The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Too Many Whys"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from RebelRose
That was quite a touching scene between the two brothers. Such a horrible thing for a family to go through. You certainly make it all seem so real, it's hard to keep in mind that this fiction.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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That was quite a touching scene between the two brothers. Such a horrible thing for a family to go through. You certainly make it all seem so real, it's hard to keep in mind that this fiction.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Thank you. Reality is what I am hoping for.
Comment from emmaysavage
You are doing a great job of showing us the ordeal of this famiy and the emotions that become suddenly and innescapably overwhelmong
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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You are doing a great job of showing us the ordeal of this famiy and the emotions that become suddenly and innescapably overwhelmong
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Thank you. I am pleased you continue to enjoy this story.
Comment from Showboat
It seems such a contradiction in terms to say this about a chapter dealing with such horrific images, the the word choices, the visuals, Sasha, they were just outstanding.
For the first time, I just 'went into my mind' for a minute and imagined what I would feel if my father had done this. A truly horrifying thought.
somewhere there's a 'period. barely' you need a comma.
Kudos, my friend. Your writing is smooth, seamless and lovely.
Hugs,
Gaye
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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It seems such a contradiction in terms to say this about a chapter dealing with such horrific images, the the word choices, the visuals, Sasha, they were just outstanding.
For the first time, I just 'went into my mind' for a minute and imagined what I would feel if my father had done this. A truly horrifying thought.
somewhere there's a 'period. barely' you need a comma.
Kudos, my friend. Your writing is smooth, seamless and lovely.
Hugs,
Gaye
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Thanks so much. This is something most, fortunately, never have to deal with, but those that do seldom come out of it without severe emotional damage.
Comment from Cranial Thinker
Wow!!!! I am shaking right now and my eyes are full of tears
feeling so very badly for their entire family;fully understanding the deep perplexing position they face and that one extreme dumb founded unanswerable question that I
beleave will haunt them for one hundred life times;Why did
they not know he was like that???? That alone I feel shall
ultimately prove to become the boom that will undoubtedly
destroy their complete family foundation emotionally and physically....So very well done my friend....I am truly loving this to the fullest....Cranial Thinker
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Wow!!!! I am shaking right now and my eyes are full of tears
feeling so very badly for their entire family;fully understanding the deep perplexing position they face and that one extreme dumb founded unanswerable question that I
beleave will haunt them for one hundred life times;Why did
they not know he was like that???? That alone I feel shall
ultimately prove to become the boom that will undoubtedly
destroy their complete family foundation emotionally and physically....So very well done my friend....I am truly loving this to the fullest....Cranial Thinker
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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So many family do not survive the ridicule from the public and media. Ir is so sad that they are punished for something they do not have anything to do with.
Comment from Realist101
Hi Sasha...Good rewrite! :) I remember this from before...what a horrendous situation. Are you making this a book for submissions? I hope so. I've cried 'til I was sick...so this really rings true...pure misery. I hope you are okay my friend...love! Susan
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Hi Sasha...Good rewrite! :) I remember this from before...what a horrendous situation. Are you making this a book for submissions? I hope so. I've cried 'til I was sick...so this really rings true...pure misery. I hope you are okay my friend...love! Susan
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Yes, I am hoping to publish this one. Which is why I decided to rewrite this. I hope it is better than the first time around.
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It looked super to me Sasha! I will really try to catch spags...tho I'm horrible at it...lol! HUG! Susan
Comment from Janie King
This is well-written..the whole concept is sad and yes, I know there have been similarly real situations as this...what a family must feel in such a herndous nightmare..then people can be cruel to them even though they had nothing to do with it. God bless.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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This is well-written..the whole concept is sad and yes, I know there have been similarly real situations as this...what a family must feel in such a herndous nightmare..then people can be cruel to them even though they had nothing to do with it. God bless.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Yes, this is all too true. People want answers to understand why such terrible things happen.
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Hello,
Great chapter.
You capture their emotions so well.
You are also very good at putting the reader right there in the room with them.
Excellent descriptions.
Very moving.
Interesting.
Great way to end the chapter as well.
Katie
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Hello,
Great chapter.
You capture their emotions so well.
You are also very good at putting the reader right there in the room with them.
Excellent descriptions.
Very moving.
Interesting.
Great way to end the chapter as well.
Katie
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you. I am so pleased you continue to follow this story.
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You're welcome. I love this story. It's very human and interesting.
Comment from Belinda
Sasha, you are the best. Your revelation of James and his feelings, reactions, thoughts, is superb. I always tell my students (I'm an on and off 'coach' in writing articles for magazines) to imagine how the scenes of their writing would form in the readers' mind, and this is a rare example. Wish I still have six stars for you...:)
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Sasha, you are the best. Your revelation of James and his feelings, reactions, thoughts, is superb. I always tell my students (I'm an on and off 'coach' in writing articles for magazines) to imagine how the scenes of their writing would form in the readers' mind, and this is a rare example. Wish I still have six stars for you...:)
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Don't worry about the 6, I am just pleased you liked this one.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
a dog, I fought for just one deep breath of air[,] but my lungs refused to take in more than a single, small gulp at a time;
"Sorry[,] James, I couldn't sleep either."
My mind raced with questions I wanted to ask Mom[,] but didn't dare. I was never very good with people and
the public will be asking.["]
excellent chapter. The emotions seem dead on.
Roberta
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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a dog, I fought for just one deep breath of air[,] but my lungs refused to take in more than a single, small gulp at a time;
"Sorry[,] James, I couldn't sleep either."
My mind raced with questions I wanted to ask Mom[,] but didn't dare. I was never very good with people and
the public will be asking.["]
excellent chapter. The emotions seem dead on.
Roberta
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thanks for catching the spags. I am pleased you continue to like this story.
Comment from c_lucas
This is a period of reflection with no ready answer in sight. Your post is ver well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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This is a period of reflection with no ready answer in sight. Your post is ver well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Thanks. I am glad you liked it.