The Red Dress
Viewing comments for Chapter 47 "The Red Dress chapter forty-seven"The story of a teenage girl
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, alexis, and i look forward to the last chapoter with sadness as well but that leaves you room to start another book tomorrow. i like your writing style.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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this is very well written, alexis, and i look forward to the last chapoter with sadness as well but that leaves you room to start another book tomorrow. i like your writing style.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your lovely review. Yes, it's going to feel very strange! Your support throughout is greatly appreciated. Alexis x
Comment from axelbeariter
It was as though someone had pulled the rug from under her."/That's a well known cliche. When I'm faced with using a cliche as the best way to plead my case, I go ahead and write it in my Word document. Then I go to tools on the Word menu; click on language, click on thesaurus, and see what other similar word fits. Then I do the same for other words in the cliche. Often, I come up with an alternative phrase that is original in meaning to the same thing as the cliche. That doesn't always work, so I try to create my own original meaning from scratch----Lisa's body was shaking uncontrollably/Remember, try to use an active voice when possible; Lisa's body shook----In Author Notes; on occasion, downright bullied me!/I hope that wasn't me. If so I didn't do it intentionally. I'll be sorry, but pleased to see the conclusion. Like I said (I think), if you engage a professional editor to go over your novel, it will be ready for you to try to get it published. If you intend to do that mainstream, an editor's eagle eye (mine's only an eaglet eye) could make the difference for your success. Definitely, the story is smashing, always jerking the reader in a new mental direction just like all great novels should. I believe you've written a winner. Axel
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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It was as though someone had pulled the rug from under her."/That's a well known cliche. When I'm faced with using a cliche as the best way to plead my case, I go ahead and write it in my Word document. Then I go to tools on the Word menu; click on language, click on thesaurus, and see what other similar word fits. Then I do the same for other words in the cliche. Often, I come up with an alternative phrase that is original in meaning to the same thing as the cliche. That doesn't always work, so I try to create my own original meaning from scratch----Lisa's body was shaking uncontrollably/Remember, try to use an active voice when possible; Lisa's body shook----In Author Notes; on occasion, downright bullied me!/I hope that wasn't me. If so I didn't do it intentionally. I'll be sorry, but pleased to see the conclusion. Like I said (I think), if you engage a professional editor to go over your novel, it will be ready for you to try to get it published. If you intend to do that mainstream, an editor's eagle eye (mine's only an eaglet eye) could make the difference for your success. Definitely, the story is smashing, always jerking the reader in a new mental direction just like all great novels should. I believe you've written a winner. Axel
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Axel, you can bully me any time you like, not that you have. I was just having a little joke. You have always been firm, but taken the time to find merit in every chapter throughout. I have learnt so much from your reviews and for that I'm really grateful. As it happens there are two chapters to go, not one. I thought readers might never speak to me again if I left it the length it was. I have tried to get rid of as many'!s as I can but as you'll see when you read them, there's a huge amount of !s going on. Got rid of the rug job in this one. I must admit I thought the same when I added it before hastily posting the chapter last night. There you are. Another thing you've taught me. Clichés will now stay where they belong. Thank you again. Alexis x
Comment from Malerie
While, little Lisa made a clever move in dropping the phone, after she had pressed Alan's number. Nick has completely lost it. Goes to show that money really can't buy love. I'm sure Lisa could have grown to love Nick or Richard as she matured. I know there are only a few chapter left; still wondering where you are going with this but I'm sure Alan will be there; Nick mostly likely will die. Another good chapter, keep writing, I'm reading til the end.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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While, little Lisa made a clever move in dropping the phone, after she had pressed Alan's number. Nick has completely lost it. Goes to show that money really can't buy love. I'm sure Lisa could have grown to love Nick or Richard as she matured. I know there are only a few chapter left; still wondering where you are going with this but I'm sure Alan will be there; Nick mostly likely will die. Another good chapter, keep writing, I'm reading til the end.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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If there weren't real life maniacs in this world, then Nick's actions wouldn't be believable. Sadly there are, and unfortunately they live in our midst. What happens to Nick? Mmmmm Do I kill him off, or do I save him for another day? Thank you for your consistent and valued reviews. Alexis x
Comment from AlexAX
As usual I was gripped throughout! This chapter was over just as I started, it just flew. I wanted more lol Could you write for me for the rest of my life? :D
Oh that Nick, I could really hit him a few times, he is so sly. I'm sure Alan is listening but with you, I never know for sure lol always got us waiting. Great dialogue and good pace. I can't believe it's the last one and we'll finally find out if they end up together or if Nick gets his way .. he may do us a favour and turn the gun on himself. I love your notes. It is out for all to see and I'm sure we have all loved it as much as I have. You write so well and draw people in, you bring your words alive, make us empathise with your characters. Well done Alexis! I'm sure no-one has bullied you :D LOL Alex :)
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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As usual I was gripped throughout! This chapter was over just as I started, it just flew. I wanted more lol Could you write for me for the rest of my life? :D
Oh that Nick, I could really hit him a few times, he is so sly. I'm sure Alan is listening but with you, I never know for sure lol always got us waiting. Great dialogue and good pace. I can't believe it's the last one and we'll finally find out if they end up together or if Nick gets his way .. he may do us a favour and turn the gun on himself. I love your notes. It is out for all to see and I'm sure we have all loved it as much as I have. You write so well and draw people in, you bring your words alive, make us empathise with your characters. Well done Alexis! I'm sure no-one has bullied you :D LOL Alex :)
Virtual six as I am only allowed to give you five, for now.
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Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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That would be my pleasure, you have no idea what a huge compliment that is. In actual fact there are two chapters remaining because when I looked at it again, I realised that nobody would probably speak to me again if I posted it as one! See? I'm doing it again, stretching out the suspense. Maybe some of the reviewers are right, maybe I have a little sadistic streak. I think I must have when I read some of the things I have Nick doing in the next two chapters! Alexis x
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Haha you always stretched it out lol I feel happy that I know what has heappened but sad too that it is finally over. Your imagination is amazing ...... and maybe a little sadistic xD hahaha Alex :)
Comment from gramalot8
This is a very good storyline in this chapter. Good interaction and diaglog between characters. Definitely holds your interest, especially the suspense in the last part in the car between Nick and Lisa.
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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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This is a very good storyline in this chapter. Good interaction and diaglog between characters. Definitely holds your interest, especially the suspense in the last part in the car between Nick and Lisa.
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Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much for your lovely review. It is really appreciated. Alexis x
Comment from michaelrandolph
Once again alexis i am spellbound by your chapter, such deep intertwined plot and subplots, much like life. The kidnapping and threats from Nick is a nice twist. I love how you bring out realistic feeling from your characters so easily.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Once again alexis i am spellbound by your chapter, such deep intertwined plot and subplots, much like life. The kidnapping and threats from Nick is a nice twist. I love how you bring out realistic feeling from your characters so easily.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2012
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Woh! You don't know how happy you've made me. In fact there are two chapters to go, not one. I would have annoyed everyone with the length if I had left it the way it was. I hope you enjoy them, my friend. Your wonderful encouragement has helped get it finished. Alexis x