All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Bleached Beaches"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from donaldww
The opening lines are replete with figurative language. I get the sense you love words, as do I, and when you open your dictionary or thesaurus, you are on a trip to the candy store.
For the next few months, the bleached beaches are no longer peaches. The important thing is to avoid turning into a beached-whale during this bleak season.
Listening to 'Here Comes the Sun' is one antidote to winter blahs.
Cheers,
DW
Good luck with the lonely voting gremlins.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
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The opening lines are replete with figurative language. I get the sense you love words, as do I, and when you open your dictionary or thesaurus, you are on a trip to the candy store.
For the next few months, the bleached beaches are no longer peaches. The important thing is to avoid turning into a beached-whale during this bleak season.
Listening to 'Here Comes the Sun' is one antidote to winter blahs.
Cheers,
DW
Good luck with the lonely voting gremlins.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
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We do love those words, don't we,DW! and I love that song! :) Didn't win - but voting gremlins are always unpredictable - I just use the prompts because they're there, anyway - would go crazy if I banked on "winning" these things! :))))
Comment from Cornelius2000
What a good idea, first setting the positive tone of a healthy, happy relationship, and then contrasting it with one that has tragically broken up. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
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What a good idea, first setting the positive tone of a healthy, happy relationship, and then contrasting it with one that has tragically broken up. Nicely done.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
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Thanks so much, Dave ... contrast is for drama, of course - so each emotion is stronger, yes? Thx so much! :) Sharyn
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a terrific poem that connects the before and after with poignant and opposite images of a relationship that either ended or was rended. Thanks for your work.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
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This is a terrific poem that connects the before and after with poignant and opposite images of a relationship that either ended or was rended. Thanks for your work.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much, Bill! :) Sharyn
Comment from gazzagodbod
oo loved this dark masterpiece love the picture the presentation is fab and all that sour cream great work my friend xxgazzaxx
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
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oo loved this dark masterpiece love the picture the presentation is fab and all that sour cream great work my friend xxgazzaxx
Comment Written 01-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
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thx gazza!
Comment from OLA THOMAS
A good free verse, though not done in with specific thyming, but some internal rhyming and alliterations swell the quality of this work. Nice one.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
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A good free verse, though not done in with specific thyming, but some internal rhyming and alliterations swell the quality of this work. Nice one.
ola thomas
Comment Written 01-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2012
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thx so much Ola!! :) Sharyn
Comment from Selina Stambi
I read and gave you six stars for your grandpa story.
This poem is breathtaking in the word pictures that it evokes - bleached beaches, ice cream dreams ...! I had almost forgotten to breathe when I got to the last line!
Really, really lovely. You are a talented writer. I hope you win.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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I read and gave you six stars for your grandpa story.
This poem is breathtaking in the word pictures that it evokes - bleached beaches, ice cream dreams ...! I had almost forgotten to breathe when I got to the last line!
Really, really lovely. You are a talented writer. I hope you win.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Well bless you so much for reading & enjoying my work, my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from mystery poet
When first wed in purest white like the white
beaches you describe things are just peachy.
Then in time when things worsen and loses come
the beaches are still white, but void. I like
Powerful lines showing how that gold band has
not shine left. Thanks! Best wishes in contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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When first wed in purest white like the white
beaches you describe things are just peachy.
Then in time when things worsen and loses come
the beaches are still white, but void. I like
Powerful lines showing how that gold band has
not shine left. Thanks! Best wishes in contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Thx so much mystery poet! :) Sharyn
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It's a pleasure!!!
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
Excellent expression of love and loss deeply felt. A most interesting way of expressing it in terms of the beach and lost from sunlight. Love the artwork chosen for this poem. Goes very well with the theme--sets the mood of loneliness. A very enjoyable read!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Excellent expression of love and loss deeply felt. A most interesting way of expressing it in terms of the beach and lost from sunlight. Love the artwork chosen for this poem. Goes very well with the theme--sets the mood of loneliness. A very enjoyable read!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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thx somuch MW! :) Sharyn
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Yw MN :)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello to you visionary
I like your original images of comparing the the wonders of love ex.)
bleached beaches burst
with sweet peaches and ice-cream dreams
Gert
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Hello to you visionary
I like your original images of comparing the the wonders of love ex.)
bleached beaches burst
with sweet peaches and ice-cream dreams
Gert
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much, Gert! :) Sharynh
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smiles
Gert
Comment from Gungalo
I did read it aloud and it was marvelous. Bleached beaches really figured in as to a common ground. Loved this part:
naked narrow band
third finger
left hand
hiding from the sun
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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I did read it aloud and it was marvelous. Bleached beaches really figured in as to a common ground. Loved this part:
naked narrow band
third finger
left hand
hiding from the sun
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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aaah, thank you so much Gungalo! :) Sharyn
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Smile.