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Viewing comments for Chapter 87 "Neon Souls."
All of my poems of release.
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Comment from
Lisa Charlie
I like your poem about souls that guide one through the night.
I found that the following lines were a bit awkward. Maybe if you changed it to:
Neon souls that shine so bright,
guides me safely through THE dark NIGHT.
Lights my way through A mixed up world,
illuminates my path as it unfurls.
This is just a suggestion. This is your piece and you should do with it as you feel best.
Great work!
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2013
Thank you so much Lisa and I will look at your suggestions. :) Jaq x
Comment from
October21
Neon souls... An interesting write. Reminds me of spirits. It has some sort of a mystery to it although we can see it as a good supernatural element. V
A very different and yet compelling write:-)
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2013
Thanks Shenel I was just trying out a new avenue. :) xx
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