haiku (gentle April breeze)
haiku 5-7=526 total reviews
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
That's pretty. It makes me wanna be in the boat or just sitting on the side line watching and taking it all in. Great job and good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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That's pretty. It makes me wanna be in the boat or just sitting on the side line watching and taking it all in. Great job and good luck in the contest
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for taking the time to review my haiku.
Comment from Melissa Regester
Beautiful use of haiku,5-7-5. The summation line contains great imagery.
Technically, I appreciate that you used lower case and titled the poem properly. Such minute items but it is sacred to the form.
Pagination and photo choice are exceptional.
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Beautiful use of haiku,5-7-5. The summation line contains great imagery.
Technically, I appreciate that you used lower case and titled the poem properly. Such minute items but it is sacred to the form.
Pagination and photo choice are exceptional.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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This is a great review, Melissa. I treasure every exceptional I receive, and your words are very appropriate. I feel that when the prompt says haiku - it should be a proper haiku. Sometimes this site is not very clear on thier prompts. Thank you so much
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. I like reading about spring while there is snow on the ground. I will welcome the gentle breeze of spring. I love all the new scents it brings. Great work.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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I love the picture. I love the poem. I like reading about spring while there is snow on the ground. I will welcome the gentle breeze of spring. I love all the new scents it brings. Great work.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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This is a great review. I love Spring too, and all the softness it brings
Comment from gazzagodbod
aww natures confetti love this so much from so few wonderful words well done my friend and all the best in the contest gazza
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aww natures confetti love this so much from so few wonderful words well done my friend and all the best in the contest gazza
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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Hey, where have you been "old friend" - thank you for the review. Hugs
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busy boy lol missed the site and the hugs x
Comment from Patti R.
This is a beautiful little package, poem and picture!
The showy cherry trees certainly steal the show in spring's blossom parade! And here to imagine them sprinkling down on a pair of lover's as they glide downstream is a very romantic notion.
Patti
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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This is a beautiful little package, poem and picture!
The showy cherry trees certainly steal the show in spring's blossom parade! And here to imagine them sprinkling down on a pair of lover's as they glide downstream is a very romantic notion.
Patti
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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Thank you for enjoying my little haiku, and I love that you thought it was romantic. Now that I think about it maybe that was what I was after.
Comment from Ekim777
A Haiku begs for surprises. Your last line connects well with the previous lines. It suggests some rapport between man/woman and mother nature. Spring has become a stereotype for something gentle. Eliot thought differently when he wrote; "April is the cruelest month;breeding lilacs out of the dead ground...." -Ekim777
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A Haiku begs for surprises. Your last line connects well with the previous lines. It suggests some rapport between man/woman and mother nature. Spring has become a stereotype for something gentle. Eliot thought differently when he wrote; "April is the cruelest month;breeding lilacs out of the dead ground...." -Ekim777
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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I bet to differ, but you have the right to your opinion. Haikus last line can be a reflection or an observation. Mine last line is an observation. None the less, thank you for the review. I don't find April cruel so Eliot's quote is lost on me.
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Eliot's words reflect the soullessnes and disconnect of our times.
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Eliot's words reflect the soullessnes and disconnect of our times.
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So noted
Comment from Cariboubill
This is a beautiful haiku. The syllable count is right on. The subject is delicate, as it should be for a haiku. The whole poem inspires pink thoughts. Makes me hungry for a cherry chocolate!
...Bill
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This is a beautiful haiku. The syllable count is right on. The subject is delicate, as it should be for a haiku. The whole poem inspires pink thoughts. Makes me hungry for a cherry chocolate!
...Bill
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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Dear Bill, you have officially made my day! Thank you so much for the exceptional - I treasure every one. Your review was wonderfully sweet. Hugs
Comment from RYME4U
Very well done. Descriptive. I love the 'pink confetti' image that you paint. The artwork is well chosen, too. A very pleasant read.
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Very well done. Descriptive. I love the 'pink confetti' image that you paint. The artwork is well chosen, too. A very pleasant read.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much
Comment from Gungalo
gentle April breeze
ruffles cherry blossom bough
pink confetti falls
A wonderful Haiku and a definite harbinger of spring ... Cherry blossoms. Beautiful indeed.
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gentle April breeze
ruffles cherry blossom bough
pink confetti falls
A wonderful Haiku and a definite harbinger of spring ... Cherry blossoms. Beautiful indeed.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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You were sweet to review this, Gungalo. Thank you so much.
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Smile
Comment from Gert sherwood
Smmiles a very vivd image of wht happens to cerry ree blossom loo like in the end
pink confetti on the ground
Gert
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Smmiles a very vivd image of wht happens to cerry ree blossom loo like in the end
pink confetti on the ground
Gert
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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Thank you, Gert