Eating Mommy's Sandwich
Sung to the tune: I've been workin on the railroad32 total reviews
Comment from Titanx9
This is so cute! The conversations are entertaining and though a lot is going on, the distinction is there as to who is talking. The poem summarizes the activity going on in the restaurant. Excellent job with this one.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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This is so cute! The conversations are entertaining and though a lot is going on, the distinction is there as to who is talking. The poem summarizes the activity going on in the restaurant. Excellent job with this one.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Thanks Titan, I appreciate your time and talent. Jojhn
Comment from Selina Stambi
Very cute! Love the song at the end ... I did sing along as I read!
Typo:
then we're talkin' (not than we're talkin')
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Very cute! Love the song at the end ... I did sing along as I read!
Typo:
then we're talkin' (not than we're talkin')
Comment Written 04-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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I hope you carry a better tune them me!!!
Thank you for your time and talent. I made note of the correction needed and will take care of that.
Many thanks, John
Comment from Jim McLean
Loved it, you can feel the love. A very happy girl in a very happy family. You could believe that Aiden was actually thinking these things. Picture, writings and song a perfect package presented well. I wish you and your family all the best for the future
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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Loved it, you can feel the love. A very happy girl in a very happy family. You could believe that Aiden was actually thinking these things. Picture, writings and song a perfect package presented well. I wish you and your family all the best for the future
Comment Written 04-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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Thank you Jim for reading my story and sharing the comments and well wishes. It is all appreciated ! John
Comment from Dollie Mason
This shows you are a kid at heart, please don't lose that! Very well written. Flowed nice and easy and fun to read. A cute little song with it. Be fun to read this to my little grandson. Thanks for the smile you brought to my face. Looking to more from you. Have a great day.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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This shows you are a kid at heart, please don't lose that! Very well written. Flowed nice and easy and fun to read. A cute little song with it. Be fun to read this to my little grandson. Thanks for the smile you brought to my face. Looking to more from you. Have a great day.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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Wow, thank you Dollie for the great words of encouragement. That's what is great about this site, encouragement, well wishes, positive feedback to everything put down on paper. Thank you once again.,,, John
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Yes I did enjoy it, it was almost the same thing my monster son did to me, and could I get it back? Not without someone calling the child protection agency!! No such thing and mummy protection agencies! I had to laugh and I was singing away to your so funny words! I often remind my son what he did, when his son does what I think is funny!! Brilliant story and such a funny read. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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Yes I did enjoy it, it was almost the same thing my monster son did to me, and could I get it back? Not without someone calling the child protection agency!! No such thing and mummy protection agencies! I had to laugh and I was singing away to your so funny words! I often remind my son what he did, when his son does what I think is funny!! Brilliant story and such a funny read. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 04-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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Thank you Sandra for reading my interpretation of the picture and song and for sharing some of your similar experiences. That's one of the rewarding aspects of FS. The photo is of my granddaughter about three weeks ago. She gives me inspiration to write! Peace, John
Comment from EMB
LOL This seems like the actual picture of when it happened, too. Is it? This is sooo funny, and as a parent of three, I can definitely picture this.
Great story, and good job narrating for the adorable one. :)
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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LOL This seems like the actual picture of when it happened, too. Is it? This is sooo funny, and as a parent of three, I can definitely picture this.
Great story, and good job narrating for the adorable one. :)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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Yes it's a real photo from about three-four weeks ago. That adorable one is my granddaughter, Aiden. Edward, thank you for reading and sharing thoughts and comments, John
Comment from Norbanus
For sure we know that as kids go
This one's about the cutest
Riding tall around the mall
That's winning every contest
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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For sure we know that as kids go
This one's about the cutest
Riding tall around the mall
That's winning every contest
Comment Written 04-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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Thank you Norbanus for your time in reading and commenting. John
Comment from c_lucas
You need an extra line space to show changed of POV. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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You need an extra line space to show changed of POV. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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Thanks for reading and sharing that bit of info, was not aware. Learn something everyday, now I just have to remember.
John
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You're welcome.
Comment from Jina Sarma
well done you have written very interesting story. i appreciate beginning and ending of the story. you have given a special touch to a simple idea, i have a lot of fun while reading it.
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well done you have written very interesting story. i appreciate beginning and ending of the story. you have given a special touch to a simple idea, i have a lot of fun while reading it.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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Thank you Jina so much for the six stars... I never expected it. But most of all thank you for your time spent reading and commenting on my story. My granddaughter is such an inspiration ! John
Comment from honeytree
Great art work and lyrics written.
I guess young children love eating Big Mack's
Sometimes we eat them but not too much.
Home made food to be served and yummy ice cream to eat.
"Fruit loops" and carrot sticks is a reasonable Lunch."
Honey tree
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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Great art work and lyrics written.
I guess young children love eating Big Mack's
Sometimes we eat them but not too much.
Home made food to be served and yummy ice cream to eat.
"Fruit loops" and carrot sticks is a reasonable Lunch."
Honey tree
Comment Written 03-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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Actually my son graduated culinary school and is a full time chef!! He cooks fresh, all her meals. She never had a Big Mac and probably never will they are so disgusting. You missed the points of the story in that she tells the story and takes mommy's sandwich, which generated the song. I see you are not from the States and may be unfamiliar with the tune, I've Been Working on the Railroad. Anyway, thank you for reading and sharing, I appreciate it. John