haiku (soft pitter patter)
one of the sounds of autumn16 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
I love this Haiku - it is seasonal,
creates a clear image for the reader
and has a clever Satori.
In addition you grace it with nice
alliterative phrasing - "pitter/patter" and
"crisp/cascade"
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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I love this Haiku - it is seasonal,
creates a clear image for the reader
and has a clever Satori.
In addition you grace it with nice
alliterative phrasing - "pitter/patter" and
"crisp/cascade"
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for your encouraging and thoughtful review.
I truly appreciate it.
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Thank you so much for your encouraging and thoughtful review.
I truly appreciate it.
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Thank you so much for your encouraging and thoughtful review.
I truly appreciate it.
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Thank you so much for your encouraging and thoughtful review.
I truly appreciate it.
Comment from EMB
Hmm. I totally understand what you were trying to do with this poem, and it's a pretty smart idea. However, I'm not buying it. Leaves can't possibly sound like rain, and they definitely don't make "pitter-patter" sounds. There's rustling and perhaps scraping. Of course, it's been a while since I've sought shelter from falling leaves under a tin roof, so I may be remembering it wrong. LOL
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Hmm. I totally understand what you were trying to do with this poem, and it's a pretty smart idea. However, I'm not buying it. Leaves can't possibly sound like rain, and they definitely don't make "pitter-patter" sounds. There's rustling and perhaps scraping. Of course, it's been a while since I've sought shelter from falling leaves under a tin roof, so I may be remembering it wrong. LOL
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you, Edward, for your thoughtful and honest review. Regarding the "pitter patter" sound of leaves, I was having trouble sleeping last night and thought that I heard rainfall. Turns out it was leaves falling from the trees outside our bedroom window. That was how I came up with the "pitter patter."
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Thank you, Edward, for your thoughtful and honest review. Regarding the "pitter patter" sound of leaves, I was having trouble sleeping last night and thought that I heard rainfall. Turns out it was leaves falling from the trees outside our bedroom window. That was how I came up with the "pitter patter."
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Thank you, Edward, for your thoughtful and honest review. Regarding the "pitter patter" sound of leaves, I was having trouble sleeping last night and thought that I heard rainfall. Turns out it was leaves falling from the trees outside our bedroom window. That was how I came up with the "pitter patter."
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Thank you, Edward, for your thoughtful and honest review. Regarding the "pitter patter" sound of leaves, I was having trouble sleeping last night and thought that I heard rainfall. Turns out it was leaves falling from the trees outside our bedroom window. That was how I came up with the "pitter patter."
Comment from terry drake
Autumn themes make for a good haiku and your poem is no exception. This season is one of my favorite times of the year and you shared a good verse on the subject.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Autumn themes make for a good haiku and your poem is no exception. This season is one of my favorite times of the year and you shared a good verse on the subject.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much, Terry, for your thoughtful review.
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Thank you so much, Terry, for your thoughtful review.
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Thank you so much, Terry, for your thoughtful review.
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Thank you so much, Terry, for your thoughtful review.
Comment from Sally Carter
Oh yes! We went for a walk in woods a couple of weeks ago, and heard just the leaves you describe. In fact I had it in my head at the time to use that word "cascade" and completely forgot about it. So your poem really resonated with me. It's amazing how much noise a falling leaf can make in the silence.
Great observation which took me straight there.
A great entry, I am sure.
Best wishes
Sally
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Oh yes! We went for a walk in woods a couple of weeks ago, and heard just the leaves you describe. In fact I had it in my head at the time to use that word "cascade" and completely forgot about it. So your poem really resonated with me. It's amazing how much noise a falling leaf can make in the silence.
Great observation which took me straight there.
A great entry, I am sure.
Best wishes
Sally
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thanks so much, Sally, for such an encouraging and delightful review. Last night, while trying to go to sleep, I thought I heard rain outside. Turns out it was the leaves falling from the trees outside our bedroom window. I'm glad that a very fine poet like yourself thought of the word "cascade" when thinking of writing about autumn leaves falling. It makes me feel good that I thought of it too!
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Thanks so much, Sally, for such an encouraging and delightful review. Last night, while trying to go to sleep, I thought I heard rain outside. Turns out it was the leaves falling from the trees outside our bedroom window. I'm glad that a very fine poet like yourself thought of the word "cascade" when thinking of writing about autumn leaves falling. It makes me feel good that I thought of it too!
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Thanks so much, Sally, for such an encouraging and delightful review. Last night, while trying to go to sleep, I thought I heard rain outside. Turns out it was the leaves falling from the trees outside our bedroom window. I'm glad that a very fine poet like yourself thought of the word "cascade" when thinking of writing about autumn leaves falling. It makes me feel good that I thought of it too!
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Thanks so much, Sally, for such an encouraging and delightful review. Last night, while trying to go to sleep, I thought I heard rain outside. Turns out it was the leaves falling from the trees outside our bedroom window. I'm glad that a very fine poet like yourself thought of the word "cascade" when thinking of writing about autumn leaves falling. It makes me feel good that I thought of it too!
Comment from el twelve
very beautiful, the picture was very complimentary. I like these short, precise types of poetry, so few words with so much meaning and can definitely use imagination.
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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very beautiful, the picture was very complimentary. I like these short, precise types of poetry, so few words with so much meaning and can definitely use imagination.
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful review.
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful review.
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful review.
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful review.
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Beautiful fall foliage it goes well with this unique poem.Great choice or words it has a good flow. thank for sharing. Deorre
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Beautiful fall foliage it goes well with this unique poem.Great choice or words it has a good flow. thank for sharing. Deorre
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much, Deorre, for your thoughtful review.
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Thank you so much, Deorre, for your thoughtful review.
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Thank you so much, Deorre, for your thoughtful review.
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Thank you so much, Deorre, for your thoughtful review.