Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Mounting Evidence"A collection of my poems
56 total reviews
Comment from honeytree
I loved the art work and the poem
Was very entertaining and clever.
The poem is certainly something new.
I enjoyed all of this writing.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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I loved the art work and the poem
Was very entertaining and clever.
The poem is certainly something new.
I enjoyed all of this writing.
Honey tree
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thank you - there are some absolutely wonderful entries in this contest - worth taking a lokk if you haven't already done so.
Steve
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! Love this one! That last line is just the perfect topper. "You see her butt beneath the sheet!" The cartoon pic is perfect too. :)
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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LOL! Love this one! That last line is just the perfect topper. "You see her butt beneath the sheet!" The cartoon pic is perfect too. :)
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thank you - yours was great too - good luck to both of us.
Steve
Comment from McMurry903
So clever and very well written I really enjoyed your poem.This read so well with a great flow and the witty humor. I wish you the best of luck in this contest! Brian
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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So clever and very well written I really enjoyed your poem.This read so well with a great flow and the witty humor. I wish you the best of luck in this contest! Brian
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thank you, Brian - there are some absolutely wonderful entries in this contest - worth taking a look if you haven't already done so.
Steve
Comment from janalma
Well, he's sure got the excuses. One for every situation. I don't think I'd trust him. Lol. I don't think she even needed the private eye.
Good poem. Funny, even if the fellow is a rascal. Reads smoothly and nothing sounds forced or awkwardly worded.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Well, he's sure got the excuses. One for every situation. I don't think I'd trust him. Lol. I don't think she even needed the private eye.
Good poem. Funny, even if the fellow is a rascal. Reads smoothly and nothing sounds forced or awkwardly worded.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thank you - there are some absolutely wonderful entries in this contest - worth taking a look if you haven't already done so.
Steve
Comment from Cornelius2000
Delightful little poem, about a maggot of deceit, I could repeat. Nice rhythm, excellent ryming (except for "Suite" and "counterfeit," (you might want to take another shot at those line). Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Delightful little poem, about a maggot of deceit, I could repeat. Nice rhythm, excellent ryming (except for "Suite" and "counterfeit," (you might want to take another shot at those line). Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thank you - I'll concede on counterfeit, but I'm not sure what is wrong with suite - there are some absolutely wonderful entries in this contest - worth taking a look if you haven't already done so.
Steve
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My point, which I apparently didn't make very well, was that they don't rhyme with each other, so either of them could be changed to rhyme with the other.
How about, "in Hilton Honeymooner's nest,
I contest."
Dave
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Steve,
Absolutely bloody brilliant. Your wicked, raunchy rumour and this format are made for each other. Punchy and explicit.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Dear Steve,
Absolutely bloody brilliant. Your wicked, raunchy rumour and this format are made for each other. Punchy and explicit.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Reg, thank you for the review and the six stars - there are some absolutely wonderful entries in this contest - worth taking a look if you haven't already done so.
Steve
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I've never tried a Tetrabreve, but you have made this one entertaining and really hilarious. It is such a pleasure to read a 'proper' poem! Excellent job, Steve. Good luck in the competition. Giddy
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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I've never tried a Tetrabreve, but you have made this one entertaining and really hilarious. It is such a pleasure to read a 'proper' poem! Excellent job, Steve. Good luck in the competition. Giddy
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thank you - Damn, I was trying so hard to make this 'improper' too - there are some absolutely wonderful entries in this contest - worth taking a look if you haven't already done so.
Steve
Comment from Silverlock
Love it!
Got a smile on my face from the first verse, and it just got bigger. :))
Flow and rhyme were spot-on and you told a humorous tale extremely well within the confines of the tetrabreve.
Congratulations, and good luck!
Regards, Barb
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Love it!
Got a smile on my face from the first verse, and it just got bigger. :))
Flow and rhyme were spot-on and you told a humorous tale extremely well within the confines of the tetrabreve.
Congratulations, and good luck!
Regards, Barb
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Barb, thank you so much for the great review and the six stars - there are some absolutely wonderful entries in this contest - worth taking a look if you haven't already done so.
Steve
Comment from Titanx9
Dear contestant, you certainly nailed it with this one, I love it. I hope you're not docked for changing the rhyming pattern, but other than that, you wrote a funny, engaging and cogent poem. Moreover, it's believable this day and age. Great job and good luck!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Dear contestant, you certainly nailed it with this one, I love it. I hope you're not docked for changing the rhyming pattern, but other than that, you wrote a funny, engaging and cogent poem. Moreover, it's believable this day and age. Great job and good luck!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thank you - there are some absolutely wonderful entries in this contest - worth taking a look if you haven't already done so.
Steve
Comment from MelissaBickel
LOL!!! The evidence is amassing I think. This is a fun and well rhymed poem. I haven't heard of or tried it, but it looks like fun.
So goes the saying, "The proof is in the pudding" well the proof is in gathered evidence here lol
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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LOL!!! The evidence is amassing I think. This is a fun and well rhymed poem. I haven't heard of or tried it, but it looks like fun.
So goes the saying, "The proof is in the pudding" well the proof is in gathered evidence here lol
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thank you - there are some absolutely wonderful entries in this contest - worth taking a look if you haven't already done so.
Steve