Comment from Angels27

Excellent

Nice moral...in a humorous vein. Can't have the kayak and heat it too...:-) A lovely story cum poem. Enjoyed the read. All the best for the contest entry.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thank you - glad you enjoyed.

Comment from Terror2s

Excellent

Good luck in the contest. This was a delightful tale that flowed well, and the picture was perfect too. Thank you for sharing with us. T2

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thank you - glad you enjoyed.

Comment from terry drake

Exceptional

Very good. Can't have your cake and eat it. What a nice twist with a story line and a great pun to boot. You are a master and I enjoyed the double time verse.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thank you - glad you enjoyed.

Comment from STEPHEN007

Excellent

I really enjoyed reading this story about Kayak Jack.It was written in a very relaxed style with a light sense of humour and some rhyme.Thanks for sharing it.Have a nice day.
Regards Stephen

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thank you, Stephen - glad you enjoyed.

Comment from mumsyone

Good

Cute story in rhyme, though it appears you didn't follow the rules, which say:

Write a short fable-like story where the last sentence starts with: "And the moral of the story is".

The pet peeve of most contest sponsors (me included) is for entrants to ignore the rules, or follow them just halfway. However, if you find out that the last line can be varied, please let me know.

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 Comment Written 20-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thank you - of the five entries for this, only one followed that instruction to the letter. You will be pleased to know that that entry is currently leading the voting.
In this instance I fel that the particular rule was a little pedantic and the intention of the contest was to write a fable with the moral clearly stated at the end - I went as close as I could while still keeping to my meter.
I do agree with you that rules are important.

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

I really had to stretch to get that pun.
This a funny and adventurous entry for the contest.
I think a fable in rhyme should be perfectly
acceptable. Best of luck at the polls.

Peace, Lee


that's for shore?

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thanks, Lee.

You know for shore that some people cain't spell proper.

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

lol this was a funny poetic fable story. loved the moral of the story. You can't have your kayak and heat it!"
poor jack never had any luck. but hope you do

Good luck in the contest.
Regards
Tia



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 Comment Written 20-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thanks, Tia - glad you enjoyed my jokey little fable.