Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from jonjo
"I know in my heart that
My spirit is unfaltering
not wavering or weakening
with excellent reasoning,
information, judgment, or grounds.
I have serenity, which brings peace
when I allow myself to relax
and to look forward
to what life has to offer me
and what I can offer life."
This is such a 'peaceful' read and so full of profound truths. It's well and fluently written and it's uplifting message can only inspire those who are still striving to attain it.
jj
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"I know in my heart that
My spirit is unfaltering
not wavering or weakening
with excellent reasoning,
information, judgment, or grounds.
I have serenity, which brings peace
when I allow myself to relax
and to look forward
to what life has to offer me
and what I can offer life."
This is such a 'peaceful' read and so full of profound truths. It's well and fluently written and it's uplifting message can only inspire those who are still striving to attain it.
jj
Comment Written 18-Nov-2004
Comment from Lainee
Hi Jewell. This poem is wonderful and shows your inner peace. I have never actually seen the word serenity used in such a manner before, almost narrative. I usually think of this word as absolute beauty within mind, body and soul. A great variation.
Goodluck,
Lainee :)
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Hi Jewell. This poem is wonderful and shows your inner peace. I have never actually seen the word serenity used in such a manner before, almost narrative. I usually think of this word as absolute beauty within mind, body and soul. A great variation.
Goodluck,
Lainee :)
Comment Written 18-Nov-2004
Comment from Street Penny
hey-hey, ms. ruby, there ya go! this one's like: a li'l something about yourself that you simply shuffled over to us, readers......so, it's refreshing to read, great flow of thoughts and wording, i've simply had no probs with this one, no way, nowhere. keep up the peaceful spirit, cuz that's something to treasure.
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hey-hey, ms. ruby, there ya go! this one's like: a li'l something about yourself that you simply shuffled over to us, readers......so, it's refreshing to read, great flow of thoughts and wording, i've simply had no probs with this one, no way, nowhere. keep up the peaceful spirit, cuz that's something to treasure.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2004
Comment from Shari_K
These are beautiful words of serenity. I am not at that point in my life yet where I am comfortable and have this peace but I hope to get there soon. Your lines seem to flow right into each other perfectly. The picture you've chosen is perfect and beautiful. Excellent poem!
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These are beautiful words of serenity. I am not at that point in my life yet where I am comfortable and have this peace but I hope to get there soon. Your lines seem to flow right into each other perfectly. The picture you've chosen is perfect and beautiful. Excellent poem!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2004
Comment from mfwilkie
This is excellant. The voice shows a clear and wellstated self-examination , comfortable with themselves. The words are powerful and and don't attack the reader with confrontation.
A few suggestions: I would drop the "I feel" it tends to give the picture of standing on a mountain top like Julie Andrews in "The Sound of Music"
with her arms in the air. The poem is stong and doesn't need this image.
I'd drop the "or" from in front of attachment.
In the verse, "information, judgement or grounds" , drop the "or" and change grounds to grounded.; putting it on a line by itself under information, judgement or saying I am grounded. cements the idea of a very together person.
Nice write.
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This is excellant. The voice shows a clear and wellstated self-examination , comfortable with themselves. The words are powerful and and don't attack the reader with confrontation.
A few suggestions: I would drop the "I feel" it tends to give the picture of standing on a mountain top like Julie Andrews in "The Sound of Music"
with her arms in the air. The poem is stong and doesn't need this image.
I'd drop the "or" from in front of attachment.
In the verse, "information, judgement or grounds" , drop the "or" and change grounds to grounded.; putting it on a line by itself under information, judgement or saying I am grounded. cements the idea of a very together person.
Nice write.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2004
Comment from Wm B. Naylor
A Jewell set in serenity. Hmmm. Nice thought. I liked the easy flow of this little meditation on serenity. One of the things I have always noticed about the good statea - it is very difficult, except in fiction or poetry - to imagine being in the opposite state.
Thanks for sharing
Sincerely
Will
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A Jewell set in serenity. Hmmm. Nice thought. I liked the easy flow of this little meditation on serenity. One of the things I have always noticed about the good statea - it is very difficult, except in fiction or poetry - to imagine being in the opposite state.
Thanks for sharing
Sincerely
Will
Comment Written 17-Nov-2004
Comment from Rick Koestler
This is a well written and uplifting poem. The pace and timing work well, and the premise is solid. I found no typos.
I would sum's that you have written poems depicting how you feel the moment the serenity is challenged by the slings and arrows of outrageous fortune.
Your work is a ray of light to those who have felt what you've written. But I wonder how it would affect someone who's having a bout with random acts of cruelty.
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This is a well written and uplifting poem. The pace and timing work well, and the premise is solid. I found no typos.
I would sum's that you have written poems depicting how you feel the moment the serenity is challenged by the slings and arrows of outrageous fortune.
Your work is a ray of light to those who have felt what you've written. But I wonder how it would affect someone who's having a bout with random acts of cruelty.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2004
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
I like that, Jewell but you know by talking to me that I've not quite attained the place within my soul. That agitation is still a little on the prevelant side. Very nice job, one of these days I'll find that place inside just as you can.
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I like that, Jewell but you know by talking to me that I've not quite attained the place within my soul. That agitation is still a little on the prevelant side. Very nice job, one of these days I'll find that place inside just as you can.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2004
Comment from jannieballiett
Ah, such serenity and inner peace, and confidence of self...
Excellent poem, wonderful flow and wonderflow message...very uplifting and something we all should strive for...
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Ah, such serenity and inner peace, and confidence of self...
Excellent poem, wonderful flow and wonderflow message...very uplifting and something we all should strive for...
Comment Written 15-Nov-2004
Comment from robertr36
You're there, Jewell. You've found the quiet place many long for but few find.
It is there for all who seek to do the Lord's will.
Bless you my friend,
Rob
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You're there, Jewell. You've found the quiet place many long for but few find.
It is there for all who seek to do the Lord's will.
Bless you my friend,
Rob
Comment Written 15-Nov-2004
