The Red Dress
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Comment from James McCorkle
Top marks again for strengthening the story even more. Romance is blooming like a huge red rose. Nick is positive that he loves LIsa, and young LIsa at 17 doesn't really know what she feels and is a bit afraid of being rushed. Temptation is there to get away from her mother, but??? What is going to happen next. Again you have us hanging Alexis
James McCorkle.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Top marks again for strengthening the story even more. Romance is blooming like a huge red rose. Nick is positive that he loves LIsa, and young LIsa at 17 doesn't really know what she feels and is a bit afraid of being rushed. Temptation is there to get away from her mother, but??? What is going to happen next. Again you have us hanging Alexis
James McCorkle.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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You have worked it all out perfectly my friend. Could be because we speak the same language! Take care, Alexis x
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You make it easy to read, and very enjoyable too. James.
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MY favourite colour is blue, but the Red Dress is captivating at present. James.
Comment from MumEsGirl
Well written chapter, good lively flow. The characters are developing nicely. Still trying to figure the sudden change in Fiona though. If Lisa is from Essex, why is she telling Nick she lives in Scotland.
Enlighten me please, I thing I may have missed a chapter
kate
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Well written chapter, good lively flow. The characters are developing nicely. Still trying to figure the sudden change in Fiona though. If Lisa is from Essex, why is she telling Nick she lives in Scotland.
Enlighten me please, I thing I may have missed a chapter
kate
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Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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The first two chapters, when Lisa runs off, are set in Glasgow, Scotland. Chapter three and four are set a year later when Lisa and her family are on their annual holiday in the Isle of Man (situated between Scotland and Ireland.) Fiona hasn't changed, but the police involvement the year before has made her more wary about subjecting Lisa to physical violence. The irony is that Lisa's parents are fairly wealthy, which is why Lisa feels that she should keep her mothers alcoholism and her abuse a secret, because it would cause the family such humiliation. This chapter sees Lisa considering a proposal from an older wealthy tax exile living in the Isle of Man, not because he's wealthy and attractive, but because it could be a means of escaping her mothers overpowering vindictiveness. Thank you so much for your review, I shall add to the authors notes so that it should be hopefully clearer. Alexis x
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Thank you so much for that Alexis, I guess I had skipped back to chapter two, I would have refreshed my brain. I suffer from Fibromyalgia and sometimes this condition causes a thing known as brain fog.
Clarification must appreciated
kate
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No problem, I must admit that I'm following four different books on here at the moment and it happens to me all the time!
Comment from Delirium Author
It took me this whole chapter to figure out whether Nick was really in love or just misinterpreting feelings for a girl he's known a long time just because she's legal (in some places) and hot! ha ha. Well, I look forward to seeing what he's like in future chapters. Nice job. Thanks for sharing. :)
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It took me this whole chapter to figure out whether Nick was really in love or just misinterpreting feelings for a girl he's known a long time just because she's legal (in some places) and hot! ha ha. Well, I look forward to seeing what he's like in future chapters. Nice job. Thanks for sharing. :)
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Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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I can understand it being a bit confusing if you haven't read the previous chapters. Can you tell me how you think this chapter needs improving? Constructive criticism would be appreciated in light of your marks. Thank you so much, Alexis x
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I didn't find it confusing at all. I was intriguied that I couldn't figure out if Nick was genuine or not. I shall read the other parts, but I liked this one. :)