A Book of ... Free Verse (Vol.1)
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "My Breakfast ..."Metre ... Freeverse
73 total reviews
Comment from jadapenn
Ah, so you're trying a whole lot of new forms, Bicpen. I'm not a great one for free verse. I write novels so do enough free verse there, lol. I liked this short, calm breakfast. Tea, some toast, an egg and after a while perhaps another egg. Most of us are rushed off our feet and just stuff in the first thing that comes along. Well done. I enjoyed. luv jada
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Ah, so you're trying a whole lot of new forms, Bicpen. I'm not a great one for free verse. I write novels so do enough free verse there, lol. I liked this short, calm breakfast. Tea, some toast, an egg and after a while perhaps another egg. Most of us are rushed off our feet and just stuff in the first thing that comes along. Well done. I enjoyed. luv jada
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Excellent, many thanks. Glad you enjoyed...
Comment from KathyH
I really liked this. I liked the simplicity and the whimsey that this poem offered. I could see this happy person pleased with the morning and life. Could write. Kathy
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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I really liked this. I liked the simplicity and the whimsey that this poem offered. I could see this happy person pleased with the morning and life. Could write. Kathy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Excellent.
Comment from fairy77
LOL!I liked this one.I don't know quite what appealed.I think the simpleness.It was short but said a funny poem.Well written and very witty.beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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LOL!I liked this one.I don't know quite what appealed.I think the simpleness.It was short but said a funny poem.Well written and very witty.beth fairy77.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Glad you could see it...lol.
Comment from mumsyone
While your free verse is okay, the subject leaves a lot to be desired as far as a poem is concerned, i.e., it offers nothing for your readers. As a result, I am rating only the form, not the content.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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While your free verse is okay, the subject leaves a lot to be desired as far as a poem is concerned, i.e., it offers nothing for your readers. As a result, I am rating only the form, not the content.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Excellent...in future I will be working on my content. Many thanks.
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Good for you! As far as I'm concerned, content is actually the most important part of a poem. If it doesn't say something that your readers can enjoy or relate to, no form in the world is going to make it a good poem.
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Well I did state it was my first attempt at this form...a small begining I think...
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You're right, but there's no better time to learn. I admire the fact that you are trying.
Comment from l.raven
A very nicely written free verse. I like the way you worded it, and the picture is just perfect. So now I know what I will have for breakfast. Great write
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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A very nicely written free verse. I like the way you worded it, and the picture is just perfect. So now I know what I will have for breakfast. Great write
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Many thanks...
Comment from JW
This is a short, yet interesting poem. It should like a good way to start the day.
Personally, both Peedy (my dog) and I had eggs, grits, bacon and toast - with coffee, this morning. jw
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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This is a short, yet interesting poem. It should like a good way to start the day.
Personally, both Peedy (my dog) and I had eggs, grits, bacon and toast - with coffee, this morning. jw
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Excellen, good healthy diet.
Comment from Kaine Darcwater
Obviously, you could have done much better with free verse. I have no doubt that you have the talent. This was a good poem, but it just fell flat, went sunny side up, a little over easy. Then again there could have been a word limit. Kudos. ;)
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Obviously, you could have done much better with free verse. I have no doubt that you have the talent. This was a good poem, but it just fell flat, went sunny side up, a little over easy. Then again there could have been a word limit. Kudos. ;)
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Maybe...do you write free verse...
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All the time my friend.
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No worries...
Comment from Val Crisson
Love the simplicity of this poem. I tire of poets trying to make daily life so difficult. One egg or two is such refreshing question, and is based on what every human does each day - choose what one eats
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Love the simplicity of this poem. I tire of poets trying to make daily life so difficult. One egg or two is such refreshing question, and is based on what every human does each day - choose what one eats
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Glad you could see it`s beauty.
Comment from gazzagodbod
oooh love boiled eggs and soldier men with a pinch of salt read your poem and then had to eat some thanks my friend gazzagodbod
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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oooh love boiled eggs and soldier men with a pinch of salt read your poem and then had to eat some thanks my friend gazzagodbod
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Excellent...the more the merrier.
Comment from mermaids
I love this little poem! I am a breakfast person and you capture so much in few words here. I like how you state you might have another egg.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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I love this little poem! I am a breakfast person and you capture so much in few words here. I like how you state you might have another egg.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Only if I feel like it...lol.
