Animated Stills
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Wicked Willow"Inspiration of Life from Photographs
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Comment from brenda bickers
Hi TREISCHEL,
I love the tree, it really does look like a model posing and I love that it has a belly button too.
This is so cool. I like some of the vegetables you can find that have funny shapes as well.
A nice poem.
Brenda
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Hi TREISCHEL,
I love the tree, it really does look like a model posing and I love that it has a belly button too.
This is so cool. I like some of the vegetables you can find that have funny shapes as well.
A nice poem.
Brenda
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Thank you Brenda. Glad you liked it.
Comment from terry drake
I loved your first two lines they almost sang to me. I was hoping to read a rhythm in among your rhymes but found your meter count was staggered. This would probably work in free verse. Example of meter: 6-8-7: 8-8-8: 6-9-7: 7-8-8: 8-7-6
I think this would have been a great poem for a 6-8-8 beat. I liked your picture and each line describes the scene. Good job.
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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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I loved your first two lines they almost sang to me. I was hoping to read a rhythm in among your rhymes but found your meter count was staggered. This would probably work in free verse. Example of meter: 6-8-7: 8-8-8: 6-9-7: 7-8-8: 8-7-6
I think this would have been a great poem for a 6-8-8 beat. I liked your picture and each line describes the scene. Good job.
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Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Thank you terry. You made an excellent point.
Comment from aryr
I absolutely loved it. Definitely not what I was expecting but what I truly enjoyed. Your notation that followed was very educational, not only about the picture which was wonderful (you have camera talent as well) but about the poem format. Really enjoyable, thank you.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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I absolutely loved it. Definitely not what I was expecting but what I truly enjoyed. Your notation that followed was very educational, not only about the picture which was wonderful (you have camera talent as well) but about the poem format. Really enjoyable, thank you.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Thank you after.
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welcome
Comment from pmait
I like your nonsense, see nothing that would make it better. O look at that, she is even reclining on her bed, seducing you! Your Animated Stills book idea has a definite appeal.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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I like your nonsense, see nothing that would make it better. O look at that, she is even reclining on her bed, seducing you! Your Animated Stills book idea has a definite appeal.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Thank you very much pmait.
Comment from Rookette
First, I loved the picture AND the poem. I've always found a fascination in the Willow Tree. And "Animated Stills"...I love the concept. Great work, great job. Made me smile :) Smiles are always welcome...especially on Monday!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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First, I loved the picture AND the poem. I've always found a fascination in the Willow Tree. And "Animated Stills"...I love the concept. Great work, great job. Made me smile :) Smiles are always welcome...especially on Monday!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Thank you very much Rookette.
Comment from Joan E.
"Animated stills"--I like the concept--you could create a book from your collection. I enjoyed your lighthearted, three-line, rhymed stanzas and use of the first person. The play on "Wicked" rather than "Weeping" in the title is clever too. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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"Animated stills"--I like the concept--you could create a book from your collection. I enjoyed your lighthearted, three-line, rhymed stanzas and use of the first person. The play on "Wicked" rather than "Weeping" in the title is clever too. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Thank you Joan. Not many noticed that one. Did you notice tree tease vs treatise.
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Nope--I missed that one, but I got the "Hey baby" and the "lay"! Thanks for helping to mine all the layers!! Cheers- Joan
Comment from donaldww
NIce personification of a willow tree in this set of rhyming tercets. I like her shaggy top and threat to call a cop.
I'm in woody bliss!
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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NIce personification of a willow tree in this set of rhyming tercets. I like her shaggy top and threat to call a cop.
I'm in woody bliss!
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Thanks. Love your review. I'm smiling.
Comment from Florrie
I loved this poem about the wicked willow, and I am amused at the title. Willow trees have always fascinated me so much that I write about them, too. Great job! florrie
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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I loved this poem about the wicked willow, and I am amused at the title. Willow trees have always fascinated me so much that I write about them, too. Great job! florrie
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Thank you. Willows are magnificent, amazing trees.
Comment from adewpearl
I love the picture you took and your author's notes :-)
What fun use of personification - you really give this tree quite a personality from your very first line on
Good use of mono-rhyming in each tercet
love the image of the green pom pom
What a fun closing - this poem has a quirky sense of humor that really appeals t o the silly in me :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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I love the picture you took and your author's notes :-)
What fun use of personification - you really give this tree quite a personality from your very first line on
Good use of mono-rhyming in each tercet
love the image of the green pom pom
What a fun closing - this poem has a quirky sense of humor that really appeals t o the silly in me :-) Brooke
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Thank you Brooke. It was a fun write that just spilled out as soon as I revisited that picture.
Comment from mystery poet
I really like your rhyming triplets, for lack
of the proper form description. You have given
this tree a personality completely surprising
to me. She is spectacular in her 'lay in wait'
pose and holding her pom poms out so's to
catch her a male Willow. Nicely penned.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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I really like your rhyming triplets, for lack
of the proper form description. You have given
this tree a personality completely surprising
to me. She is spectacular in her 'lay in wait'
pose and holding her pom poms out so's to
catch her a male Willow. Nicely penned.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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Thanks. I just looked at that picture, laughed, and it spilled right out! Glad it can make you smile too!
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Glad your muse his way out! Hehehe...
Love it, poet!