Comment from Lise Deangelo

Excellent

This is excellent, Stevo. So hilarious. I really enjoyed this one. You develop quite a story in this poem. Wonderful imagination you show us in this. Love it. Good luck with the contest. Hope you do well.

 Comment Written 24-May-2011

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reply by the author on 24-May-2011

Thanks, Lise. It was a challenge to work those 'silly' phrases into the story and into the rhythm and rhyme. Once I got those sorted out, the story formed around them,
Thanks for the good luck wishes.
Steve

Comment from the blue pixel

Excellent

LOL A princess with a predilection for a right good Rodgering as the British would say. Perhaps she is a Goth but whatever she is, she is one wonderful piece of work as is your contest entry. If something else beats this one, I would want to know why? I love the way you think Steve, but you already knew that. Love it and best of luck to you. xx Pix

 Comment Written 23-May-2011

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reply by the author on 24-May-2011

Thanks, Pix.
Lots of funny entries in this and some weird and wonderful princesses.....
Steve

reply by the blue pixel on 24-May-2011

Could any princess be weirder than yours". I doubt it. lol. xx PIx

Comment from ksherwoodrn

Excellent

Fun, whimsical poem that speaks volumes about the princess yet has a message for all. Life is fleeting and although pleasure is for a season, reality eventually sets in....

 Comment Written 23-May-2011

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reply by the author on 23-May-2011

Thank you for the kind review. It is true that a message emerges in this, but that seems to happen without my noticing - I just create the vehicle!
Welcome to FanStory.
Steve

reply by ksherwoodrn on 23-May-2011

Thanks...and you're right, the message may be different for all.

Comment from Piggies Grandma

Excellent

This poem is well thought out and very entertaining. I thought it was well written and very funny. I felt a bit sorry for poor old Willy at the end.

Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 23-May-2011

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reply by the author on 23-May-2011

Well you could say she made her own bed and deserved to lie on it, but yes, I did try to make it a little sad, as per contest instructions.
Thanks for your review.
Steve

Comment from kymjo

Excellent

I think you did a great job!! I kinda wondered how someone would be able to work all that in and make it come out as great as you did. Well you showed me how. Keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 23-May-2011

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reply by the author on 23-May-2011

Thank you so much - the rules seem tough, but they have produced some hilarious results....
Steve

reply by kymjo on 24-May-2011

Yes they have and I think you have done quite well with all the rules. Good Luck in the contest.

Comment from chita

Excellent

You have a good flow with your poem-you are descriptive and rhyme well-you write of her in a humorous and cunning way leaving the imagination to go beyond your words--I like where you write(While Wilhelmina, alone again-Turns to the bottle to dull her pain) a powerful statement in your poem --great job.

 Comment Written 23-May-2011

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reply by the author on 23-May-2011

Thanks. It was atough prompt to fit everything in but it works well. All the entries so far are hilarious and I hope there are more entries still to come.
Steve

Comment from dtimes3

Excellent

Nicely written tale that flows and rolls down the page. Nice lusty imagery without going overboard - one might say tasteful if that is possible in this contest. Good luck and thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 23-May-2011

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reply by the author on 23-May-2011

Thank you for your kind comments.
Steve

Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

Wow, I didn't even notice this contest. That's okay because I wouldn't have entered with all the restrictions. You did a superb job with your entry and the poem was consistently funny throughout. You seemed to have a good time writing it and I know I had a good time reading it! Good luck in the contest. Surely this will be the winner!
Kind regards, Bev

 Comment Written 23-May-2011

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reply by the author on 23-May-2011

Thanks, Bev.
Yes, the restrictions made it tough, especially the 'silly' phrases that had to be included. There's still a couple of weeks to go if you want to try! All the entries so far are hilarious and I hope there are more entries still to come.
Steve

reply by Writingfundimension on 23-May-2011

Oh, I'm pretty sure I couldn't come up with anything nearly as good as you, Steve. If you win - and I hope you do - you will certainly have earned it! Take care, my friend. Bev

Comment from sgalletti

Exceptional

Absolutely hilarious Steve and most worthy of a six for the wonderful rhyming couplets, the great meter, the "following of all the intricate rules" and the huge guffaw you gave me. I adore Xylock and used to enter all of his contests (entered the original Knight contest LOL!)...will pass on this one, but my, oh my, you have a strong contender here. Hugs, Sue

 Comment Written 23-May-2011

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reply by the author on 23-May-2011

Thanks, Sue - it means something to get a Six from you but I am probably more delighted about the guffaw!
It was a real wrestle to get the 'silly' phrases to fit in.
There's still a couple of weeks to go if you want to try! All the entries so far are hilarious and I hope there are more entries still to come.
Steve

Comment from missy98writer

Excellent

I love your satirical spin of those princesses in the public who live their life in their virginals and they eat drugs like candy and dress like fifty cent whore's, but when their money is gone and looks fade all her posse, so called friends and family kick her to the curb like yesterdays trash. Your poem is brilliantly naughty. I bet you win this writing prompt. Your poem remind me of the Pink song title Stupid Girl.
Melissa.

 Comment Written 23-May-2011

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reply by the author on 23-May-2011

Thanks, Melissa.
All the entries so far are hilarious and I hope there are more entries still to come.
I haven't managed to play the Pink song yet, but I will when I get a decent connection.
Steve