The Red Dress
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Comment from rwilliam
It fitted perfectly, and when Lisa looked at her reflection in the mirror she was delighted.OOPS I think you mean it 'fit' perfectly.
NO apologies for length of the chapter. It was fine for me. Interesting and a thrilling roller coaster ride. I mean, my emotions are all over the place right along with Lisa! This chapter leaves me VERY perturbed with men!! :-)
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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It fitted perfectly, and when Lisa looked at her reflection in the mirror she was delighted.OOPS I think you mean it 'fit' perfectly.
NO apologies for length of the chapter. It was fine for me. Interesting and a thrilling roller coaster ride. I mean, my emotions are all over the place right along with Lisa! This chapter leaves me VERY perturbed with men!! :-)
Comment Written 26-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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Ah, my friend, it's a bit like the Chinese take-away thing! That's what we boring old Brits say. Nobody has given us permission to shorten the word 'fitted' yet! God, I'm so enjoying your reviews! Alexis x
Comment from MumEsGirl
Nice twist in the story here. Men are just impossible. Never satisfied.
I love the excitement created by the red dress, it is a if Lisa is tasting the real life of a young woman instead of all the hardship she has endured
kate
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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Nice twist in the story here. Men are just impossible. Never satisfied.
I love the excitement created by the red dress, it is a if Lisa is tasting the real life of a young woman instead of all the hardship she has endured
kate
Comment Written 26-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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The crazy thing is, in the materialistic sense, Lisa had wanted for nothing. The Red dress represents so much throughout this story, I'm so glad that you've picked up on that. It is not Lisa's, but it tells it's own story. Thank you so much for your lovely encouraging review. Alexis x
Comment from AlexAX
An explosive chapter, packed with tension, heat, suspicion, jealousy, frustrations and mis-understandings. I never noticed that it was longer, was wrapped up in finding out what was happening :) A great chapter and I hope they sort it out.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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An explosive chapter, packed with tension, heat, suspicion, jealousy, frustrations and mis-understandings. I never noticed that it was longer, was wrapped up in finding out what was happening :) A great chapter and I hope they sort it out.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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You couldn't pay me a greater compliment! Thank you so much. Alexis x
Comment from Maureen's Pen
This was a stunning chapter again. Lots of emotion, the heated anger and frustration between Lisa and Alan was exceptional work. This darn thing won't let me give you a six yet. But fabulous penmanship.
This was a super fast chapter even though you thought it was long it didn't feel like that when I was reading it.
Great flow in your work it was smooth even with the outburst of anger which at times can leave the reader feeling jagged. Yours was perfectly balanced.
Fantastic imagery as always....
Gotta run, want to read the next chapter to see what happens.
Loved it....
Thanks for sharing, so glad no witch was in this....:)
Maureen
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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This was a stunning chapter again. Lots of emotion, the heated anger and frustration between Lisa and Alan was exceptional work. This darn thing won't let me give you a six yet. But fabulous penmanship.
This was a super fast chapter even though you thought it was long it didn't feel like that when I was reading it.
Great flow in your work it was smooth even with the outburst of anger which at times can leave the reader feeling jagged. Yours was perfectly balanced.
Fantastic imagery as always....
Gotta run, want to read the next chapter to see what happens.
Loved it....
Thanks for sharing, so glad no witch was in this....:)
Maureen
Comment Written 26-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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I reckon it's worked out we're pals, and you've been sent to the naughty class where pals are not allowed (when it comes to sixes!)
Love BC! x
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Dratted thing....You're only allowed to give the same author 2 six stars in 30 day period....But that ticks me off when exceptional work is not getting the recognition it rightly deserves.
Thats my beef...WC :)
love ya BC
xxo
Comment from debskatz
Hey alexis,
Geez, its much ado about nothing. It'd be nice if folks learned how to communicate with each other. But I'm with Lisa, Alan should have said something. And I'd have slapped his face, the twit.
I'm off to the next one!
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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Hey alexis,
Geez, its much ado about nothing. It'd be nice if folks learned how to communicate with each other. But I'm with Lisa, Alan should have said something. And I'd have slapped his face, the twit.
I'm off to the next one!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 26-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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I bet Lisa wishes you were there to do just that! Thank you my friend, your imput is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Hareem.S
Oh my I feel like crying after reading this! Why did they have to fight? Though this is excatly what happens in real life, everything is not all that rosy. I hope they end this strife. Poor Lisa. A very well penned down chapter I was hooked till the end.
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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Oh my I feel like crying after reading this! Why did they have to fight? Though this is excatly what happens in real life, everything is not all that rosy. I hope they end this strife. Poor Lisa. A very well penned down chapter I was hooked till the end.
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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Your reviews are wonderful, and so heartfelt. Thank you! Alexis x
Comment from robyn corum
I must tell you that I missed the notice about the language or I wouldn't have read this piece. Having said that, it was very well-written and kept my attention throughout. Good work.
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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I must tell you that I missed the notice about the language or I wouldn't have read this piece. Having said that, it was very well-written and kept my attention throughout. Good work.
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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I do apologise if the language caused any offence. To be honest, it's not really my thing either, but I felt it was very much part of the characters personality to use it. Thank you so much for reviewing anyway. Alexis x