Comment from made2soar

Excellent

I guess I would describe it with a beautiful picture of a purple flower, make the words royalty on a starless night background, and then slowly pour out the emotions of a giving and lonely heart. You have and very nicely. Thank you, Jim

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2005

Comment from danielg29

Excellent

Wow, you ask some pretty serious questions in this poem. One's that we should all ask ourselves if we are trying to walk in the footsteps of Jesus. I like the self criticism you portray.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2005

Comment from El Romantico

Excellent

You mention so many great qualities of love that it is hard to swallow. We have been taught that love should be one way and you mention the right way. I can feel that you have been more in touch with yourself and your Father and I know that He is helping you get through your trials. Thanks for the read.

P.S. The only part that threw me for a slight loop was: "Can I example love" I am not sure what you mean by this for it feels like it is missing a little something.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2005

Comment from Mrs Jones

Excellent

Can I example love
Share love
Live love

Can I truly
love?
Of course you can and you will when the right one comes along. And if it does not work out once more, you will do it again. Ain't life grand?
Cheers my friend.
Well written

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2005

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

you write a fine poem
then you out do the one from before
then you pen a new one that out shines them all
this is one of your best
John

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2005

Comment from WritingGranny1

Excellent

This is an interesting poem. However, it consists of all questions. Where are the answers? Do the answers lie within ourselves or are the questions only to be asked and never answered.

To me, a few answers would be necessary in order to go on.

W1

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2005

Comment from Lainee

Good

Would I give you my favorite dress
if you were poor and without nice clothing?...I would remove the word nice...

Can I example love...sample perhaps...
Share love
Live love

Can I truly
love?

Jewell I never tire of reading your writing and this is another beauty questioning love and it's deeper undertones with wanting.

Goodluck,
Lainee :)

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2005

Comment from paul england

Needs Improvement

not bad but i would like to see something diffrent i'm from a rough back
ground and did'nt go to school so stuff like this is meaninless to me
no offence hope you enjoy your own work

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 Comment Written 03-Feb-2005

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

this was beautifully written
understandbale and relatable

just a couple of suggestions:
[Can I truly
love? ] <- maybe make one line then on a line under this -> "Can U?" just a thought, cause your description is "Can I? Can U? "
also... this line [Can I example love] is, like, weird wording

all in all... nice work
and thanx for sharing :)

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2005

Comment from unfolding rose

Excellent

A gentle hand to carry a burden an open mind to soften a dream a band aid of love to sooth the soul a kiss of compassion to brighten a day a layer of love to find there way

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2005