All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Red Pearls"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Heaven Bound
Quite interesting how having more info can make all the difference. I did not know initially how to rate your poem and was going to pass on it. Then I read your notes, and suddenly, what you had written made sense. Well done. I am so happy you added the comments. But far more importantly, I'm glad for you and your mother that she is OK. Thanks.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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Quite interesting how having more info can make all the difference. I did not know initially how to rate your poem and was going to pass on it. Then I read your notes, and suddenly, what you had written made sense. Well done. I am so happy you added the comments. But far more importantly, I'm glad for you and your mother that she is OK. Thanks.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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Thanks for coming back for it, and for your good wishes!
Comment from James crofoot
Very intense. slightly traumatized. You did an excellent job in the writing of this, the way you emphasized certain words, it was also very graphic. Very glad she was misdiagnosed.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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Very intense. slightly traumatized. You did an excellent job in the writing of this, the way you emphasized certain words, it was also very graphic. Very glad she was misdiagnosed.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much for reviewing my piece James, and for your generous six stars. I'm honored. This piece means a great deal to me. So thank you for "getting" the intensity! Best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from judiverse
Oh, this is definitely worth six stars. I definitely know what your went through with your mother, as my father suffered from the effects of dementia for years. You're so lucky your mother's case was a misdiagnosis. You describe very vividly your mother's terrifying symptoms. The imagery of gold spoons, red pearls, and scarlet flowers is beautifully handled. Your last stanza declaring that your mother would not wish such suffering on you makes a perfect conclusion. judiverse
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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Oh, this is definitely worth six stars. I definitely know what your went through with your mother, as my father suffered from the effects of dementia for years. You're so lucky your mother's case was a misdiagnosis. You describe very vividly your mother's terrifying symptoms. The imagery of gold spoons, red pearls, and scarlet flowers is beautifully handled. Your last stanza declaring that your mother would not wish such suffering on you makes a perfect conclusion. judiverse
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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Thank you SO much for the magic "6" Judi! And for reading, reviewing (genuinely) and understanding this piece - unfortunately many, many people have direct experience and it is heartbreaking that we do not always die with dignity. Thx again!
Sharyn
Comment from words
I was so happy to read your author's note.
Most stories like this one do not have such happy endings.
I love the vivid descriptions of this piece.
You have quite the flair for bringing a situation alive.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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I was so happy to read your author's note.
Most stories like this one do not have such happy endings.
I love the vivid descriptions of this piece.
You have quite the flair for bringing a situation alive.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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Yes, we were incredibly lucky - thx for reading and reviewing!
Comment from Silverlock
Very graphic and dramatic free verse, visionary1234, you capture the heartache that is dementia, or in this case delirium, with wonderful insight. Well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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Very graphic and dramatic free verse, visionary1234, you capture the heartache that is dementia, or in this case delirium, with wonderful insight. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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thx so much Silver!
Comment from joann r romei
you certainly put alot of emotion and descrition into this piece, it gives a clear picture of the illness and the effects, so sad and moving
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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you certainly put alot of emotion and descrition into this piece, it gives a clear picture of the illness and the effects, so sad and moving
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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Thanks Joann!
Comment from Herb
That's frightening stuff. Its like a one continues outpouring of blood and vomit and madness. It disturbs me most, because I thought it a good poem.
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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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That's frightening stuff. Its like a one continues outpouring of blood and vomit and madness. It disturbs me most, because I thought it a good poem.
:)
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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then I have succeeded Herb, in capturing the horror of some peoples' old age - not something we want to contemplate too often, but with its own weird kind of wonder ... thx so much for staying the course and hopefully, appreciating its craftsmanship!
Best wishes,
Sharyn
Comment from Harlequin
A truly interesting and thought-provoking piece of poetry that sometimes pair-rhyming, but really is a free verse that has a chance in the competition. Good luck and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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A truly interesting and thought-provoking piece of poetry that sometimes pair-rhyming, but really is a free verse that has a chance in the competition. Good luck and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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Thanks so much my dear - I love the freedom of free verse, but also love playing with words to increase the "sound-sense" - if you've read any Gerard Manley Hopkins or DH Lawrence you'll see the masters at work there. Blessings! Sharyn
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Thanks for the insight, Sharyn. :-) Ed
Comment from INtity
This is free verse at its best. It has the imagery and words that make a poem great! Best wishes to you and your mother and keep writing on whatever subject or image you feel is right.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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This is free verse at its best. It has the imagery and words that make a poem great! Best wishes to you and your mother and keep writing on whatever subject or image you feel is right.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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Thank you SO much for the magic (hard to get) '6'! I'm honored! Blessings, Sharyn
Comment from Maustin
A very powerful work you created. Thank you for your author notes. Wow. I am so happy to hear that your mom is doing better. I can only imagine. Your work is very emotional and paints that. Powerful art choice. Great rhythm of words utilized throughout work. Recommended read.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
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A very powerful work you created. Thank you for your author notes. Wow. I am so happy to hear that your mom is doing better. I can only imagine. Your work is very emotional and paints that. Powerful art choice. Great rhythm of words utilized throughout work. Recommended read.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
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Thank you Maustin, for reading, understanding, and reviewing!
Best wishes, Sharyn
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Visionary, you are so very welcome. Nicely done.
Blessings,
Miracle