Change of Heart
Life is sooooo complicated.22 total reviews
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Shocking ending .. .always good in a short short piece. Good phrases like: mild headache---if you measure headaches in megatons
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Shocking ending .. .always good in a short short piece. Good phrases like: mild headache---if you measure headaches in megatons
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Phyllis. I'm glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from adewpearl
You stay within the contest's strict word limits well and you have incorporated the required words into the story well without forcing them.
I LOVE the final line. LOL What a great twist ending :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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You stay within the contest's strict word limits well and you have incorporated the required words into the story well without forcing them.
I LOVE the final line. LOL What a great twist ending :-) Brooke
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Brooke. I hope you enjoyed. X
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of Change of Heart. I'm still smiling. What a surprise ending and very clever. You did accomplish the prompt by writing with the 10 unrelated words. Great Job. Carole
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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To the author of Change of Heart. I'm still smiling. What a surprise ending and very clever. You did accomplish the prompt by writing with the 10 unrelated words. Great Job. Carole
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Carole. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. X
Comment from Patti R.
Excellent! What a wonderful twist to an old theme: bridegroom having desperate last minute doubts. Brides have these too! Your little story is one of the few that doesn't use the word murder in it's more common sense. Nice touch with the black birds! I hope Bill says Yes. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Excellent! What a wonderful twist to an old theme: bridegroom having desperate last minute doubts. Brides have these too! Your little story is one of the few that doesn't use the word murder in it's more common sense. Nice touch with the black birds! I hope Bill says Yes. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Patti. I'm delighted you enjoyed my story. X
Comment from Galactia
creative and funny, I especially like the twist in the end.
"Bill, will you marry me instead?" :)
great job and i wish you Good luck in the contest.
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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creative and funny, I especially like the twist in the end.
"Bill, will you marry me instead?" :)
great job and i wish you Good luck in the contest.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much, Tia. I'm delighted you enjoyed my story. X
Comment from juliegrenier
Interesting wording, and had no idea where this story was going until the last lines. Odd twist in the story! Good job, and keep writing!
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Interesting wording, and had no idea where this story was going until the last lines. Odd twist in the story! Good job, and keep writing!
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
Comment from Krugerrand
Very well done! Second paragraph was sarcastically funny. Great use of the verbs stewed and brined.
And of course the last line was a super twist and unexpected.
Fantastically executed!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Very well done! Second paragraph was sarcastically funny. Great use of the verbs stewed and brined.
And of course the last line was a super twist and unexpected.
Fantastically executed!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much, Krugerrand. The last reviewer asked me what 'brined' meant. I'm delighted you enjoyed. X
Comment from Crackerberries
What a hoot... loved the ending ... very unexpected and creative. Looks like all the words are used also. Great job and good luck in the ocntest.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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What a hoot... loved the ending ... very unexpected and creative. Looks like all the words are used also. Great job and good luck in the ocntest.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Crackerberries. I'm glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from tinams
I found this to be an unusual entry for the 100 Word Story Competition and I wish you luck. I'd be interested to know what Bill replied LOL :)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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I found this to be an unusual entry for the 100 Word Story Competition and I wish you luck. I'd be interested to know what Bill replied LOL :)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thank you. Yes, I think one should be unusual if you want to stand out in a competition. I'm glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from wordsfromsue
Funny! This is quite clever. :-) It probably isn't the first time a guy wished it were perfectly acceptable to marry your best friend!
I don't wish to appear stupid, but what is "brined"?
Fun, short piece. :-)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Funny! This is quite clever. :-) It probably isn't the first time a guy wished it were perfectly acceptable to marry your best friend!
I don't wish to appear stupid, but what is "brined"?
Fun, short piece. :-)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Hey, Sue! A brine is the liquid solution used to 'pickle' cucumbers, or meats. He was stewing in his own juices so to speak. I'm glad you enjoyed. X