The Red Dress
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "The Red dress chapter twenty two"The story of a teenage girl
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Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write and with imagery a nice story and with good storyline. The picture blends well with the story. A good descriptive write. Mary
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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A good write and with imagery a nice story and with good storyline. The picture blends well with the story. A good descriptive write. Mary
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much for your lovely review. Alexis x
Comment from James McCorkle
What else can I add to my previous reviews ? You have extended the story, and increased the attention and electricity of Lisa's attempts to find work as a model. Now it looks like she is going to have a break . Having a portfolio is her next achievement. Let's hope that it works out for her. Love conquers all. Amor Vincit Omnia. as they say. james.
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What else can I add to my previous reviews ? You have extended the story, and increased the attention and electricity of Lisa's attempts to find work as a model. Now it looks like she is going to have a break . Having a portfolio is her next achievement. Let's hope that it works out for her. Love conquers all. Amor Vincit Omnia. as they say. james.
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Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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I'm sure that you'll think of something, James. Hold on to yout hat, it's all about to kick off! Thank you again for one of your lovely reviews, and my love to your lady. Alexis x
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Daisy Daisy give me your answer do. James.
Comment from debskatz
Hi alexis,
I'm really excited about where this is going! I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!
Found some spag:
By one(:)thirty she was
"Hi ,Liam, it's - you can see the first comma is in the wrong place
"Look(,) Liam, I'm phoning to ask a favour,(.) I have a girl here, who I think is perfect for a catalogue shoot I would really like to supply for, but she hasn't got a portfolio. I know its short notice(,) but she needs one for tomorrow,(.) (C)can you help?"
Well(,) I'm sure she
the girl a break." Sarah added(.)
"One last thing(,) Liam
When he sends them over(,) I'll give you a call.
before saying good(-)bye.
I'm going ahead & giving you a 5 'cause I know you're gonna fix all these, right? lol
Hurry up with the next chapter!
smiles,
deb
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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Hi alexis,
I'm really excited about where this is going! I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!
Found some spag:
By one(:)thirty she was
"Hi ,Liam, it's - you can see the first comma is in the wrong place
"Look(,) Liam, I'm phoning to ask a favour,(.) I have a girl here, who I think is perfect for a catalogue shoot I would really like to supply for, but she hasn't got a portfolio. I know its short notice(,) but she needs one for tomorrow,(.) (C)can you help?"
Well(,) I'm sure she
the girl a break." Sarah added(.)
"One last thing(,) Liam
When he sends them over(,) I'll give you a call.
before saying good(-)bye.
I'm going ahead & giving you a 5 'cause I know you're gonna fix all these, right? lol
Hurry up with the next chapter!
smiles,
deb
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Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Thank you, debs! All corrected (honest!) Off to edit another chapter which I'll hopefully get posted later. Thank you! Alexis x