Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Country Justice"A collection of my poems
100 total reviews
Comment from Lincoln's Black Dog
Brilliant poem. Your words were perfectly chosen and your rhythm and rhyme were superlative. I enjoyed imagining these courtroom shenanigans play out. Thank you for a fantastic read.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Brilliant poem. Your words were perfectly chosen and your rhythm and rhyme were superlative. I enjoyed imagining these courtroom shenanigans play out. Thank you for a fantastic read.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Matoshka
I so LOVED this. It read like a melody and was so funny. This was just so cute and I loved the line where Roberta was Rob. I laughed so hard, it was great, I can see why you won the contest. It was awesome. Blessings
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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I so LOVED this. It read like a melody and was so funny. This was just so cute and I loved the line where Roberta was Rob. I laughed so hard, it was great, I can see why you won the contest. It was awesome. Blessings
Comment Written 24-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review.
I love to hear that a poem of mine made people really laugh - that's what it's all about, though the contest win is a pleasant bonus!
Steve
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You are so welcome Steve. It was just wonderful and creative, what a writer you are. It was so much fun and yes, the win is a bonus. LOL Blessings.
Comment from ELumpkins
An excellent Quatrain Poem. It is as the author has been unfortunate enough to face some of our country judges. It is a fact that some of these back woods judges will let you off if you have something he wants and you indicate that it is his. This must have the case here. Good read.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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An excellent Quatrain Poem. It is as the author has been unfortunate enough to face some of our country judges. It is a fact that some of these back woods judges will let you off if you have something he wants and you indicate that it is his. This must have the case here. Good read.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thank you.
I am sure some perversions of justice occur wherever the setting - hopefully, most of the time our justice system works fairly.
Steve
Comment from humpwhistle
Oh, Steve, I am so sorry I missed this during
the competition, but this poem is delightful,
and I can easily see why it won. An 'obvious knob'
sent me over the edge.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Oh, Steve, I am so sorry I missed this during
the competition, but this poem is delightful,
and I can easily see why it won. An 'obvious knob'
sent me over the edge.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 24-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Lee.
The win was anything but a foregone conclusion. Phattp's Mechanic poem, I felt, was a wonderful piece and would have won 9 times out of 10...
I had fun with this.
Steve
Comment from peggles
Such a fun read
Certainly made my day
What a fantastic poem It was fun it rhymed and it was beautifully balanced
I thought the last line was priceless
I enjoyed this so very much
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Such a fun read
Certainly made my day
What a fantastic poem It was fun it rhymed and it was beautifully balanced
I thought the last line was priceless
I enjoyed this so very much
Comment Written 24-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your very kind words. I like o bring a smile to people's faces...
Steve
Comment from jaeladarling
I LOVE THIS! Hahaha! So many times I can see the end coming, but not with this one! I'm still laughing, and I will surely be sharing this with friends. I can see why you won. Congrats and thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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I LOVE THIS! Hahaha! So many times I can see the end coming, but not with this one! I'm still laughing, and I will surely be sharing this with friends. I can see why you won. Congrats and thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thank you, jd
I was going to try to foreshadow the ending a little, but beyond the name and making him/her tall, I couldn't squeeze anything in. It's even better when you are surprised and can look back and go 'Of course!'
Steve
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Oh yeah, don't change a thing! Love it!
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I see why this was a winner. It's funny and well written. I enjoyed the rollicking rhythm achieved by the inner rhymes in the first and fourth lines of each quatrain, and the rhyming throughout is fresh and inventive. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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I see why this was a winner. It's funny and well written. I enjoyed the rollicking rhythm achieved by the inner rhymes in the first and fourth lines of each quatrain, and the rhyming throughout is fresh and inventive. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 24-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Jeanie.
I borrowed the rhythmic pattern and that internal rhyme from one of Banjo Patterson'e classic comic verses 'A Bush Christening.' It was surprisingly hard to get consistent, but the final effecr was worthwhile.
Steve
Comment from phattp
Hi.
Well, there's very little more to add to what I have already said about this classic piece. It's a work of art and a thoroughly deserving winner of any contest.
Reviewing it now just gives me the opportunity to award 6 stars. It deserves 10! A great poem by a very accomplished
'rhymesmith'. ( okay, I made that word up). :)
I don't understand why, but I can't get the 6 star rating to appear. If they are rationed, then I will return with a 6 star as soon as I'm able to.
Very well done. Congratulations on the contest win.
:) P.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Hi.
Well, there's very little more to add to what I have already said about this classic piece. It's a work of art and a thoroughly deserving winner of any contest.
Reviewing it now just gives me the opportunity to award 6 stars. It deserves 10! A great poem by a very accomplished
'rhymesmith'. ( okay, I made that word up). :)
I don't understand why, but I can't get the 6 star rating to appear. If they are rationed, then I will return with a 6 star as soon as I'm able to.
Very well done. Congratulations on the contest win.
:) P.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thank you.
As I have said already, you're not a bad rhymesmith yourself, and not just in the funny stuff either, I see by your approaching storm poem. Sometimes a second place prize is appropriate...
Yes, the sixers are rationed - four per week I believe, and also only one to the same author in a month? Something like that. I'm fairly stingy with mine and rarely run out, but from others' comments I know they run out towards the end of the week...
Thanks again for the kind comments - I knew I had to pull out something special because I had already seen your clever piece.
Steve
Comment from strandregs
One good humour desrves another.you make me smile I sing your praise , like a penguin that has no pebbles.
greatly enjoyed your judgy adventure.Zelick
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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One good humour desrves another.you make me smile I sing your praise , like a penguin that has no pebbles.
greatly enjoyed your judgy adventure.Zelick
Comment Written 24-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Z
Keep smiling - I'll keep writing.
Isn't a penguin with no pebbles going to be a grumpy little bird??
Steve
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I don't know about that ,though rumor has it- he be mighty horny.Z
Comment from Penpal
Hahahaha, Very well done. The poem's rhythm is right on along with the rhyming. The story is extremely well put together, and I loved the ending. Creative, and unique. Great job,
Very, very entertaining and funny.
Penpal
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Hahahaha, Very well done. The poem's rhythm is right on along with the rhyming. The story is extremely well put together, and I loved the ending. Creative, and unique. Great job,
Very, very entertaining and funny.
Penpal
Comment Written 24-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thanks, pp.
I borrowed the rhythmic pattern and that internal rhyme from one of Banjo Patterson'e classic comic verses 'A Bush Christening.' It was surprisingly hard to get consistent, but the final effecr was worthwhile.
Steve