Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your contest entry. I struggle myself with sleep sometimes also and it's my muse letting me know I need to write. Your poem flowed smoothly and I wish you the best of luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012

thanks, again, barbara -- love, jan

Comment from Rahul@ISM_India

Excellent

This is really a great poem!
The message is very thoughtful.
The flow and appeal seem so perfect.
Pleasure to read and review!
Happy New Year

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012

thanks so much, Rahul24011989 -- love, jan

Comment from Carrie Smith

Excellent

Tears well up as does a tsunami. A great simile. "reawakened by who knows what" - from where do the sad memories suddenly overwhelm us come. Heck, I have very little faith in what, any of those weather men spout off about. Good job, Jan. xxSusan

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012

thanks so much, Carrie -- love, jan

reply by Carrie Smith on 03-Jan-2012

Welcome! :)

Comment from Juliette Chamberlain

Excellent

A sudden memory, a sad thought, or sometimes just remembering can cause that cascade of tears.
The metaphor of the tsunami with all its destructive power is mirrored in the damage caused to the individual by tears.
The 'darned warning service,' and the ambiguity it conveys is excellent.

Best wishes for the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012

thanks, Juliette -- I almost took out the lines about the warning service but some of my non-Fanstory friends thought that would be a mistake -- love, jan

Comment from Earl of Oxford

Excellent

Terrific personification of 'tears', Jan. Well, I hope I have your theme right as otherwise I'm going to look a real chump. :-)

Fab metaphors throughout in this sad yet captivating free verse write. You make them sound SO powerful and imposible to restrain. Wonderful phraseology in this talented write. Excellent ending too to take away some depression with wit.

Bravo!

Best wishes, earl

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012

yes, Earl, you have the them exactly right -- I toyed with taking out the last two lines but my non-fanstory friends suggested I leave them -- I'm glad I did -- love, jan

Comment from adewpearl

Exceptional

effective simile of the tsunamis
your description of the tears that come to you in the middle of the night is stunning in its imagery and emotion
every line is worth quoting, Jan. A strong contender in the free-verse poetry contest, I'm sure. Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012

thanks, Brooke -- it seems most of my tears come late at night -- maybe I should become a morning person to eradicate the problem -- thanks so much for this exceptional rating -- I am honored and humbled -- love, jan

Comment from cathmine

Excellent

Rdfrdmom2, your free verse poem is filled with metaphors that had my mind jumping. Natural disasters or internal tsunamis? Very good writing, and I'm with you: blame the weather service.
Cathmine

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012

Cathmine: easier to blame the warning service than anything else, right? thanks. love, jan

Comment from peggles

Excellent

The night is the time we are are prone to reflective thoughts and these can be sad memories
It is not unusual for tears fall then till merciful sleep finds us
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words
I found this to be moving and touching
Well done

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012

thanks, peggles -- sometimes the tears come before the reflections -- love, jan

Comment from Jewell McChesney

Excellent

What a beautiful piece of poetry. You have great use of metaphor throughout with deep thought.
I gathered you were speaking of tears.
Hope everything is truly ok.
I have nothing to suggest for change, except to stop crying, dear.
God bless.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012

thanks for asking, VisionaryPoet777 -- I struggle with depression due to my chronic pain issues -- I'm seeing a rheumatologist now and we are making some inroads on my problems -- love, jan

reply by Jewell McChesney on 03-Jan-2012

I will keep you in my prayers. I can relate.

Comment from Magics02

Excellent

Another amazing free verse for the contest written by you. I am admired of your writing Jan and I also notice to this one those metaphors you used were excellent. You have a great soul and heart and it comes out through your writing.

I also notice you have written some books as well. If you don't mind me asking are they all self published? Great writer. Great success.

Blessings in the New Year ahead Jan.

Love this one! Best of wishes in the contest!

Mona
xox

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012

yes, Mona -- all my books are self-published except for Tapestry -- that was a group project for Omega Publications -- it is very difficult to get a book of poetry published unless you have a very public name -- love, jan

reply by Magics02 on 03-Jan-2012

I hear that and you are ahead of me in this area:) Great job Jan xoxo