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Comment from Axiom Gray
Excellent story, Mr. Schott! I didn't really get a chance to focus on it while you were reading it to me in the car, but I can see now that you really spun some gold here. Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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Excellent story, Mr. Schott! I didn't really get a chance to focus on it while you were reading it to me in the car, but I can see now that you really spun some gold here. Well done!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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Thank you sir. The reviews have been quite mixed.
Comment from Ekim777
Well, it seems you have found your literary voice, no mean feat. I wonder if you need overload your piece with all that intellectual stuff. By the way, Shakespeare wrote Othello, not Christopher Marlowe. Marlowe could never have written it. He never had Shakespeare's understanding of human nature. You have mastered the art of dialogue, very essential because people are the action in good writing. I like your exotic image of the sun.-Ekim777
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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Well, it seems you have found your literary voice, no mean feat. I wonder if you need overload your piece with all that intellectual stuff. By the way, Shakespeare wrote Othello, not Christopher Marlowe. Marlowe could never have written it. He never had Shakespeare's understanding of human nature. You have mastered the art of dialogue, very essential because people are the action in good writing. I like your exotic image of the sun.-Ekim777
Comment Written 27-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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Thank you for reviewing. I see I have really jammed a lot of ideas in here that remain unexplored. I know Shakespeare wrote Othello, but not in this story's current world. Bill
Comment from lakeport
Whirled Withoud End indee, there is a lot going on, suspense, action, drama, I enjoyed reading the story. God bless you. Lakeport.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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Whirled Withoud End indee, there is a lot going on, suspense, action, drama, I enjoyed reading the story. God bless you. Lakeport.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your kind and positive review. Bill
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your welcome,
could you please review my poem "Unknown"
thank you. Lakeport.
Comment from Marja G
This is a very interesting and clever mix of science fiction and the Twilight Zone. I like the repetition of the opening paragraphs at the end. An interesting and provocative rewrite of historical figures and their time on earth(?). Imaginative.
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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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This is a very interesting and clever mix of science fiction and the Twilight Zone. I like the repetition of the opening paragraphs at the end. An interesting and provocative rewrite of historical figures and their time on earth(?). Imaginative.
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Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your uplifting and discerning review. Bill
Comment from Twilightspire
Wow. I'm sorry to say, this story was really confusing. I understand what it was about, and the premise was amazing, but some of the description was hard to follow. The dialogue was good and the pacing was smooth. Maybe expand it a bit more to help explain what is going on better. Thanks for posting and good luck with it!
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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Wow. I'm sorry to say, this story was really confusing. I understand what it was about, and the premise was amazing, but some of the description was hard to follow. The dialogue was good and the pacing was smooth. Maybe expand it a bit more to help explain what is going on better. Thanks for posting and good luck with it!
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Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thanks.