Fishin' Buddies
a children's story28 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
Wow, this was a beautiful little story about the special bond between a boy and his grandpa. I miss that for my kids I must say. Neither of them know their real Poppa on their fathers side, for reasons I can't get into here...and of course you know the story on my side...they have a step poppa who is wonderful and kinda makes up for that but I would have loved my dad to have met them both, Jackson in particular as I just know there are similarities and my dad would have loved him so much...you have captured the magic of a wise old soul and the connection he has with his tiny legacy. I loved what you had written in italics etc. Great narration and I smiled all the way through reading this. I also think fishing is one of the loveliest past times for a grandson and his grandpa. Great stuff.
Cheers closet xoxo
PS Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Wow, this was a beautiful little story about the special bond between a boy and his grandpa. I miss that for my kids I must say. Neither of them know their real Poppa on their fathers side, for reasons I can't get into here...and of course you know the story on my side...they have a step poppa who is wonderful and kinda makes up for that but I would have loved my dad to have met them both, Jackson in particular as I just know there are similarities and my dad would have loved him so much...you have captured the magic of a wise old soul and the connection he has with his tiny legacy. I loved what you had written in italics etc. Great narration and I smiled all the way through reading this. I also think fishing is one of the loveliest past times for a grandson and his grandpa. Great stuff.
Cheers closet xoxo
PS Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Hi, closet. Thank you, buddy, for your continued support and interest. I so appreciate your 'take' on my writing...you have such good sense and a keen eye for what works! I'm so sorry that a close bond isn't available for Jackson with his grandpa's. Substitute family can be such god-send, but still not the same thing at all. I'm fascinated by this mystical bond men have with fishing, in general. The life of Jesus is filled with allegories around the fish. Not so great for the fish, themselves, though! Jeez, I couldn't bring myself to put a worm on a hook, so I never made it out on a boat with my dad LOL. I do like to eat fish, though. The contest was won by another entry, but I appreciate your good wishes anywhooo. Think I'll keep out for a while with father's day coming up.
Comment from jdrago
Ok you got me, I had to stop and wipe my eyes. A great submission for the writing prompt. Though just a short story, you really establish the bond between the two which sets the rest of the story up so well. A very good use of 408 words. Good luck.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Ok you got me, I had to stop and wipe my eyes. A great submission for the writing prompt. Though just a short story, you really establish the bond between the two which sets the rest of the story up so well. A very good use of 408 words. Good luck.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Hi, there. What a lovely review! I really appreciate your wonderful good luck wishes and generosity. Thanks so much! Warm regards.
Comment from misscookie
I loved the artwork
It is perfect for you lovely poem
I loved how the poem flows
and your yours touched my heart. You had my attention from the first word to the last. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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I loved the artwork
It is perfect for you lovely poem
I loved how the poem flows
and your yours touched my heart. You had my attention from the first word to the last. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Hi, misscookie. Thank you, dear heart, for taking time to review my story. Glad you liked it! So appreciate your support, as always. Warm regards, Bev
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Your very welcome, take care un6til next time.
Comment from Espresso momma
How thoughtful to write of this for Michael. Michael should also write about his grandpa for his later memories. Thanks for a great story.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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How thoughtful to write of this for Michael. Michael should also write about his grandpa for his later memories. Thanks for a great story.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thanks, Espresso momma. Someday, when he's older, I'll show him the poem and ask him to share his memories too. Thanks for your great review and generous support. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Janie King
This is very good. I checked to make sure it was fiction. When it's believable then you've met the key for being a good fiction story. You have a good command owr word usage. God bless.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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This is very good. I checked to make sure it was fiction. When it's believable then you've met the key for being a good fiction story. You have a good command owr word usage. God bless.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Hi Janie. Gosh was a gracious and generous review! I very much appreciate your encouraging words. Blessings to as well. Bev
Comment from bhogg
Bev - I'm not just saying this....I'm out of sixes, and your post absolutely deserves one. In so few words, you succeeded in accomplishing the through the eyes of a child requirement, and also wrote a beautiful story. I think you just might win this contest. You'll get my vote. Warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Bev - I'm not just saying this....I'm out of sixes, and your post absolutely deserves one. In so few words, you succeeded in accomplishing the through the eyes of a child requirement, and also wrote a beautiful story. I think you just might win this contest. You'll get my vote. Warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Hi, Bill. Aw, thanks so much for your kind and generous review. I am honored that you found the story enjoyable, especially given the depth of your talent, Bill. That's as good as a six to me any day. A better story won, but I appreciate your offer for the vote. Warm regards, Bev
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Bev - I read both stories, and as so often happens on this site, when members vote, the "cutesy" post wins. Your story had ten times the depth.
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Aw, Bill, that is so lovely of you to say. What a nice man you are! Thanks so much...Bev
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading this story very much, I thought it was cleverly written and very well thought out. It was a pleasure to read. I was just wondering what s'mores are, I have read about them in a few stories and I wonder what they are.
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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I enjoyed reading this story very much, I thought it was cleverly written and very well thought out. It was a pleasure to read. I was just wondering what s'mores are, I have read about them in a few stories and I wonder what they are.
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Hi, Piggies Grandma. Thanks for your awesome review! I appreciate you taking time to read my story. S'mores are a camping favorite: you take hershey's chocolate, add roasted marshmallows, place them together between to graham crackers. If the marshmallows are still hot, they'll make the chocolate melt. MMM good! Warm regards, Bev
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I want one ...lol thanks for the explanation.
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Easty to make and fun to eat - but messy. Also, they have kits in the grocery stores which include all the ingreadients. Good eating! Bev
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
My father's father was the meanest man I've ever known
in my life; however, when he went fishing with my father
and I, I got a rare glimpse of what he could be when he
woould truly relax. Must be something about being on the
water with a grandchild, I suppose.
Thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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My father's father was the meanest man I've ever known
in my life; however, when he went fishing with my father
and I, I got a rare glimpse of what he could be when he
woould truly relax. Must be something about being on the
water with a grandchild, I suppose.
Thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Hi, Jan. I thank you much for your excellent review. So appreciate your generousity!
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mystery Author
I just loved this wonderful story. It's plain to see how much your grandfather meant to you. Reminds me of my own "Gramps". We never fished or hunted together. He gave up these favorite things when my grandmother had three strokes in a row. But I did chop and pile wood with him, played crazy eights, and ate some of Grammy's delicious soups and homemade bread. They were great days before he started showing signs of Alzheimers Disease.
I especially enjoyed the tale of spreading your grandfather's ashes on Crystal Lake by the whole family.
This was a pleasure to read, and review. Thanks so much for writing it!
And good luck in the contest!
cheers
Kimbob
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Hi Mystery Author
I just loved this wonderful story. It's plain to see how much your grandfather meant to you. Reminds me of my own "Gramps". We never fished or hunted together. He gave up these favorite things when my grandmother had three strokes in a row. But I did chop and pile wood with him, played crazy eights, and ate some of Grammy's delicious soups and homemade bread. They were great days before he started showing signs of Alzheimers Disease.
I especially enjoyed the tale of spreading your grandfather's ashes on Crystal Lake by the whole family.
This was a pleasure to read, and review. Thanks so much for writing it!
And good luck in the contest!
cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Hi, Kimbob. Thank you for sharing your wonderful memories with me. I am really honored by that. You are most kind and generous with your words of encouragement and awesome rating. Much appreciate the good wishes, also. Warm regards.
Comment from adewpearl
I asked Mom if there was a fishing pond - add the capital M since it's used as her name
Bev, I love the way you interweave this man's memories of childhood fishing with his Grandpa with the current day scattering of ashes - this is most moving. Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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I asked Mom if there was a fishing pond - add the capital M since it's used as her name
Bev, I love the way you interweave this man's memories of childhood fishing with his Grandpa with the current day scattering of ashes - this is most moving. Brooke
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thanks for catching the SPAG, Brooke. Should have remembered that one. I so appreciate your wonderful review. Much appreciated! Bev