Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from Vennan
You covered your subject well in this entertaining and thought-provoking poem.
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Here are three glitches you want to address:
You wrote: For a life time.
I suggest: For a lifetime.
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You wrote: With a one soft word
I suggest: With one soft word
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You wrote: Instead of it?s power
You need: Instead of its power
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All the best,
Vennan
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You covered your subject well in this entertaining and thought-provoking poem.
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Here are three glitches you want to address:
You wrote: For a life time.
I suggest: For a lifetime.
------------
You wrote: With a one soft word
I suggest: With one soft word
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You wrote: Instead of it?s power
You need: Instead of its power
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All the best,
Vennan
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2004
