Spiritual Jealousy Defeated
Satan Was jealous of God21 total reviews
Comment from EMB
This tells the tale of Lucifer's fall from grace in an interesting way, using elements of narrative prose. But there is a shift in the direction of the narrative that seems accidental. At first, the narrator is speaking TO Lucifer, but later he speaks ABOUT Lucifer. Seems like an error in POV.
Other than that, very nice.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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This tells the tale of Lucifer's fall from grace in an interesting way, using elements of narrative prose. But there is a shift in the direction of the narrative that seems accidental. At first, the narrator is speaking TO Lucifer, but later he speaks ABOUT Lucifer. Seems like an error in POV.
Other than that, very nice.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Thank you for reading and responding. I appreciate it.
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello. Very deep poem on jealousy here. Great job with this. You have a good rhyming scheme with your free verse here and its a subject we can all identify with. Indeed, the genre I love reading about. I liked your use of, "On the way to eternal doom, you seek to take the man." Brilliant. Good luck and cheers.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Hello. Very deep poem on jealousy here. Great job with this. You have a good rhyming scheme with your free verse here and its a subject we can all identify with. Indeed, the genre I love reading about. I liked your use of, "On the way to eternal doom, you seek to take the man." Brilliant. Good luck and cheers.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Thank you, Benjamen. I appreciate your reading and responding. You are very kind.
Comment from 9999pool
This spiritual poem is not only enlightening, it showed how the jealousy evolved since the dawn of man. The story continued to unfold of how the jealousy manifested into something terrible - and all went awry, splintered and misguided. Christ had to come and forgive our sins - making us whole again and deserving God's grace once more. Tragic story of the rise and fall of man. And now, we are somewhere in between - still doubting for some. Good write and description of a story so passionate. Cheers.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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This spiritual poem is not only enlightening, it showed how the jealousy evolved since the dawn of man. The story continued to unfold of how the jealousy manifested into something terrible - and all went awry, splintered and misguided. Christ had to come and forgive our sins - making us whole again and deserving God's grace once more. Tragic story of the rise and fall of man. And now, we are somewhere in between - still doubting for some. Good write and description of a story so passionate. Cheers.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Thank you very much. While I appreciate what you said and believe I know what you meant, deserved grace is not grace at all. That's what's so amazing about it;it's not deserved in any way. Thanks again and God bless.
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Hi,
Thx for the enlightenment and I fully agreed with the "it's not deserved in any way". We are so small and insignificant and 'under the sun, everything is but meaningless, just like catching the wind" - this last one will provoke more deeper thoughts, LOL. Cheers. Ritchie.
Comment from artemis53
Beautifully done and in a tone that can be received by the readers. We forget that Lucifer was the best. His flaw was thinking himself better than the one in which he sprung. "And by the power of the Spirit, He opened the door of grace." and that is our shield.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Beautifully done and in a tone that can be received by the readers. We forget that Lucifer was the best. His flaw was thinking himself better than the one in which he sprung. "And by the power of the Spirit, He opened the door of grace." and that is our shield.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Thank you. I appreciate your reading and responding. I believe when He said "I will be like the Most High, he wanted God's power and the worship due only to God.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
This is a wonderfully crafted and penned work. The story from Satan's downfall and his ill effect on man, made it necessary for Christ to come to Earth and live a perfect life. He showed man it is possible with the help of God. He suffered one of the most horrific ways to die, but he did it for me. If I follow his will, I will spend eternity with Him in Heaven. That is one of the most comforting things about this life.
Godspeed,
Curtis
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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This is a wonderfully crafted and penned work. The story from Satan's downfall and his ill effect on man, made it necessary for Christ to come to Earth and live a perfect life. He showed man it is possible with the help of God. He suffered one of the most horrific ways to die, but he did it for me. If I follow his will, I will spend eternity with Him in Heaven. That is one of the most comforting things about this life.
Godspeed,
Curtis
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Thank you Curtis for your kind and insightful remarks. I hope you nderstand that doing His will begins with simply trust Jesus Christ to take away your sin and give you His righteousness? Here's how Christ put that in John 6:38-40
New King James Version (NKJV)
38 For I have come down from heaven, not to do My own will, but the will of Him who sent Me. 39 This is the will of the Father who sent Me, that of all He has given Me I should lose nothing, but should raise it up at the last day. 40 And this is the will of Him who sent Me, that everyone who sees the Son and believes in Him may have everlasting life; and I will raise him up at the last day.â??
Hope that is helpful to you. WE must trust His works on our behalf before we are qualified to work for Him. God bless!
Comment from Keeper Tony
When we consider that jealousy is borne with anger at its core, your narration in this poem certainly explores and portrays its powerful strength. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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When we consider that jealousy is borne with anger at its core, your narration in this poem certainly explores and portrays its powerful strength. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Thank you. I appreciate your thoughts. I read your profile and will look at some of your work asap. Congratulations on being a fighter!
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Thank you for your kind words. It hasn't always been easy but i have very rarely been one to give up. For as long as i have reasons to fight then i will do so. Thanks again.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written poem effectively reminds the reader of how very dangerous jealousy is. After all, it was the emotion/trait that caused the rebellious angels to be thrown into Hell! Very good
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Your well-written poem effectively reminds the reader of how very dangerous jealousy is. After all, it was the emotion/trait that caused the rebellious angels to be thrown into Hell! Very good
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much for reading and for your kind remarks.
Comment from Starlit Ink
The poem describes exactly what jealousy is and where it comes from. It can indeed destroy, but we can overcome it with the right path. I also like how you arranged it in rhyming couplets, which were entertaining to read. I wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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The poem describes exactly what jealousy is and where it comes from. It can indeed destroy, but we can overcome it with the right path. I also like how you arranged it in rhyming couplets, which were entertaining to read. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much for reading and for your kind remarks.
Comment from Treischel
Excellent submission into the Jealousy Poem contest. It's not only on topic, but it's spiritual as well. Wonderful rhyming couplets. A great recitation of Christ's suffering and his redemption of us. And Satan's spiritual jealosy. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Excellent submission into the Jealousy Poem contest. It's not only on topic, but it's spiritual as well. Wonderful rhyming couplets. A great recitation of Christ's suffering and his redemption of us. And Satan's spiritual jealosy. Nicely done!
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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I appreciate your response very much! God bless you.Thanks for your verdict.
Comment from Rondeno
This is mighty. In almost biblical language, it tells the story of how evil entered the universe, and continues to threaten the human race (and how the humans can embrace salvation). Verdict: righteous poem.
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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This is mighty. In almost biblical language, it tells the story of how evil entered the universe, and continues to threaten the human race (and how the humans can embrace salvation). Verdict: righteous poem.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Thanks for your verdict. I appreciate your response. God bless you.