All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "It's Time"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Janice Canerdy
I can see why this sultry creation won. You have effectively used music as foreplay until the time is just right! Is that Jean Harlow?
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I can see why this sultry creation won. You have effectively used music as foreplay until the time is just right! Is that Jean Harlow?
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
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Thx so much, Janice - and yes, that's Jean Harlow - wasn't she lovely? :) Sharyn
Comment from angel123
Your poem is very well written, its sexy and entertaining. It held my interest and kept me wanting to read more. It flows well and its message is rated x or is that just my thinking. Your artwork choice goes well with your poem.
Angel123
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Your poem is very well written, its sexy and entertaining. It held my interest and kept me wanting to read more. It flows well and its message is rated x or is that just my thinking. Your artwork choice goes well with your poem.
Angel123
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
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naughty girl! :) Sharyn
Comment from sunnilicious
That was some good reading. Passionate and loving in makes me yearn for love. Well thought out. Nicely written. And you won the contest... Congratulations!
Excellent work.
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That was some good reading. Passionate and loving in makes me yearn for love. Well thought out. Nicely written. And you won the contest... Congratulations!
Excellent work.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
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thx so much, sunni! :) Sharyn
Comment from pattipac
Your well penned passionate love poem had me hanging on each word, my lady. The sultriness and playful foreplay of expert musicians competing for the acceptance of a beautiful woman was quite creative. Especially like "notes of black and white are thrown, like confetti of desire to cling close and stick to every silken curve you own- I'll lick the off one by one,but not yet, not yet..."
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Your well penned passionate love poem had me hanging on each word, my lady. The sultriness and playful foreplay of expert musicians competing for the acceptance of a beautiful woman was quite creative. Especially like "notes of black and white are thrown, like confetti of desire to cling close and stick to every silken curve you own- I'll lick the off one by one,but not yet, not yet..."
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
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off to the cold shower with you, patti! thx so much for enjoying this fun piece my dear! And a special 'thank you' for your LOVELY SIX!!! :))) Sharyn
Comment from October21
Hiya Sharyn, not surprised this is a win! Well done on bringing out the passion without being crude, so its fit for my viewing:):) loved the simile: like confetti of desire. Beautifully written:)
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Hiya Sharyn, not surprised this is a win! Well done on bringing out the passion without being crude, so its fit for my viewing:):) loved the simile: like confetti of desire. Beautifully written:)
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
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thx so much October!! :) Sharyn
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend congratulations on this well deserved win you paint the scene so well with your words full of anticipation well done regards Jill
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Hello my friend congratulations on this well deserved win you paint the scene so well with your words full of anticipation well done regards Jill
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
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thx so much, Jill! :) Sharyn
Comment from alexisleech
I'm not surprised this is a winner. You have indeed created the underlying tension of passion without it been crude or sleazy in any way. Your choice of Bogey and Bacall to identify with is spot on. Well done, and congratulations.
Alexis x
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I'm not surprised this is a winner. You have indeed created the underlying tension of passion without it been crude or sleazy in any way. Your choice of Bogey and Bacall to identify with is spot on. Well done, and congratulations.
Alexis x
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
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thx so much, alexis - so glad you enjoyed it! :)
Comment from Louise Michelle
Whew - I need a break between stanzas to catch my breath, lol.
I'm writing this first thing in the morning before my usual workout so I'm having difficulty finding the right words to do your piece justice.
My favorite part is the way you describe how the notes take on the characteristics of an embrace. And the constant drumming 'not yet not yet' is marvelous. I'm glad I had a six to give you.
Lou
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Whew - I need a break between stanzas to catch my breath, lol.
I'm writing this first thing in the morning before my usual workout so I'm having difficulty finding the right words to do your piece justice.
My favorite part is the way you describe how the notes take on the characteristics of an embrace. And the constant drumming 'not yet not yet' is marvelous. I'm glad I had a six to give you.
Lou
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
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Well, I'm glad too, Lou! Thank you so much for catching your breath for long enough to read, review, AND enjoy ... AND a magic '6' to boot! Blessings, Sharyn
Comment from rjuselius
congratulations on winning the contest! it surely hit the target rules wise. sultry imagery and passionate keys.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
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congratulations on winning the contest! it surely hit the target rules wise. sultry imagery and passionate keys.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
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thx so much rebekka! :) Sharyn
Comment from Silverlock
Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful!
Smooth and sexy write, Sharyn, no wonder this was a contest winner - it's fabulous!
Evocative imagery, excellent alliteration - reminded me of those old movies with the jazz singer and the band in a smokey, sultry gin joint! LOL
Loved it!
Regards, Barb
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Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful!
Smooth and sexy write, Sharyn, no wonder this was a contest winner - it's fabulous!
Evocative imagery, excellent alliteration - reminded me of those old movies with the jazz singer and the band in a smokey, sultry gin joint! LOL
Loved it!
Regards, Barb
Comment Written 12-Dec-2012
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That's exactly what I was going for, Barb - so glad it did it! I love those old movies too! Special blessings for your wonderful SIX my dear!
:) Sharyn