive imagery. I like the change from "just for you" to "just for me." Very creative
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This well-written poem is full of appealing descriptions
and seductive imagery. I like the change from "just for you" to "just for me." Very creative
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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thx so much Janice - :)Sharyn
Comment from Spitfire
Well, I think that if I ate all of this, I'd regurgitate it before midnight.
to lick the sky
into pink and glowing submission
till it begs for laughing mercy
How sexy is that!
What a lover to travel all over to find the best treats for his sweetheart.
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Well, I think that if I ate all of this, I'd regurgitate it before midnight.
to lick the sky
into pink and glowing submission
till it begs for laughing mercy
How sexy is that!
What a lover to travel all over to find the best treats for his sweetheart.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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and to think I don't even eat chocolate! :)
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Sharon,
A very interesting love poem, very creative and unusal. I particularily liked the second stanza with the descriptions of the sugar can and the sunset. Great job. Best of luck in the contest--Ted
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Dear Sharon,
A very interesting love poem, very creative and unusal. I particularily liked the second stanza with the descriptions of the sugar can and the sunset. Great job. Best of luck in the contest--Ted
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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thx Ted! :)Sharyn
Comment from whispersofthesoul
hiya,
i loved reading this it was great you had me hooked from:
I'll gather, one by one,
cacao beans
and it just got better line by line. i enjoyed the uniqueness of this piece it was refreshing to read travelling around the world picking ingrediants along the way.
well done whispers xx
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hiya,
i loved reading this it was great you had me hooked from:
I'll gather, one by one,
cacao beans
and it just got better line by line. i enjoyed the uniqueness of this piece it was refreshing to read travelling around the world picking ingrediants along the way.
well done whispers xx
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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glad you had fun too, whispers! :)Sharyn
Comment from dmt1967
I like the first two verses you would do all that ' just for you' and the last verse ' just for me' I love that good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
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I like the first two verses you would do all that ' just for you' and the last verse ' just for me' I love that good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
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thx so much my dear!
:) Sharyn
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sharyn,
You have penne a lovely poem for the Valentine's contest. The picture and rose color is stunning and serves to enhance your well chosen words. You have good alliteration through out. The flow is easy and the them is superb. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Hi Sharyn,
You have penne a lovely poem for the Valentine's contest. The picture and rose color is stunning and serves to enhance your well chosen words. You have good alliteration through out. The flow is easy and the them is superb. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
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thx Chey! :)Sharyn
Comment from Titanx9
Aah, this one warms my heart! What a delightful jaunt about the world gathering just the right ingredients for the perfect valentine concoction. I love it. The last two stanzas swirl into that provocative picture. Outstanding piece of writing; I wish you the best in the contest!
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Aah, this one warms my heart! What a delightful jaunt about the world gathering just the right ingredients for the perfect valentine concoction. I love it. The last two stanzas swirl into that provocative picture. Outstanding piece of writing; I wish you the best in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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thank you so much, my dear - I had some chest-beating fun in this one ... not to mention a good dose of endorphin rich creamy brown gooey stuff! :)S
Comment from hifein
this is a wonderful poem. it its message flows magically -- burning red and hot like 'water for chocolate'. -- just right for valentine's day. the presentation enhances your message and the repetitive 'just for you my sweet' works particularly well as it evolves into a its 'just for me' ending. No suggestions, lovely imagery and altogether a great read.
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this is a wonderful poem. it its message flows magically -- burning red and hot like 'water for chocolate'. -- just right for valentine's day. the presentation enhances your message and the repetitive 'just for you my sweet' works particularly well as it evolves into a its 'just for me' ending. No suggestions, lovely imagery and altogether a great read.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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I'm so glad you're into endorphins too my dear! Bless you for enjoying, and a special double/triple 'THANK YOU' for that wonderful SIX! It is a perfect uplift to my morning coffee!
Best wishes
Sharyn