Two's Company
A Light look at a serious conflict22 total reviews
Comment from WilliamDeen
LOL... I can see why they had a fight! She didn't want mother-in-law to come visit! LOL Good story with good characters and the dialogue seems real.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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LOL... I can see why they had a fight! She didn't want mother-in-law to come visit! LOL Good story with good characters and the dialogue seems real.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Thank for the kind review and I am thrilled you enjoyed.
Comment from Carolyn 12
Your story held my interest and kept me reading. The end was funny and with an abrupt change from oh no a break up to mom can come. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Your story held my interest and kept me reading. The end was funny and with an abrupt change from oh no a break up to mom can come. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Thank you for reviewing and commenting. I am glad you thought it funny.
Comment from forestport12
Had a good laugh with this one. A mamma's boy for sure. She must live down the road or she picked him up down the road. They both probably wanted to frighten the heck out of her. Lot's of fun reading this one.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Had a good laugh with this one. A mamma's boy for sure. She must live down the road or she picked him up down the road. They both probably wanted to frighten the heck out of her. Lot's of fun reading this one.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Thank you for commenting and the fine review. I am glad you enjoyed.
Comment from bhogg
Short word count, specific words to be used and you still managed to write a story. These contests are always tough, but this should do well. Bill
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Short word count, specific words to be used and you still managed to write a story. These contests are always tough, but this should do well. Bill
Comment Written 15-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Thank you Bill, I appreciate the vote of confidence here and the wonderful review.
Comment from adewpearl
Mom can come to visit - capitalize Mom as it's used as her name in this sentence
What a funny ending - I never suspected their argument had been about that! LOL
You've stayed within the strict word limits and you've used the required words well in this amusing story with its surprise ending. Good luck in the contest :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Mom can come to visit - capitalize Mom as it's used as her name in this sentence
What a funny ending - I never suspected their argument had been about that! LOL
You've stayed within the strict word limits and you've used the required words well in this amusing story with its surprise ending. Good luck in the contest :-) Brooke
Comment Written 15-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the wonderful review and comments. I will make the correction right away.
Comment from missy98writer
Author,
your flash fiction story is smartly written with very good descriptive writing. In 202 words you've effectively managed to create a setting, conflict, and a resolve to your story. Your story is excellent and a real contender in the 200 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt. As I read your story came to life in my head as i read. You did a mighty fine job using the requires words in an entertaining story. We learn Maria's new husband, Mark, is missing. The art work you used is perfect. I loved the humor at the ending. I wish you good luck in the contest. Keep on writing excellent flash fiction and have a wonderful day. I'd recommend this story with other reviewers too.
Missy.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Author,
your flash fiction story is smartly written with very good descriptive writing. In 202 words you've effectively managed to create a setting, conflict, and a resolve to your story. Your story is excellent and a real contender in the 200 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt. As I read your story came to life in my head as i read. You did a mighty fine job using the requires words in an entertaining story. We learn Maria's new husband, Mark, is missing. The art work you used is perfect. I loved the humor at the ending. I wish you good luck in the contest. Keep on writing excellent flash fiction and have a wonderful day. I'd recommend this story with other reviewers too.
Missy.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the wonderful, encouraging review and comments.
Comment from Bellydanser
Well done in such short order. You build the tension nicely and then hit us with the humorous ending at just the right moment. The writing is polished. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2011
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Well done in such short order. You build the tension nicely and then hit us with the humorous ending at just the right moment. The writing is polished. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2011
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Thank you so much for this review with kind comments. Glad you enjoyed reading.
Comment from djsaxon
Impressive. You covered all the bases in the first para, and none of felt contrived. You then build the tension, and finally let us off the hook with a giggle!
Loved it. Cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2011
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Impressive. You covered all the bases in the first para, and none of felt contrived. You then build the tension, and finally let us off the hook with a giggle!
Loved it. Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 14-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2011
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Thank you so much and I am delighted you enjoyed this piece.
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ur welcome
Comment from mumsyone
This is good flash fiction, well written, with a good twist at the end. This would definitely be a conflict in some marriages. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2011
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This is good flash fiction, well written, with a good twist at the end. This would definitely be a conflict in some marriages. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2011
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. The generous stars are appreciated.
Comment from Denise S
I think you found just the right story for the topic. It was nicely done and I enjoyed reading it. You used the words well. I liked it
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2011
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I think you found just the right story for the topic. It was nicely done and I enjoyed reading it. You used the words well. I liked it
Comment Written 14-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2011
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Thank you Denise, I appreciate the kind comments and generous rating.